Remembering Yesterday
Viewing comments for Chapter 122 "1991 As The Year Begins"A widow's journey into her relationship with her
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Comment from William Stephenson1
Your recall is remarkable. These episodes in your family will be much appreciated. I would urge you to look at each of them and ask yourself is there is a teachable moment in any of them. How was your life enriched because of it?
I'm looking forward to the story of the court case.
Bill Stephenson
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reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Your recall is remarkable. These episodes in your family will be much appreciated. I would urge you to look at each of them and ask yourself is there is a teachable moment in any of them. How was your life enriched because of it?
I'm looking forward to the story of the court case.
Bill Stephenson
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Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you for the review. I'm sure there were plenty of teachable moments that I let pass, but I love my life and really wouldn't change a lot. I'd do it all over if I could. There were more good moments than bad but the bad ones make more interesting stories. LOL If you new on FanStory welcome.
Beth
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Another interesting chapter, Beth. I do enjoy the recall of your families life. You certainly had an interesting life.
They seem to take turns standing in the spotlight and getting the needed attention. Well done. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Another interesting chapter, Beth. I do enjoy the recall of your families life. You certainly had an interesting life.
They seem to take turns standing in the spotlight and getting the needed attention. Well done. Nancy:)
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you for the great review and comments, Nancy.
I appreciate you continuing to read my story.
Beth
Comment from Earl Corp
I was in the Army for Desert Storm. I guess you're not old enough to remember watching the Vietnam War on television, or did yopu mean this was the first war with 24 hour news channels? I'm looking forward to reading your short story.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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I was in the Army for Desert Storm. I guess you're not old enough to remember watching the Vietnam War on television, or did yopu mean this was the first war with 24 hour news channels? I'm looking forward to reading your short story.
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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No, I'm certain not too young but we didn't have 24 hour news channels in those days and I was working late hours and missing the 30 minute news shows. Did they really show it live? Those were days when I avoided even listening to news, even when I could. Thanks for the review.
Beth
Comment from Ben Colder
Sorry to be out of six. This is a good take. I found myself feeling sorry for your daughter. If anyone tried to make it, she did. I applaud you and Evan for your patients with her. I can hear my Mary telling me, "We just need to love them through it." Good one Beth.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Sorry to be out of six. This is a good take. I found myself feeling sorry for your daughter. If anyone tried to make it, she did. I applaud you and Evan for your patients with her. I can hear my Mary telling me, "We just need to love them through it." Good one Beth.
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you Chuck. Christi has always been the biggest problem. She has a good heart, but sometimes she is hard to love. As parents we couldn't help but love her anyway, and I've always felt sorry for her. She tries. but she can't love herself enough to stop hurting herself.
Beth
Comment from Begin Again
Good morning, Beth... Your synopsis (the beginning) of how life has changed is so accurate and unreal at the same time. Everything unfolds in front of us now. Brutality is often fodder instead of shock.
I was reading, thinking it sounded like a quiet beginning except for Connie's struggles, and then ...boom... the cave incident occurred.
You have done and will continue to do an except job of recapping your life for your children. I hope they appreciate your story.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Good morning, Beth... Your synopsis (the beginning) of how life has changed is so accurate and unreal at the same time. Everything unfolds in front of us now. Brutality is often fodder instead of shock.
I was reading, thinking it sounded like a quiet beginning except for Connie's struggles, and then ...boom... the cave incident occurred.
You have done and will continue to do an except job of recapping your life for your children. I hope they appreciate your story.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 19-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you Carol. I appreciate you reading my story and your nice comments. I had some error to correct. I shouldn't post things with I'm tired.
Beth
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I am guilty of that one...all the time!
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Your story is as interesting as it always is. There are a few things you might want to change. In para 4 ". . . cap on the number . . .court would here (should be hear)". Para 6 "Christi . . . no work nor was (should be were) many . . . Keep on writing. Your kids will appreciate having your story.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Your story is as interesting as it always is. There are a few things you might want to change. In para 4 ". . . cap on the number . . .court would here (should be hear)". Para 6 "Christi . . . no work nor was (should be were) many . . . Keep on writing. Your kids will appreciate having your story.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you Carol. I appreciate you continuing to read my story and make comments. Thank you for pointing out the errors.
Beth
Comment from Jay Squires
I like the backstory about the earlier war between Israel and Palestine, as well as your conclusions raised about our loss of innocense.
Then it seemed as if the world was falling apart around around us. [Too many around.]
to remove it without damagine you eye. [Misspell]
nor was many people calling for massages. [Nor WERE many people ...]
