Remembering Yesterday
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Comment from Judy Lawless
Another interesting chapter, Beth. You did have your challenges with the different personalities of your daughters. Sounds like Christi hasn't found the right man for her yet. Lenny seems to stabilize Connie, so I'm hoping that works our, but she's young yet, so who knows. Well done.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Another interesting chapter, Beth. You did have your challenges with the different personalities of your daughters. Sounds like Christi hasn't found the right man for her yet. Lenny seems to stabilize Connie, so I'm hoping that works our, but she's young yet, so who knows. Well done.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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You are right about the different personalities. I love them all, but some got under my skin a bit worse than others. Thanks so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from lyenochka
What an eventful year. I now am really curious as to what Connie told that man. I hope Christi stayed safe. And I'm guessing Connie and Lenny met other people in college? You hinted that they didn't get married.
Comments:
This would be last [year?] money Social Security (missing word here?)
In early summer, You and I (you)
little like haveing a family stalker. (having)
leasure time together. (leisure)
Niether of them (Neither)
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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What an eventful year. I now am really curious as to what Connie told that man. I hope Christi stayed safe. And I'm guessing Connie and Lenny met other people in college? You hinted that they didn't get married.
Comments:
This would be last [year?] money Social Security (missing word here?)
In early summer, You and I (you)
little like haveing a family stalker. (having)
leasure time together. (leisure)
Niether of them (Neither)
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments and help with the spags. I meant to say since Connie was eighteen, June would be the last month Social Security would add money for her care.
Beth
Comment from Sankey
This was another great chapter and glad I caught it. You did well. Only one small spag this time around. I hope this helps. Someone[,] left a death threat
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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This was another great chapter and glad I caught it. You did well. Only one small spag this time around. I hope this helps. Someone[,] left a death threat
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Your family saga continues and your children have different treats and personalities and the rebellious character of the younger ones it's so funny. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Your family saga continues and your children have different treats and personalities and the rebellious character of the younger ones it's so funny. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings and the next chapter.
Comment Written 04-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you Iza. I really appreciate the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
I love this book--keep it coming. I feel I know everyone!
This would be [insert: THE] last money Social Security
With birthday cash and all the money [OMIT COMMA] she collected as graduation gifts [OMIT COMMA] she wasn't doing too bad
Denny seemed proud of the fact [OMIT COMMA] he once burned down a man's barn, because the man had killed his dog.
Someone [OMIT COMMA] left a death threat on her desk, probably as a sick joke.
leasure=>LEISURE time
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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I love this book--keep it coming. I feel I know everyone!
This would be [insert: THE] last money Social Security
With birthday cash and all the money [OMIT COMMA] she collected as graduation gifts [OMIT COMMA] she wasn't doing too bad
Denny seemed proud of the fact [OMIT COMMA] he once burned down a man's barn, because the man had killed his dog.
Someone [OMIT COMMA] left a death threat on her desk, probably as a sick joke.
leasure=>LEISURE time
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you, Elizabeth. I'm so glad you're still enjoying this. I appreciate you great help.
Beth
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
It seems like it was another eventful chapter in your family's life. Finally, everyone is fully grown up -- yet not without issues to resolve. It's good that you set some guidelines for your kids still living at home. I never heard of gloxinia plants, but I just looked them up, and they're so beautiful. I wonder if they're related to orchids.
Here's my list of errors and suggestions:
whatever she chose to do without anyone objecting.
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whatever she chose to do, without anyone objecting.
This would be last money Social Security would add to your check for Connie's care.
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This would be the last money Social Security would add to your check for Connie's care.
With birthday cash and all the money, she collected as graduation gifts,
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With birthday cash and all the money she collected as graduation gifts,
She and Lenny and two other couples planned a trip to Florida ...
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She and Lenny and two other couples planned a trip to Florida, ...
they were spending a lot of time sun-bathing
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they were spending a lot of time sunbathing
He must have gotten rough with her ...
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He must have gotten rough with her, ...
