Betrayal
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Comment from DSchlosser
I am always up for reading about pets being saved. It shocked me when the vet offered to put the dog down, and I'm glad Grant decided to save the dog instead. It's just a novel, but it's hard to read about animals being put down. I'm surprised Rapier was so hesitant with the dogs. He's definitely one that is up for anything with the trick he pulled.
I'll say one thing though, people do hesitate and move quickly when they encounter German Shepherds. My dog, Pixie, is one and I leave her off the leash in the front yard, and people have crossed to the other side of the street due to her size. Makes me feel a lot safer in the neighborhood, so this was a good reaction in the book when Rapier saw them.
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I am always up for reading about pets being saved. It shocked me when the vet offered to put the dog down, and I'm glad Grant decided to save the dog instead. It's just a novel, but it's hard to read about animals being put down. I'm surprised Rapier was so hesitant with the dogs. He's definitely one that is up for anything with the trick he pulled.
I'll say one thing though, people do hesitate and move quickly when they encounter German Shepherds. My dog, Pixie, is one and I leave her off the leash in the front yard, and people have crossed to the other side of the street due to her size. Makes me feel a lot safer in the neighborhood, so this was a good reaction in the book when Rapier saw them.
Comment Written 20-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 21-Sep-2021
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I couldn't have the dog put down in real life, either, so I wasn't going to let this little lad be put down. He was a lucky one being rescued by Grant. Thank you for another lovely review, David. You're my hero!! Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment from Sanku
This is a brilliant chapter.you have succeeded in etching out the finer points of your characters-Grants love of Dogs and even in a situation like this he thought of saving the dog;then the fiend Rapier and his nemesis , the dogs.
You have thrown light into the villain's nature....and as usual you have ended this with us readers hanging on to the edge of our seats.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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This is a brilliant chapter.you have succeeded in etching out the finer points of your characters-Grants love of Dogs and even in a situation like this he thought of saving the dog;then the fiend Rapier and his nemesis , the dogs.
You have thrown light into the villain's nature....and as usual you have ended this with us readers hanging on to the edge of our seats.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2021
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What a really lovely review, Sanku, you've made my day, and put the biggest smile on my face. Thank you so very much, I'm sending a big hug over the pond for the lovely sixth star! Thank you! :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from estory
You have a great style with this telling of the story from multiple viewpoints, from the criminal Rapier to the detective Grant, and the captive Tania. We get the emotions of each along the way. I think the scene where Grant rescues the dog was pretty well done; we see Grant's compassion there and we have to feel for the dog the way you describe him whining and hurt in the sinking house on the water after the storm. estory
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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You have a great style with this telling of the story from multiple viewpoints, from the criminal Rapier to the detective Grant, and the captive Tania. We get the emotions of each along the way. I think the scene where Grant rescues the dog was pretty well done; we see Grant's compassion there and we have to feel for the dog the way you describe him whining and hurt in the sinking house on the water after the storm. estory
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this lovely review, estory, I really appreciate that you like the way I'm writing this one. I've only ever written in first person before, and have found this is so much better for getting inside all their heads. I'm delighted you think so, too. Thank you, my friend.:)) Sandra xxx
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Sandra.
This is truly an exceptional chapter. you developed more of the character of rapier, who is another antagonist in the story. He can only be distinguished from Colin by the degree of evil. Each of them is capable of doing horrible things to people. The difference between rapier and Colin is that Colin is more subtle and quiet in his evil. Rapier sells his and puts it on a sign board so everyone can see it.
The other twist is the response of Grant to the puppy. in this chapter you actually amplify the protagonist character to a greater volume. He cannot only distinguish good from evil, he can do good, and he can fight against evil.
To me this chapter moved the story more to a character study of the two men. This is superbly written.
Robert
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Hello Sandra.
This is truly an exceptional chapter. you developed more of the character of rapier, who is another antagonist in the story. He can only be distinguished from Colin by the degree of evil. Each of them is capable of doing horrible things to people. The difference between rapier and Colin is that Colin is more subtle and quiet in his evil. Rapier sells his and puts it on a sign board so everyone can see it.
The other twist is the response of Grant to the puppy. in this chapter you actually amplify the protagonist character to a greater volume. He cannot only distinguish good from evil, he can do good, and he can fight against evil.
To me this chapter moved the story more to a character study of the two men. This is superbly written.
Robert
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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What an amazing review, Robert, thank you so very much! It's a slightly different story to Scouts! lol.
I was especially pleased that you thought I'd developed my characters well. That's a hard part. Thank you, you have really made my day, my friend. And sending you a big hug for the sixth star!! :)) Sandra xx
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You're very welcome Sandra.
Robert
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
At this time of the week, I am bereft of sixes. So sorry, Sandra. This chapter creates the suspense that is needed in this story that is rife with
meanness and hatred. Yet, hope prevails as the story flows. There may yet be cause for hope.
Congratulations on #1in All Time Best.
Ralf
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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At this time of the week, I am bereft of sixes. So sorry, Sandra. This chapter creates the suspense that is needed in this story that is rife with
meanness and hatred. Yet, hope prevails as the story flows. There may yet be cause for hope.
Congratulations on #1in All Time Best.
Ralf
Comment Written 23-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Aw thank you, Ralf, your words are more than six stars to me.You will learn a bit more about Rapier in the next part, which might give you an idea why he is so mean. But, yes things will start to look up. Thank you my friend. I really appreciate your kindness. Warm hugs. Sandra xxx
Comment from tfawcus
This chapter has most deservedly shot you up into the first position in this month's rankings. Congratulations!
The dog rescue scene shows a softer side to Grant's character that is sure to go down well with Tania!
