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Matahari Terbenam

Twilight falls -

38 total reviews 
Comment from harmony13
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This poem is beautiful! I found the author's words beyond the sky into
the heavens. The poem flows and connects well. The color purple is
very spiritual to me. The artwork is lovely and compliments these words.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Hi Harmony,

    Thank you for the warm review and thoughts! Thanks for sharing your thoughts with me. Means so much to connect with other writers as your time is truly appreciated.

    Have a great weekend and coming week,
    Senyai
Comment from Raul1
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This is a well written poem. I like your lune poetry. It is interesting and unique. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing! Good luck!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Hi Raul,

    Thank you sir, for wonderful review and for sharing your thoughts with me.
    I appreciate your time spent assessing my work and wish you well in yours
    :-)

    Have a great weekend and coming week,
    Senyai
reply by Raul1 on 09-Jul-2021
    You're welcome and thank you!
Comment from robyn corum
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S,

You happen to be describing one of my favorite times of day. *smile* The back of my house faces West. I can be going about my daily routine and completely oblivious of the outside world and anything else that might be happening. Walking by with a load of laundry, preparing a meal for my two grandgirls, or headed to the bathroom - and pass the back sliding glass doors.

And time stops. We get the most breathtaking sunsets. And all over again, I'm reminded of a God who loves His creation and daily bestows blessings upon us. It's like a wake-up call. Beautiful.

Thanks for this simulation! Good luck!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Hi Robyn,

    This is such a beautiful review and I am so glad you shared your thoughts with me. It means so much to connect with other writers and hear their stories and read their work too.

    Your review is far better than my little Lune, lol, but thank you so much for this mental picture of Robyn standing in front of her sliding glass door in awe of a scarlet sunset streaming across the sky :-) Beautiful!

    Lovely review, madam and give your little granddaughters a hug for me.

    Have a great weekend and coming week,
    Senyai
reply by robyn corum on 09-Jul-2021
    Certainly!
Comment from MissMerri
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A lovely lune indeed, I like your idea of linking the descent of twilight with the word grace. It brings to mind the image of a benevolent king. The next line continues the idea of royalty with soft purple. The final line puts everything in perspective. Very beautifully done Sendai. This should do very well in this contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Hi MissMerri,

    Oh, your warm words are such a welcome feeling. I?ve had a trying day but it is drawing to a close. Thank you from the bottom of my heart for the gift of six stars from a truly talented poet as yourself.

    Yes, I adore twilight, it is magical and mystical as the day prepares for night. Homing pigeons come home to roost and so do us people, lol. I am so glad you made the reference to royalty in the color purple and to ?grace? as in a benevolent king. Now my Lune has been transformed by you into a deeper meaning for myself. Wonderful :-)

    Again, you have made my evening satisfying as my Lune spoke to you, MissMerri. Thank you for sharing your thoughts with me.

    I love your beautiful work!

    Always,
    Senyai
Comment from elchupakabra
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I like how the piece rolls off the tongue and I enjoyed the use of the title to set up the work. It is certainly a nice photo. Great work and good luck in the contest. Later daze.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
    Hi Elchupakabra,

    Thank you very much for your super review and for sharing your thoughts.
    Means so much to connect with other authors and read their work. I think I will peruse your portfolio this coming week if you don?t mind :-)

    All the best,
    Senyai
reply by elchupakabra on 09-Jul-2021
    Not at all. Later daze :)
Comment from RGstar
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Another beautiful ....another beautiful poem, despite its length. Plenty of imagery and beauty, but how could I expect anything less? Such is your quality.
My best wishes.
Have a lovely week.
RG

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi RGstar,

    Thank you for such a kind and outstanding review. I always enjoy hearing from such a talented poet. Congratulations on your win of Poem of the Month! Beautiful and powerful poem lifting all women up to protect themselves from abuse of any kind. Well deserved, RG :-)

    Always,
    Senyai
reply by RGstar on 08-Jul-2021
    Best wishes, Senyai...thank you. Have a lovely evening.
Comment from lyenochka
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How cool to learn that "Matahari Terbenam" means sunset! I like how your three lines flow right into each other. Twilight's "soft purple hues" is the perfect time to be inspired to write a lune. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi Lyenochka,

    Does your beautiful name start with an "i" or and "L"? I want to get it right :-)

    Yes, I love twilight too. It is a mystical time and perfect for poets to be inspired. Thank you for a lovely review and kind words.

    Have a great week,
    Senyai
reply by lyenochka on 08-Jul-2021
    HI Senyai,
    You can call me Helen.
    Lyenochka is the dimunitive of Lena which is a short form of Elena - the Russian equivalent of Helen, my nickname in Russian classes. 😊
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Twilight falls -
Matahari Terbenam
by Senyai

Wonderful entry for the Lune Poetry Contest.

Good syllables count. The connection can be improved, something like this...

twilight falls with grace
in purple
hues of time and space

Just an idea. Your poem is good the way it is. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi Gypsy,

    Ahh, I thank you for your suggestions. Will consider them and appreciate your attention to detail. Your reviews are always welcome, Gypsy!

    Take care, my friend :-)
    Senyai
Comment from Begin Again
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Regardless of how difficult a day has been, it always seems to calm my spirit when I stand on the deck and watch the sunset. The blending of the colors is like magic, and it seems so soothing and peaceful... exactly how I wish the day would be... or maybe it's just the calm before the storm (the darkness), but it gives me strength to endure.

Beautiful poem, and the picture is awesome. Thanks for sharing.

Hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi Carol,

    This is a stunning review and beautiful thoughts! Yes, I think twilight is a magical mystical time from which to draw strength. I love to see the close of the day and marvel at the colors that change before my eyes.

    Thank you for you thoughts. It means so much that you shared them with me:-)

    Take care,
    Senyai
reply by Begin Again on 08-Jul-2021
    Smiles and hugs...Carol
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
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Very romantic indeed. You have painted a beautiful image in my mind! I love these natural phenomena and have painted hundreds of them for FAR too. Twilight time is almost like a religious moment - a sacred natural experience that repeats itself every day. Good luck!

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi Seshadri,

    Good to hear from you! Yes, I love twilight too. It is such a mystical time of day. I love your perfect words, ? ? almost a religious moment - a sacred natural experience that repeats itself every day?. Beautiful!

    Thank you for these lovely words. Your review far exceeds my poem :-)

    Have great week,
    Senyai
reply by Seshadri_Sreenivasan on 08-Jul-2021
    I'm flattered :):) Thank you!