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Our Last Goodbye

Dear God, how do I do this?

32 total reviews 
Comment from eliz100
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This is a beautifully written story. So much emotion in so few words. You used your words so well that each sentence packs a punch. By the way how is the movie coming along.

 Comment Written 18-May-2021


reply by the author on 18-May-2021
    Like you, I too am falling behind on thanking everyone. Trying to get stuff done around the house and take care of the apartments (I truly hate being a landlord) is stealing my time from FanStory. Forgive me for just saying thank you and I appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from muffinmama
Exceptional
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This is a brilliantly expressed experience of letting go of someone who is your love and with whom you have shared a life.
The scene is so poignant and heartbreaking. Letting go is a final unselfish act, but the pain is still unbearable.
May your memories sustain you.

 Comment Written 16-May-2021


reply by the author on 16-May-2021
    You are awesome. thank you so much for understanding the love and the pain entwined in my words. Saying it was okay was the last thing I wanted to do, but the greatest piece of me I could ever offer him. I miss him so much but he is in a better place without pain. I appreciate your kindness and the lovely stars. Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Wow! It's hard to watch somebody take their last breath. I can understand that. My prayers go out to you. It made for a really good contest entry and I wish you the best of luck.

 Comment Written 14-May-2021


reply by the author on 14-May-2021
    Yes, I never wanted to leave him but knowing that each breath was closer to taking him away was murder. thanks for the review. Carol
Comment from tfawcus
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Huge emotion squeezed into these hundred words. So much lies unwritten between the lines.
The death of a loved one is never easy to deal with. The gap left in one's life is unfillable.
My heartfelt condolences.

 Comment Written 14-May-2021


reply by the author on 14-May-2021
    Yes, I cried to hard when I wrote it. thought I didn't have another tear left in me until I wrote Life Before Us. The pain is difficult but the memories are worth it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Audra J Perez
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great work, no complaints this is honestly such a moving poem and id love to read more everyone on here is so talented, im truly moved by this, im not sure what more to add to be honest, keep it up!

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    thank you for the repeated comments regarding my writing. I truly appreciate it. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Suzanna Ray
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Dear BA, I do hope by sharing this story, as painful and heart wrenching as it is, will be part of the healing process. By reading your other stories I have discovered that you use your writing as your way of working through everything. All it will take is some time, Before the pain finally goes away.

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thank you, Suzanna. You are a very astute reader. I do use my writing to express my emotions. I can't usually verbalize without being a crybaby, but when I write, I can release the emotions...just me and the computer. Of course, I cry, but the computer doesn't make fun of me. LOL, I appreciate your great review. Smiles, Carol
reply by Suzanna Ray on 14-May-2021
    Dear BA, I am glad your computer does not make fun of you. Most people have a hard time dealing with someone with big red eyes and a runny nose.
reply by the author on 14-May-2021
    Yes, me too! Almost got electrocuted from all the water in the keyboard. LOL
Comment from estory
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It's a short but pretty intense little scene. The realistic dialogue really draws us in and keeps us riveted here, and we can hear the pain in the voices under the surface. There's a lot between the lines here. A lifetime of a relationship being torn apart. estory

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Yes, it was the hardest moment of my life. letting go. I was lost, wondering how I could live without him. But he's always here in my heart and I'm writing again because that's what he wanted me to do. Thanks for reading my story. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wils
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It seems wrong to call this a beautiful write yet that is exactly what it is. A hard piece to write I an sure but one that made me there with you at every word.
Geoff

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    thank you, Geoff. Yes, it was probably the hardest piece I have ever written. Reliving each second brought me to tears... but knowing how special we were together... it was all worth it. Thanks for the review. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
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What a moving story, and I can see how hard it would be to put the words together. It is beautiful as your love shines through, and you have conveyed that sense of inevitability and dread and fear very well. Blessings to you. I hope you can find comfort.

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    Thanks, Wendy...He is with me always in my heart and my faith. It was the most difficult story I had to write. I appreciate you taking the time to read and comment. Smiles, Carol
Comment from Iza Deleanu
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Such a sad story but it's easily the story of my life too. ..with the last moments of his life. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writing

 Comment Written 13-May-2021


reply by the author on 13-May-2021
    we all seem to have too much sadness tugging at our hearts with family ill, friends unable to share, Covid restrictions... We need to step out and breath the air again. Smiles, Carol