Rapier is being portrayed as the most fiendish of characters. I wonder if we will eventually find that he has some redeeming features or justification for his sadism. The villain who is all bad becomes a caricature. Just a thought.
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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This chapter has most deservedly shot you up into the first position in this month's rankings. Congratulations!
The dog rescue scene shows a softer side to Grant's character that is sure to go down well with Tania!
Rapier is being portrayed as the most fiendish of characters. I wonder if we will eventually find that he has some redeeming features or justification for his sadism. The villain who is all bad becomes a caricature. Just a thought.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jun-2021
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Thank you so very much for this lovely review, Tony, and for sharing your thoughts about Rapier. I see what you mean, and will work on that. I have an idea flitting through my mind already. So many readers want him to be eaten by the German shepherds! Lol. I think we have a few sadists on here, too!!!
Thank you also for that golden sixth star, my friend, that is so nice of you. Have a wonderful day, warm hugs. Sandra xx
Comment from muffinmama
The juxtaposition of Grant's humanity and Rapier's sick cruelty and sadism provides the main point of tension, I think. The race against time gives the advantage to the Rapier, who would never bother to waste time to save a dog. Fortunately, you have four people working on the problem, so ideas are more plentiful.
Rapier's thoughts perfectly display his personality, a more effective method than describing him.
It's really coming to a head in this chapter. At first, I thought, how mean of you to make it so short! But after checking again, I realized it wasn't all that short. It just reads quickly because of the anxiety-producing plot.
Comments:
My main comment is about the first sentence; I think it's a bit awkward.
'It was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane.' I would write it as follows for a better flow: Because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane, Grant drove his speedboat with care through the gently lapping waves.
- 'Yeah, Keep hold of him...' - small 'k' for keep
Can't wait for the rest!
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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The juxtaposition of Grant's humanity and Rapier's sick cruelty and sadism provides the main point of tension, I think. The race against time gives the advantage to the Rapier, who would never bother to waste time to save a dog. Fortunately, you have four people working on the problem, so ideas are more plentiful.
Rapier's thoughts perfectly display his personality, a more effective method than describing him.
It's really coming to a head in this chapter. At first, I thought, how mean of you to make it so short! But after checking again, I realized it wasn't all that short. It just reads quickly because of the anxiety-producing plot.
Comments:
My main comment is about the first sentence; I think it's a bit awkward.
'It was with care that Grant drove his speedboat through the gently lapping waves because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane.' I would write it as follows for a better flow: Because of the rubbish that had been dumped in the water by the hurricane, Grant drove his speedboat with care through the gently lapping waves.
- 'Yeah, Keep hold of him...' - small 'k' for keep
Can't wait for the rest!
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Hi Ryma, thank you so much for this wonderful review. I really liked your suggestion for the first sentence and changed mine for yours. It does read so much better now. Thank you for that.
I was also especially pleased that you thought it was a short part, when in fact there is over 1700 words. I had to stop because I thought people might say the opposite to what you said, but no one mentioned the length. You've really made my day with this review, my friend. Thank you so very much. :) Sandra xxx
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Rapier it's a sadistic killer, he has no mercy and no concept of humanity. I really hope that Grant will put him out of his misery. Thank you for sharing another exciting chapter.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Rapier it's a sadistic killer, he has no mercy and no concept of humanity. I really hope that Grant will put him out of his misery. Thank you for sharing another exciting chapter.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much, Iza, for reading this horrific part. To think that there are actually men,(and women) out there just like Rapier. They aren't human. Grant won't let him get away with this, don't worry! Warm hugs, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx
Comment from lancellot
Well, I must say this is a very clean and crisp chapter. I like the dog rescue, that alone would immediately get the heart beating for many readers and pull them into the chapter. Smooth scene transitions and then a great sense of danger and hook at the conclusion of the chapter insuring the reader will return. Brilliant work!
I took notes.
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Well, I must say this is a very clean and crisp chapter. I like the dog rescue, that alone would immediately get the heart beating for many readers and pull them into the chapter. Smooth scene transitions and then a great sense of danger and hook at the conclusion of the chapter insuring the reader will return. Brilliant work!
I took notes.
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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What a lovely review, Lancellot, and the added sixth star, that was so
kind of you! Thank you so very much. Everyone did like the dog rescue, and I'm pleased you did, too. I had to smile that you took notes as well, that really made my day. Thank you again, my friend. :)) Sandra
Comment from alexisleech
As usual, I really enjoyed your latest chapter, Sandra. Full of suspense, but also enriched by the 'dog' situation and the inner thinking of the evil killer, you had my eyes glued to the screen from start to finish. I did wonder if Rapier would make his way to Grant's island while he was away trying to rescue Jose's family, and my worst fears were realised very quickly. I just hope Anna and the children are still alive, but your clever pen leaves the reader guessing with regard to their fate.
Bravo!
Alexis xxx
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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As usual, I really enjoyed your latest chapter, Sandra. Full of suspense, but also enriched by the 'dog' situation and the inner thinking of the evil killer, you had my eyes glued to the screen from start to finish. I did wonder if Rapier would make his way to Grant's island while he was away trying to rescue Jose's family, and my worst fears were realised very quickly. I just hope Anna and the children are still alive, but your clever pen leaves the reader guessing with regard to their fate.
Bravo!
Alexis xxx
Comment Written 22-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 22-Jun-2021
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Everyone enjoyed the dog rescue! Lol. it's those little things that make it real, I think. Thank you so much for the lovely six stars, Alexis, and this wonderful review. You've put a big smile on my face. Sending you a warm south of England hug. (thought it's bloody cold today!) xxx Sandra xxx