Someone, left a death threat on her desk,
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Someone left a death threat on her desk,
In early summer, You and I ...
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In early summer, you and I ...
He rang the bell and knocked but Connie didn't answer.
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He rang the bell and knocked, but Connie didn't answer.
It was a little like haveing a family stalker.
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It was a little like having a family stalker.
Later on in the summer on Lenny's birthday, his father and step-mother,
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Later on in the summer on Lenny's birthday, his father and stepmother,
Both of us were interested in genealogy so spent some time talking about that subject.
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Both of us were interested in genealogy so we spent some time talking about that subject.
Connie began College at Chattanooga State ...
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Connie began college at Chattanooga State ...
Lenny started as a sophmore at the University of Tennessee in Chattanooga.
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Lenny started as a sophomore at the University of Tennessee in Chattanooga.
Connie and Lenny still planned to spend their leasure time together.
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Connie and Lenny still planned to spend their leisure time together.
Niether of them would be living on campus.
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Neither of them would be living on campus.
Lenny is connie boyfriend. He is a sophmore in college.
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Lenny is Connie's boyfriend. He is a sophomore in college.
Denny is Christi's latest boyfirend.
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Denny is Christi's latest boyfriend.
He works in a plant nextdoor to Christi's work.
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He works in a plant next door to Christi's work.
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It sounds as though Christi was easily frightened -- although sometimes, with good reason. I'm not sure if the three-kitties-in-a-boat guy got a fair shake, but I suppose you may never find out. Family stalker... I'm sorry, but that one made me laugh, just a little. If he was an actual sicko, he wouldn't have disappeared so readily. He probably reached the correct conclusion (with a little help from Christi) that he had worn out his welcome.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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It seems like it was another eventful chapter in your family's life. Finally, everyone is fully grown up -- yet not without issues to resolve. It's good that you set some guidelines for your kids still living at home. I never heard of gloxinia plants, but I just looked them up, and they're so beautiful. I wonder if they're related to orchids.
Here's my list of errors and suggestions:
whatever she chose to do without anyone objecting.
-->
whatever she chose to do, without anyone objecting.
This would be last money Social Security would add to your check for Connie's care.
-->
This would be the last money Social Security would add to your check for Connie's care.
With birthday cash and all the money, she collected as graduation gifts,
-->
With birthday cash and all the money she collected as graduation gifts,
She and Lenny and two other couples planned a trip to Florida ...
-->
She and Lenny and two other couples planned a trip to Florida, ...
they were spending a lot of time sun-bathing
-->
they were spending a lot of time sunbathing
He must have gotten rough with her ...
-->
He must have gotten rough with her, ...
Someone, left a death threat on her desk,
-->
Someone left a death threat on her desk,
In early summer, You and I ...
-->
In early summer, you and I ...
He rang the bell and knocked but Connie didn't answer.
-->
He rang the bell and knocked, but Connie didn't answer.
It was a little like haveing a family stalker.
-->
It was a little like having a family stalker.
Later on in the summer on Lenny's birthday, his father and step-mother,
-->
Later on in the summer on Lenny's birthday, his father and stepmother,
Both of us were interested in genealogy so spent some time talking about that subject.
-->
Both of us were interested in genealogy so we spent some time talking about that subject.
Connie began College at Chattanooga State ...
-->
Connie began college at Chattanooga State ...
Lenny started as a sophmore at the University of Tennessee in Chattanooga.
-->
Lenny started as a sophomore at the University of Tennessee in Chattanooga.
Connie and Lenny still planned to spend their leasure time together.
-->
Connie and Lenny still planned to spend their leisure time together.
Niether of them would be living on campus.
-->
Neither of them would be living on campus.
Lenny is connie boyfriend. He is a sophmore in college.
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Lenny is Connie's boyfriend. He is a sophomore in college.
Denny is Christi's latest boyfirend.
-->
Denny is Christi's latest boyfriend.
He works in a plant nextdoor to Christi's work.
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He works in a plant next door to Christi's work.
