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As Daylight Fades

Rhyming poetry ~ Rondeau

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Comment from Sharon Davis
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This Rondeau poem is beautifully written and paints a vivid picture for the reader. The imagery is well incorporated.

The rhyming scheme creates a smooth flow, making this piece an easy and enjoyable read.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello Sharon. Thanks so much. It was difficult for me to write the rondeau. It took me two weeks to get it right. So glad you liked it!!

    Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
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This is a beautifully written poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. Beautiful overall presentation and font choice. Lovely photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello Joanne. I am so delighted that you liked the rondeau form. It was challenging to me? took me two weeks to get it right ;). Thanks so very much.

    Melissa
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
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Hi Sugarray.
First off, I wish I could give you a six, but I'm out.
This is a flawless rondeau with rhyme and meter scheme followed correctly.
You have great descriptors...reflections of a maiden's blush...so pretty.
Rondeaus are hard and you've met the challenge admirably!
Best luck with this strong entry.
Katiemae

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello KatieMae. Thank you for your lovely comments on the rondeau. I am so delighted you liked it!!! :)

    Melissa
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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As Daylight Fades
by Sugarray77

Great entry for the Rhyming Poetry Contest. I like the Rondeau form. The rhymes do not seem forced. Your poem flows well. It draws on emotions and it presents strong images.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello Gypsy. Thank you. This was a challenge to me :). It took me two weeks to get it right. LOL. I appreciate your comments on it.

    Melissa
Comment from Roxanna Andrews
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This is really beautiful, great words, rhyme and amazing picture. I hope you do great in the contest. I've been gone a while, needed a break. Hope all is well with you.

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    It is so very good to read your name in the message box. I have missed you. I took a long break too and have returned to enjoy my friends and delve into my writing again. Thanks so very much for your comments on this piece, Roxanna.

    Melissa

reply by Roxanna Andrews on 16-Jul-2021
    Glad you are back, I've had a little problem with depression but hope to get back to writing soon. You take care.
Comment from Begin Again
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i am not a poet and can't judge the technicalities in regard to your poem. But your words took me to a beautiful place of calm and tranquility. Taking in the beauty of the day, letting go of the burdens we carry, and drinking in the moment ... wow, what a place to be!

Hugs, Carol

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello Carol. Thank you so very much for the lovely comments on this verse. It is so appreciated!!

    Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
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Good Morning, Melissa!
Absolutely beautiful both in form and message!
You have perfectly captured "twilight's hush" in poetic form!
Creative and mesmerizing!

Thank you for sharing!
Diane

 Comment Written 08-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hello Sweet Diane. I so hope your hand is better!!!! I get the chills thinking about your mishap. Thank you for your lovely comments on the rondeau. It took me two weeks to get it right. Ha!

    Melissa
reply by Mrs. KT on 08-Jul-2021
    You are so welcome, Melissa!
    Hand is healing.
    So is my bruised dignity! :)
    Lovely poem!

    diane
Comment from Jill McCauslin
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I love the poem and your comment about fireflies being three syllables. I'm trying to change my pronunciation to understand that! Lovely rhymes. It doesn't feel forced at all. Good luck with the contest. Also, I like the photograph.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
    Hi Jill. Thank you for your lovely comments. In the South, we say fire as a two syllable word.. I do not know why, we just do, but I must admit we add syllables to a lot of words and draw out endings for an hour or two? wink :)

    Melissa
Comment from Wendy G
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A stunning photo and your words are a perfect accompaniment in the Rondeau format. Your imagery is vivid, descriptive and captures the serenity of the fading day. A truly beautiful poem.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hello Wendy. Thanks for your lovely words about the Rondeau. I am so glad you like it. :)

    Melissa.

Comment from poetwatch
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A lovely Rondeau, written, "as daylight fades." Melissa, you know how to dance with your poetic pen. :) I got to start writing other forms of poetry. I know how, but lately, I haven't even wanted to try. Thank you for sharing. This is a very good offering for the Rhyming Poetry Contest.

 Comment Written 07-Jul-2021


reply by the author on 07-Jul-2021
    Hello Jose. Thanks so very much, my friend. I hope to read many of your verses in those forms you know how to do. I love the variety and from your talented pen, it will be great!!! Hugs!!

    Melissa