The Apple Picker
A story from long ago21 total reviews
Comment from Becky Kern-Taylor
What a beautiful story, poetic style. It was written with such ease, the wording was magnificent, PS I didn't have a 6 star left. Honestly, it almost made me cry. Now I have a mission, I am going to write a tear-jerking poem, with a lovely ending like yours. Bless you.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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What a beautiful story, poetic style. It was written with such ease, the wording was magnificent, PS I didn't have a 6 star left. Honestly, it almost made me cry. Now I have a mission, I am going to write a tear-jerking poem, with a lovely ending like yours. Bless you.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this amazing review and for your kind and generous words. :)
Comment from Chrissy710
Hi Boogienights
Have just come over this beautiful poem well done and congratulations on your win
A lovely story in rhyme and easy to read meter
Also the message is for everyone to take on board as kindness cost nothing but means so much
Cheers Chris
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Hi Boogienights
Have just come over this beautiful poem well done and congratulations on your win
A lovely story in rhyme and easy to read meter
Also the message is for everyone to take on board as kindness cost nothing but means so much
Cheers Chris
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this exceptional review, I'm so glad you liked it. Have a wonderful weekend. :)
Comment from Mary Kay Bonfante
Beautiful story written in a poem, about golden apples, with a golden moral at the center. A kind deed done for a stranger literally sprouts fruit bountifully and unexpectedly.
One suggestion for improvement, for clarification:
And if you don't take comfort
in just knowing you did right.
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And if you don't, take comfort
in just knowing you did right.
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Very well written, with good rhymes throughout, and a great illustration. Children will enjoy this.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Beautiful story written in a poem, about golden apples, with a golden moral at the center. A kind deed done for a stranger literally sprouts fruit bountifully and unexpectedly.
One suggestion for improvement, for clarification:
And if you don't take comfort
in just knowing you did right.
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And if you don't, take comfort
in just knowing you did right.
***
Very well written, with good rhymes throughout, and a great illustration. Children will enjoy this.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the correction and for the great review. :)
Comment from Senyai
Hi Anon,
This is quite lovely! A sweet moral tale of giving and receiving for treating your fellow man with kindness and lending a helpful hand.
Too many are jaded these days, and don't follow this rule which fosters such an atmosphere of division and strife.
It's poems like these that were what children of old grew up on, love, kindness and hope.
Much enjoyed your artfully crafted tale.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Hi Anon,
This is quite lovely! A sweet moral tale of giving and receiving for treating your fellow man with kindness and lending a helpful hand.
Too many are jaded these days, and don't follow this rule which fosters such an atmosphere of division and strife.
It's poems like these that were what children of old grew up on, love, kindness and hope.
Much enjoyed your artfully crafted tale.
Have a great weekend,
Senyai
Comment Written 02-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this very nice review. You have a wonderful weekend as well. :)
Comment from blondie560
I enjoyed your story very much and I liked that it was teaching children to not only be kind, but to offer to share what little you may have with someone who has even less. And there is a guardian angel looking out for you.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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I enjoyed your story very much and I liked that it was teaching children to not only be kind, but to offer to share what little you may have with someone who has even less. And there is a guardian angel looking out for you.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this great review, it's so appreciated. :)
Comment from ValKul
Very nice!
I believe you meant to say 'thought the whole thing odd' but currently the word 'though' is there instead. I like the moral of this story. And the tempo of the poem is very good. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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Very nice!
I believe you meant to say 'thought the whole thing odd' but currently the word 'though' is there instead. I like the moral of this story. And the tempo of the poem is very good. Great job! Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 01-Jul-2021
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You have an eye for detail. Thanks so much, I must have read that 20 times and missed that every time. I really appreciate the review and the correction. :)
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I've done the same thing!! it's maddening :)
Comment from WriterHeather
Wonderfully imaginative! I loved every minute of the poem! It is such a wonderful moral. And I think it's a great message that if you treat other well they are likely to pass it on! Well done!
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Wonderfully imaginative! I loved every minute of the poem! It is such a wonderful moral. And I think it's a great message that if you treat other well they are likely to pass it on! Well done!
Comment Written 30-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 30-Jun-2021
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Thank you so much for this excellent review, it's very appreciated. :)
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Thank you so much for this excellent review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Sally Law
I'm so sorry to offer only five stars, that just doesn't seem sufficient for this marvelous poem! It's storybook quality and a pleasure to read. Magnificent accomplishment, dear mystery poet. If this doesn't win, I'll want to know why.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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I'm so sorry to offer only five stars, that just doesn't seem sufficient for this marvelous poem! It's storybook quality and a pleasure to read. Magnificent accomplishment, dear mystery poet. If this doesn't win, I'll want to know why.
Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, I'm thrilled that you like it. :) It's always great to hear from you.
Comment from Anne Johnston
What a great entry for this contest. Your poem is very well-written, easy to read and tells a great story. I like the moral you have portrayed:
"The moral of the story is,
be kind and share with others.
For God is watching how we treat,
our sisters and our brothers."
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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What a great entry for this contest. Your poem is very well-written, easy to read and tells a great story. I like the moral you have portrayed:
"The moral of the story is,
be kind and share with others.
For God is watching how we treat,
our sisters and our brothers."
Comment Written 29-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, I'm thrilled with this fantastic review, it really means the world to me. I really appreciate it. :)
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You are so welcome
Comment from equestrik
This is a really pleasant write for the moral of the Story contest. It reads well and has wonderful rhythm and cadence. Children, I think, will enjoy it. Well done.
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reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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This is a really pleasant write for the moral of the Story contest. It reads well and has wonderful rhythm and cadence. Children, I think, will enjoy it. Well done.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jun-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate this great review. :)