***
It sounds as though Christi was easily frightened -- although sometimes, with good reason. I'm not sure if the three-kitties-in-a-boat guy got a fair shake, but I suppose you may never find out. Family stalker... I'm sorry, but that one made me laugh, just a little. If he was an actual sicko, he wouldn't have disappeared so readily. He probably reached the correct conclusion (with a little help from Christi) that he had worn out his welcome.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Mary Kay again you come to my rescue with your help. My computer went out and I'm trying to use a tiny lap top and I can't half see what I'm doing. The keyboard is so small. I felt bad about the boat guy with kitty updates. He was probably just looking for a family to relate too.
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You're very welcome, dear Beth. Actually I do almost all my work on a little cellphone (although I haven't been doing much of my own writing lately; mainly just reviewing on FanStory and sending emails for my church). I have been blessed with an eye for detail and while I have fairly good vision up-close, that's taken a hit in recent years. When I was a kid, I remember threading needles for my Grandma... now I need a funny little device called a needle threader. It came in a sewing kit and I didn't know how to use it, at first, but I googled it, and found out... just to darn a cheap sock. Anyway, I'm happy to help :-)
Yeah, poor boat guy. But you were away, so what could you do? At least he had the three cats to keep him company. May God take care of him, if he's still (hopefully) around.
Love and blessings, Mary Kay xoxo
Comment from Leann DS
You did a good job in writing this segment. It flowed nicely and was an easy read. If I may, I noticed a few typos as follows: This would be last money Social Security would add to your check ...
- be the last
By mid-June, Connie and her friends left for their Florida vacation. She called several times and they seemed be having ...
-seemed to be
Lenny is connie boyfriend. He is a sophmore in college.
- Connie's
Denny is Christi's latest boyfirend.
- boyfriend
I hope this is helpful. Thank you for sharing, and have a great evening. Hugs to you.
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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You did a good job in writing this segment. It flowed nicely and was an easy read. If I may, I noticed a few typos as follows: This would be last money Social Security would add to your check ...
- be the last
By mid-June, Connie and her friends left for their Florida vacation. She called several times and they seemed be having ...
-seemed to be
Lenny is connie boyfriend. He is a sophmore in college.
- Connie's
Denny is Christi's latest boyfirend.
- boyfriend
I hope this is helpful. Thank you for sharing, and have a great evening. Hugs to you.
Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 04-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the excellent review and comments and for noticing the my errors.
Beth
Comment from mermaids
You have a full plate with your children, their careers and relationships. The man who adopted the three kittens is a little strange, I wonder how the cats liked living on the boat. Your story continues to be interesting.
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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You have a full plate with your children, their careers and relationships. The man who adopted the three kittens is a little strange, I wonder how the cats liked living on the boat. Your story continues to be interesting.
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for the review and comments.
Beth
Comment from Cass Carlton
I enjoyed this piece. It is folksy and human and I like the way the author "talks" to her deceased husband. I can relate to that, having lost my own life's partner in February of 2019.For sometime after he'd gone, I'd find myself setting the table for two, and other little acts that held him close.
Your family sound as though they are very normal and feet on the ground sort of people.
I can't say that I blame Connie for her actions towards the "Kitty man" I think I'd have done much the same in her shoes. This looks like an
interesting piece to follow. We'll see won't we?
cheers Cass
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reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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I enjoyed this piece. It is folksy and human and I like the way the author "talks" to her deceased husband. I can relate to that, having lost my own life's partner in February of 2019.For sometime after he'd gone, I'd find myself setting the table for two, and other little acts that held him close.
Your family sound as though they are very normal and feet on the ground sort of people.
I can't say that I blame Connie for her actions towards the "Kitty man" I think I'd have done much the same in her shoes. This looks like an
interesting piece to follow. We'll see won't we?
cheers Cass
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Comment Written 03-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jun-2021
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Thank you Cass, I really appreciate you reading my story. I very much enjoyed reading your comments. It isn't easy getting use to being without our mates. My husband died in 2017 but we had 61 years together.
Beth
