Comment from writer723

Excellent

This is an intriguing story. It reminds me of some of the original Grimm Brother's fairy tales before they were edited into children's tales. I enjoyed your twist ending and thought it was very clever. Pinocchio is clearly still wanting to be a real boy. Sounds like he almost succeeded this time. Very interesting take on Jack and Jill's nursery rhyme. Good job!

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Thank you for the fantastic review, Writer. I haven't heard of the Grim Bro's before. I'll have to see if I can find anything of theirs. Sounds right up my alley. Lol. I really appreciate the generous stars. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.

Ron

Comment from Rebel Jim

Excellent

Oh that's funny... SSOO did the chicken cross the road or did it
become a chicken pancake?!...
I definitely like your entry, couldn't find any faults with it...
My compliments on a job well done!... Keep on truckin'!!

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Thank you for the great review and stars, Jim. I'm glad you liked this silly piece. Have a great rest of your weekend.

Ron

reply by Rebel Jim on 06-Jun-2021

So did the chicken cross the road...
Or did it become a chicken pancake?!

Comment from Jannypan (Jan)

Excellent

Hahaha, hope the chicken didn't answer. I enjoyed your fun little story contest entry. Your picture is supportive and you give readers good details to set the scene. The ending was hilarious. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan

 Comment Written 02-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 06-Jun-2021

Thank you for the great review and stars, Jan. I hope you have yourself a wonderful rest of your weekend.


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Ron