This was not an ethical thing for her to have done. without permission. [I think you meant for a comma after "done", not a period. Actually, there shouldn't even be a comma.]
*Since it will be five more years before we learn the results of the court case, [Beth, you have a problem keeping your tenses straight. If you are making a note to the reader, and it isn't part of the memoir where you use the 2nd person (you) to refer to your husband, then you need to say, "Since it WOULD be five more years before we LEARNED...]
if you are interested in outcome. [... interested in THE outcome.]
I enjoyed, as I always have, the vividness of your memories.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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I like the backstory about the earlier war between Israel and Palestine, as well as your conclusions raised about our loss of innocense.
Then it seemed as if the world was falling apart around around us. [Too many around.]
to remove it without damagine you eye. [Misspell]
nor was many people calling for massages. [Nor WERE many people ...]
This was not an ethical thing for her to have done. without permission. [I think you meant for a comma after "done", not a period. Actually, there shouldn't even be a comma.]
*Since it will be five more years before we learn the results of the court case, [Beth, you have a problem keeping your tenses straight. If you are making a note to the reader, and it isn't part of the memoir where you use the 2nd person (you) to refer to your husband, then you need to say, "Since it WOULD be five more years before we LEARNED...]
if you are interested in outcome. [... interested in THE outcome.]
I enjoyed, as I always have, the vividness of your memories.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you so much for continuing to review and comment on my story and thank you also for helping me find the things that I need to correct. I've made the correction.
Beth
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My pleasure, Beth. I love your writing.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
That guy's been calling all this time--must be months! I recall she gave two of the kittens to trick-or-treaters. Christi is a piece of work indeed! I'll be looking out for THE DEADLINE!
Our lawyer warned us there was a cap on the number of cases the court would here=>HEAR.
It required day surgery at the hospital, in order to remove it without damagine=>DAMAGING you=>YOUR eye.
We felt bad for Christi because she had gone a month with no work nor was=>WERE many people calling for massages.
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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That guy's been calling all this time--must be months! I recall she gave two of the kittens to trick-or-treaters. Christi is a piece of work indeed! I'll be looking out for THE DEADLINE!
Our lawyer warned us there was a cap on the number of cases the court would here=>HEAR.
It required day surgery at the hospital, in order to remove it without damagine=>DAMAGING you=>YOUR eye.
We felt bad for Christi because she had gone a month with no work nor was=>WERE many people calling for massages.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you for the review and help. Connie will eventually be the one who gets rid of that cat guy for us. Thank you for help with the errors. I repost the short story in a day or so.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
So many stories in this one. I really appreciate your reflection on how numb we have become to all the violence. I was so busy with work during the Gulf War days, I hardly watched the news. You're right we are now inundated with news of wars and shootings.
So glad that Lenny's friends were rescued. It's not a great event to be on the broadcast news for trespassing and endangering their lives. I did like that sweet picture of Lenny caring for Connie. But you hinted that they didn't end up marrying. I'll have to wait to see what happens next.
One typo:
damagine you eye. (damaging your)
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reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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So many stories in this one. I really appreciate your reflection on how numb we have become to all the violence. I was so busy with work during the Gulf War days, I hardly watched the news. You're right we are now inundated with news of wars and shootings.
So glad that Lenny's friends were rescued. It's not a great event to be on the broadcast news for trespassing and endangering their lives. I did like that sweet picture of Lenny caring for Connie. But you hinted that they didn't end up marrying. I'll have to wait to see what happens next.
One typo:
damagine you eye. (damaging your)
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Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 19-May-2021
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Thank you Helen, I really appreciate the review and comments. I've corrected several errors which reviews pointed out. I'm always pleased when people help me find them. A few always seem to slip by.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
This was a great chapter. I don't know what repelling is I had it marked as spag but you repeated it so obviously an American thing?? Great storytelling again.
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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This was a great chapter. I don't know what repelling is I had it marked as spag but you repeated it so obviously an American thing?? Great storytelling again.
Comment Written 18-May-2021
reply by the author on 18-May-2021
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It means using a rope to go don't a steep ledge or mountainside. I would think it would be used in Australia as well. Thank you so much for the review and and six stars. I will take another look at the work and make sure I've used it correctly.
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Actually the word is rappelling so I'm glad you saw that.
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Ah well, I did some good what does it mean? You answered in next. We call that abseiling.
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Abseiling.
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You're right. :You do have a different word. I've never heard that one. Repelling is also a word but wasn't the one I needed. It means something the is repulsive and makes you want to back away.
