Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Hi JeninTorre,

Bwahahah! I did NOT expect this twist at the end with the accompanying picture of an elder woman. Best left this info unspoken to Joe! Great entry for the Poetry with a Twist contest. I know you will win :-)

All the best,
Senyai

 Comment Written 06-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021

Thanks. It came 3rd. Take care. Jen.

reply by Senyai on 07-Jun-2021

Congratulations, Jenin!!

Comment from Brenda Henderson

Excellent

Thank you for the belly laugh. I definitely did not see the end coming! The poem reads well with excellent pace and cadence. The artwork is a perfect complement to this piece. Thank you for sharing. Well done!

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Thank you so much Brenda. Glad you like it. Jen.

reply by Brenda Henderson on 05-Jun-2021

You're Welcome!

Comment from roof35

Excellent

This made me chuckle and it certainly is a twist. It is well written and fun to read. It is an excellent entry for the Poetry with a Twist contest. Good luck.

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Many thanks. Jen

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

Ha ha ha, this is a naughty write and can often be true in some relationships that survive a lifetime of deceit. Your poem fulfilled the brief and you won my vote! Love Dolly x

 Comment Written 05-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 05-Jun-2021

Thank you Dolly. X

Comment from Patty Palmer

Excellent

This is really cute. The poem is good and I never saw that ending coming. It really took me by surprise. Good luck in the contest. You should do well with this one.
Patty

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021

Thanks Patty

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Your poem flows smoothly and well, and gives nothing away till the last couplet with the very ironic twist! I like the image of the sweet lady, the "perfect" wife and mother! Well written.

 Comment Written 04-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021

Thanks Wendy

Comment from lancellot

Excellent

This is very nice and yes it has a funny ending. I would suggest reducing the size of the picture so that the name, Dennis fits into the fourth line. That way your rhyme scheme stays intact. If it looks good to you, keep it. It may be my screen.

Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021

Many thanks

Comment from pharp

Excellent

Mystery Poet,

Wow! This is indeed a poem with a twist. I found this to be a most enjoyable read; I did not see this twist coming. It made me smile, and I enjoyed the humor.

The artwork is just darling...Excellent rhyming throughout with a very smooth flow, allowing for a most enjoyable read. The very best to you in the contest.

Blessings...Portia

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021

Thank you Portia for the great review.

Comment from Sharon Davis

Excellent

This poem meets the writing prompt requirement of ending with a twist.

You fo a great job of leading the reader away from the twist, until the concluding stanza. Well done.

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021

Thanks Sharon.

Comment from Jane Graille

Excellent

Your poem is well written and well executed. You succeded with the prompt. A naughty grandmother twist was most definitely unexpected. Thank you for making me smilel

 Comment Written 03-Jun-2021

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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021

Thanks Jane