Lay off the cookies
Such expansion in such a short time.8 total reviews
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very cute idea with your cartoon image! Is it or was it 'true love' or not?
IMHO these short poems make for a better FS presentation if a larger font is used. Since you chose to use a question mark, consider adding a period after 'on' and capitalizing 'but.'
Best wishes in the contest voting.
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Very cute idea with your cartoon image! Is it or was it 'true love' or not?
IMHO these short poems make for a better FS presentation if a larger font is used. Since you chose to use a question mark, consider adding a period after 'on' and capitalizing 'but.'
Best wishes in the contest voting.
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Thank you Mark so much for your help. I've changed it. Hugs Jen
Comment from Boogienights
Hahaha...hilarious poem because I can relate to this. My downfall is donuts and I'm currently trying to lose pounds to keep up with my fit husband. Thanks for the smile, best of luck in the contest. :)
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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Hahaha...hilarious poem because I can relate to this. My downfall is donuts and I'm currently trying to lose pounds to keep up with my fit husband. Thanks for the smile, best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 13-May-2021
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So pleased I made you smile. Thanks. Jen
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ha ha ha, this made me smile Jen! Often weight gain comes with feeling comfortable in a relationship, but it can go too far! Especially in America it seems where there are lots of obese people, this is a lot of fun, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Ha ha ha, this made me smile Jen! Often weight gain comes with feeling comfortable in a relationship, but it can go too far! Especially in America it seems where there are lots of obese people, this is a lot of fun, love Dolly x
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thanks Dolly so glad you liked it. Love Jen.
Comment from robyn corum
Jen,
hahahahahaha I mean, not that it matters.... just checking. hahahaha
I get it. Love is love. We don't love what's on the outside, but what's on the inside. Even so -- come on.... At some point, you don't even look like the person I chose! hahaha
Thanks for the smile!
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Jen,
hahahahahaha I mean, not that it matters.... just checking. hahahaha
I get it. Love is love. We don't love what's on the outside, but what's on the inside. Even so -- come on.... At some point, you don't even look like the person I chose! hahaha
Thanks for the smile!
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thanks robyn.So glad you like it. Hugs. Jen
Comment from tfawcus
Oh, dear. Food addiction strikes again! Mind you, he's a very brave man, floundering in dangerous waters on that topic! Of course, this is just as likely to be the woman talking. They seem to be able to get away with calling us fat. LOL
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Oh, dear. Food addiction strikes again! Mind you, he's a very brave man, floundering in dangerous waters on that topic! Of course, this is just as likely to be the woman talking. They seem to be able to get away with calling us fat. LOL
Comment Written 12-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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That is true Tony but who said life was fair? Thanks for commenting. Take care. Jen.
Comment from Eunice Amero
I like this poem but you better count your syllables you only have 24. Keep up the good work. Wish you the best. I love that picture it is so meaningful to the poem. It made me laugh.
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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I like this poem but you better count your syllables you only have 24. Keep up the good work. Wish you the best. I love that picture it is so meaningful to the poem. It made me laugh.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you so much for the great review and super stars.
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you are welcome.
Comment from DentedSyke
I liked this, actually, but I don't like it as a 25-syllable poem. Put it in a short story or flash fiction - or even as a line in a script. The writing is good, but it reads like something that one would say to an overweight spouse. I apologize if this sounds harsh because it really is funny with the picture you put up. It simply isn't poetry. Still, I think you'd be a wonderful writer of humorous short pieces or novels. I really do!
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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I liked this, actually, but I don't like it as a 25-syllable poem. Put it in a short story or flash fiction - or even as a line in a script. The writing is good, but it reads like something that one would say to an overweight spouse. I apologize if this sounds harsh because it really is funny with the picture you put up. It simply isn't poetry. Still, I think you'd be a wonderful writer of humorous short pieces or novels. I really do!
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thanks
Comment from rspoet
This is an excellent poem for the contest
with a theme many can relate to.
Sugar is one of those things that tastes great,
but does nothing good for you.
Excellent choice of art work.
Best wishes.
Robert
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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This is an excellent poem for the contest
with a theme many can relate to.
Sugar is one of those things that tastes great,
but does nothing good for you.
Excellent choice of art work.
Best wishes.
Robert
Comment Written 08-May-2021
reply by the author on 08-May-2021
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Thanks so much Robert. I am happy that you like it
