You Can't Take it With You
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Comment from Boogienights
I like your poem because it lists all of the seven deadly sins, and the consequences of committing them. I like how you formatted the poem and it flowed nicely. Best of luck in the contest. :)
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I like your poem because it lists all of the seven deadly sins, and the consequences of committing them. I like how you formatted the poem and it flowed nicely. Best of luck in the contest. :)
Comment Written 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Gert sherwood
Hello unknown author
I see that you did all the deadly sin.
Well done, I like how you rhymed your poem. And brought out that the seven deadly sins are entwined,
Gert
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Hello unknown author
I see that you did all the deadly sin.
Well done, I like how you rhymed your poem. And brought out that the seven deadly sins are entwined,
Gert
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much Gert. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
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You are most welcome ?
Gert
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
This is an interesting approach to the contest, Mystery Author. You did a good job expressing what each of the seven deadly sins mean using poetic verse. I like the use of bold font on those sins. I wonder if the CEC will take a negative look at this since the rules tat 'write poem that involves on of the seven deadly sins. Not sure. I'l defer to the CEC. But your poem is till well thought out and presented. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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This is an interesting approach to the contest, Mystery Author. You did a good job expressing what each of the seven deadly sins mean using poetic verse. I like the use of bold font on those sins. I wonder if the CEC will take a negative look at this since the rules tat 'write poem that involves on of the seven deadly sins. Not sure. I'l defer to the CEC. But your poem is till well thought out and presented. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much Jan. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a well written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. Great entry for the deadly sins. Very fitting photo to compliment your words. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
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This is a well written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. Great entry for the deadly sins. Very fitting photo to compliment your words. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Wendy G
A clever poem, mentioning each sin in its own verse. You are right in that they are all intertwined, because they all show a life which is not submissive to God's will - love for God and love for neighbour. Well done.
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A clever poem, mentioning each sin in its own verse. You are right in that they are all intertwined, because they all show a life which is not submissive to God's will - love for God and love for neighbour. Well done.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from karenina
Clever you! Nice touch to put each sin in BOLD as you created a stanza for each one...
Ah! The great flood! (I was thinking baptism)---both work, for your poetic purpose.
Maybe put LAYS in quotation marks? Not a grammar scholar, but there must be some way to identify it as a brand without slapping a copyright symbol beside it!
Yo list it as humor, and your wit is sharp and clever. Still wisdom it is...we should forge it, never!
Good luck in this contest!
Karenina
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Clever you! Nice touch to put each sin in BOLD as you created a stanza for each one...
Ah! The great flood! (I was thinking baptism)---both work, for your poetic purpose.
Maybe put LAYS in quotation marks? Not a grammar scholar, but there must be some way to identify it as a brand without slapping a copyright symbol beside it!
Yo list it as humor, and your wit is sharp and clever. Still wisdom it is...we should forge it, never!
Good luck in this contest!
Karenina
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much Karenina. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
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I enjoyed it! Might as well shed light on ALL of the seven deadly sins!--Karenina
Comment from Jennifer L Newcomb
This was fantastic in many ways. The writing style, the tone, the message, and the price we pay with living our life. Great idea to put into bold the seven deadly sins to give such emphasis. Thank you for sharing and I wish you luck in the contest.
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This was fantastic in many ways. The writing style, the tone, the message, and the price we pay with living our life. Great idea to put into bold the seven deadly sins to give such emphasis. Thank you for sharing and I wish you luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much for the six stars. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from aquainsanity12
I really like this poem! Yeah, I agree that you couldn't pick just one. All seven sins must be written about, and you've done very nicely!
Hope this wins the contest because this is a really great poem! (Should be a big awakening to people, honestly)
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I really like this poem! Yeah, I agree that you couldn't pick just one. All seven sins must be written about, and you've done very nicely!
Hope this wins the contest because this is a really great poem! (Should be a big awakening to people, honestly)
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much for the six stars. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
You Can't Have Just One
Good entry for the Deadly Sins writing prompt contest but needs some work. The contest calls for ONE of the SEVEN sins, you have all of them.
The context is odd...
"The deadly sins number seven," (the deadly seven sins)
"Avoiding them is hard you will find," (you will find avoiding them it's hard)
"Bragging upon your deeds,
Down to Hell it will lead," (bragging about your deeds will lead you to hell)
Etc....
The rhymes seem forced.
I think if you work on it it will be much better.
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reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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You Can't Have Just One
Good entry for the Deadly Sins writing prompt contest but needs some work. The contest calls for ONE of the SEVEN sins, you have all of them.
The context is odd...
"The deadly sins number seven," (the deadly seven sins)
"Avoiding them is hard you will find," (you will find avoiding them it's hard)
"Bragging upon your deeds,
Down to Hell it will lead," (bragging about your deeds will lead you to hell)
Etc....
The rhymes seem forced.
I think if you work on it it will be much better.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 12-May-2021
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Thank you very much. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I think if we our honest with ourselves we have all suffered from one or more of these sins, I try not to be lazy, eat too much, get angry or envious, stuff myself with chocolate, brag or lust after my neighbour's husband, how difficult life is! Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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I think if we our honest with ourselves we have all suffered from one or more of these sins, I try not to be lazy, eat too much, get angry or envious, stuff myself with chocolate, brag or lust after my neighbour's husband, how difficult life is! Much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-May-2021
reply by the author on 11-May-2021
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Thank you very much Dolly. I appreciate you taking the time to read and review my poem.
