Love at First Sound
A Race-Less Portrait13 total reviews
Comment from country ranch writer
Live the descriptions meeting this guy who captured your attention.sounds like the swiss alps and its of cocoa being drank.goid job keep up the good work luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Live the descriptions meeting this guy who captured your attention.sounds like the swiss alps and its of cocoa being drank.goid job keep up the good work luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jun-2021
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Thank you for a great review.
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Smile🐊🐊🐊
Comment from aryr
Good luck in the Race-Less Portrait contest, Yvonne. This was delightful to read and I am so glad that Nils over came his discomfort about being at the conference. Thanks to Millicent he no longer felt like a fish out of water. She also became a success in his life. Very well done.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Good luck in the Race-Less Portrait contest, Yvonne. This was delightful to read and I am so glad that Nils over came his discomfort about being at the conference. Thanks to Millicent he no longer felt like a fish out of water. She also became a success in his life. Very well done.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you, both for the review and for the good wishes. Much appreciated.
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You are most welcome, Yvonne.
Comment from Begin Again
Spectacular... You have done a magnificent job of blending our society and with no particular finger-pointing at all. I enjoyed the story and found it quite entertaining. Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Spectacular... You have done a magnificent job of blending our society and with no particular finger-pointing at all. I enjoyed the story and found it quite entertaining. Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you. I appreciate that.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Yvonne.
You managed to use identifying characteristics through dialogue without introducing the subject of race at any time.
I tried to remember if I've ever mentioned race in any of the things that I've written here and I do recall that I did mention ralphie as a dog. He's unmistakably one of the dog race.
Good luck in the contest. I liked your story.
Robert
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Hello Yvonne.
You managed to use identifying characteristics through dialogue without introducing the subject of race at any time.
I tried to remember if I've ever mentioned race in any of the things that I've written here and I do recall that I did mention ralphie as a dog. He's unmistakably one of the dog race.
Good luck in the contest. I liked your story.
Robert
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Hahaha. I'd love to meet Ralphie. Thanks, Robert.
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You're welcome Yvonne.
Comment from Ulla
Awe, Yvonne, isn't this the sweetest story of two people, from different parts of the world, meet and fall in love. And then they lived happily after in Noway. The name,and fjords was a give away. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Awe, Yvonne, isn't this the sweetest story of two people, from different parts of the world, meet and fall in love. And then they lived happily after in Noway. The name,and fjords was a give away. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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You got it. I've love to visit there. Thank you for reviewing. I'm happy you liked it.
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It's a beautiful country but so very expensive. I flew there on a regular basis when I was a cabin attendant. x
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I'm surprised that it's expensive. There goes my dream of a visit. lol. I couldn't go anyway. 8-)
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I'm sorry to hear that. The whole if Scandinavia is very expensive but Norway takes the price.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good image for your story.
-It is very well written with
good descriptive detail and
smooth flow from one
idea to the next.
-We get a good picture of
the conference and Nils.
-I like the imagery in the
final two paragraphs, and
the outcome for these two
participants in the conference.
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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-A good image for your story.
-It is very well written with
good descriptive detail and
smooth flow from one
idea to the next.
-We get a good picture of
the conference and Nils.
-I like the imagery in the
final two paragraphs, and
the outcome for these two
participants in the conference.
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you for reviewing and for the good wishes. Hope all is well with you and yours.
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You are very welcome. Things are good here, and hope they are with you, too. The only complaint is having summer temperatures in May. It feels like August!
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I know. I hate it already. I've been sitting outside as much as I can before it gets unbearably hot, and before the mosquitoes map me out for dinner. However, the mosquitoes couldn't wait. Yikes! I wish we could eliminate summer. lol
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This is particularly unusual for us, and I know what you mean about mosquitoes.
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You think Noah would have smashed those two he had onboard. lol
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I had to look at the replies to get the drift; I didn't think there was a Noah in the story, ha, ha! Brain is on vacation as evening descends. I think I will make that a monostich entry!
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My brain takes frequent vacations. lol
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😊
Comment from Pantygynt
This a splendid idea. The multi-national conference sets a scene your readers could easily visualise and the end is of course straight out of the fairy tales of your childhood.
I did feel that the conversation bordered a touch on bending the guideline: 'without making any reference to race or ethnicity'. The man's opening remark is in the Norwegian tongue and the reproduction of accent could perhaps seen as a 'reference to race or ethnicity'. You have described his accent brilliantly in the second paragraph so I would suggest that you make no reference to it in direct speech. Have him speak perfect English. Many Norwegians can. It won't weaken your story.
Oh yes! I almost forgot. I wish the pair of you every happiness. Lol.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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This a splendid idea. The multi-national conference sets a scene your readers could easily visualise and the end is of course straight out of the fairy tales of your childhood.
I did feel that the conversation bordered a touch on bending the guideline: 'without making any reference to race or ethnicity'. The man's opening remark is in the Norwegian tongue and the reproduction of accent could perhaps seen as a 'reference to race or ethnicity'. You have described his accent brilliantly in the second paragraph so I would suggest that you make no reference to it in direct speech. Have him speak perfect English. Many Norwegians can. It won't weaken your story.
Oh yes! I almost forgot. I wish the pair of you every happiness. Lol.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you. I struggled with the idea of the language. It was wrong to give that much away. You are right as usual. 8-)
Comment from Bill Schott
This story, Love at First Sound, brings two people together from different ends of the earth. The The accent still leaves a wide opening for ethnicity or location. A fun tale that ends in a fairy tale fashion. Nice.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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This story, Love at First Sound, brings two people together from different ends of the earth. The The accent still leaves a wide opening for ethnicity or location. A fun tale that ends in a fairy tale fashion. Nice.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you. I did give a bit away, but it could be anywhere in Scandinavia, I thought.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sweet story and I loved the sentiments and how this man's accent when straight to your heart and nurtured love that blossomed, a fine tale of love at first sound! Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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This is a sweet story and I loved the sentiments and how this man's accent when straight to your heart and nurtured love that blossomed, a fine tale of love at first sound! Love Dolly x
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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Thank you so much. I'm afraid I gave away a bit too much, but it could be anywhere in Scandinavia. Right? hahahaha
Comment from Wendy G
What a lovely story - very romantic! Wondered if it is fact or fiction. Without exactly saying his nationality we can deduce the approximate region of the world! A well-written piece - thanks for sharing, and best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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What a lovely story - very romantic! Wondered if it is fact or fiction. Without exactly saying his nationality we can deduce the approximate region of the world! A well-written piece - thanks for sharing, and best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 23-May-2021
reply by the author on 23-May-2021
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I'm afraid it's pure fiction. (Sigh). Thanks for a lovely review. I thought it could be anywhere in Scandinavia.
