Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 38 "Football Chapter 19 part 2"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from estory
We see this dance between Katherine and Gabriel continuing, as she has this little talk with him about this race, and Mr. Edwards seems to have discerned there is something going on between them. It's all realistic and the dialogue continues to be good, but this chapter does seem to be dancing around the main movement a bit. I would move the story along a little more, cut a more meaningful exchange between them and a more important developement in their relationship. estory
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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We see this dance between Katherine and Gabriel continuing, as she has this little talk with him about this race, and Mr. Edwards seems to have discerned there is something going on between them. It's all realistic and the dialogue continues to be good, but this chapter does seem to be dancing around the main movement a bit. I would move the story along a little more, cut a more meaningful exchange between them and a more important developement in their relationship. estory
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I will consider the advice and thank you for it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Love this one. I have everything crossed for the girls to win the race, even though I'm sure they will. I can just see the boys faces when they have to pick a dance!! Wonderful chapter, and now I can't wait to read what happens. Well done, Barbara. Sorry it's so late, I thought everything was done with our moving but it's not just furniture and curtains to worry about, there are so many other things we don't think of!! :))Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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Love this one. I have everything crossed for the girls to win the race, even though I'm sure they will. I can just see the boys faces when they have to pick a dance!! Wonderful chapter, and now I can't wait to read what happens. Well done, Barbara. Sorry it's so late, I thought everything was done with our moving but it's not just furniture and curtains to worry about, there are so many other things we don't think of!! :))Sandra xxx
Comment Written 10-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jun-2021
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I understand how difficult moving is. Having been a military spouse for 23 years, we moved at least every 3 years, sometimes more often. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Poor coach nervous about the race and maybe that damn map will help with the race for the girls. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Poor coach nervous about the race and maybe that damn map will help with the race for the girls. Thank you for sharing and good luck with your next chapter.
Comment Written 09-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from amahra
My son must have been a serious Mama's boy because if I wasn't there to congratulated him after the game, I had to hear his mouthy complaints late. And I hope Katherine's concern about the race is not a setup for her girl's defeat. Great chapter.
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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My son must have been a serious Mama's boy because if I wasn't there to congratulated him after the game, I had to hear his mouthy complaints late. And I hope Katherine's concern about the race is not a setup for her girl's defeat. Great chapter.
Comment Written 08-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
the race is on and who will win? Katherine or Gabriel? In the following chapter we will find out...there is always so much competition even in running....good sportsmanship is a plus.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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the race is on and who will win? Katherine or Gabriel? In the following chapter we will find out...there is always so much competition even in running....good sportsmanship is a plus.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ulla
Hi Barbara, this is another fine chapter and it clearly shows how much she cares about the girl team. Now, as I do live in Europe, I don't know a lot about the game but the nervous anticipation comes through loud and clear. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Hi Barbara, this is another fine chapter and it clearly shows how much she cares about the girl team. Now, as I do live in Europe, I don't know a lot about the game but the nervous anticipation comes through loud and clear. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from AJ McCall
oohhh. I can't wait to see who wins. Katherine needs to calm down; her girls are gonna win. ( I can just tell.) Gabirel and his boys are going to be stuck doing the Orange Justice and the dab, lol. Can't wait to see what happens! Theanticipation is killing me!
P.S Why would he be teased forvever? It's just his mom...
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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oohhh. I can't wait to see who wins. Katherine needs to calm down; her girls are gonna win. ( I can just tell.) Gabirel and his boys are going to be stuck doing the Orange Justice and the dab, lol. Can't wait to see what happens! Theanticipation is killing me!
P.S Why would he be teased forvever? It's just his mom...
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Wait until you see what the boys do do. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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Oh, that sounds like a warning sign LOL. You're welcome!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-A good chapter that sets
things up for the challenge.
-The discussion about the
event is done well in the first half.
-I like the ending of that part
when Gabe and Mr. Edwards
talk about Katherine having set
Gabe up. It should be interesting
to see what happens.
-I wonder if Gabe will come
up with something to counter her plans?
-The second half is also good
as Katherine tries to get Gabe's
attention because she doesn't
have the map for the challenge.
-Well done, Barbara.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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-A good chapter that sets
things up for the challenge.
-The discussion about the
event is done well in the first half.
-I like the ending of that part
when Gabe and Mr. Edwards
talk about Katherine having set
Gabe up. It should be interesting
to see what happens.
-I wonder if Gabe will come
up with something to counter her plans?
-The second half is also good
as Katherine tries to get Gabe's
attention because she doesn't
have the map for the challenge.
-Well done, Barbara.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from tfawcus
There's a lot going on here in terms of the interaction between characters. It's interesting and adds spice. I'm enjoying the manoeuvring and jockeying for advantage!
"Girls, let('s) get started. We're just doing stretches."
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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There's a lot going on here in terms of the interaction between characters. It's interesting and adds spice. I'm enjoying the manoeuvring and jockeying for advantage!
"Girls, let('s) get started. We're just doing stretches."
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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I have corrected that error. Thank you for the catch. I appreciate the help.
Comment from Wendy G
I am looking forward to the big event - and seeing how the boys and their coach handle defeat by the girls! You show understanding of teenage boys and their embarrassment re their mothers. Well written.
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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I am looking forward to the big event - and seeing how the boys and their coach handle defeat by the girls! You show understanding of teenage boys and their embarrassment re their mothers. Well written.
Comment Written 07-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 07-Jun-2021
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I raised four boys and have lived to tell about it. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
