Wild Whirlwind
Minute poetry45 total reviews
Comment from artisart4u
Yes, that sounds like a thunder storm.
The words you picked really are descriptive-
stinging blows and drenching twisting storm.
You have nice couplets and it rhymes well.
If I was to go back, I would remember sitting on my stairsteps with the lights out. Now I just turn everything off.
Congratulations on all of your wins.
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Yes, that sounds like a thunder storm.
The words you picked really are descriptive-
stinging blows and drenching twisting storm.
You have nice couplets and it rhymes well.
If I was to go back, I would remember sitting on my stairsteps with the lights out. Now I just turn everything off.
Congratulations on all of your wins.
Comment Written 28-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 29-Jul-2021
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Hello Artisart... I really appreciate your comments and review. Thanks so very much!!
Melissa
Comment from Anne Johnston
Congratulations on winning this contest. Guess I missed seeing this before. It is a great minute poem, and perfectly depicts the picture you have chosen. Great descriptive words.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Congratulations on winning this contest. Guess I missed seeing this before. It is a great minute poem, and perfectly depicts the picture you have chosen. Great descriptive words.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Hi Anne. I thank you so much. I was lucky to find a pic that reflected the poem :). So glad you like it.
Melissa
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You are welcome
Comment from Jarvis Popovich
Really felt the storm here. I usually like storms, but this one is like to avoid :) the writing was very understandable and painted the picture well. Right off the line with disheveled drops! Nicely structured with just enough information. Thanks for writing!
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Really felt the storm here. I usually like storms, but this one is like to avoid :) the writing was very understandable and painted the picture well. Right off the line with disheveled drops! Nicely structured with just enough information. Thanks for writing!
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Hello Jarvis. Thank you so much for your grounded and discerning review. I hope to relay a sense of the storm to the reader. I appreciate your comments!!
Melissa
Comment from BethShelby
Congratulations on your win. This is a really great poem and I can certainly understand how it won the contest. You are an excellent poet. I'll have start looking for your poems.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Congratulations on your win. This is a really great poem and I can certainly understand how it won the contest. You are an excellent poet. I'll have start looking for your poems.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Thank you Beth. I so appreciate your comments!
Melissa
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 23-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much! You have made my day!!!
Melissa
Comment from zanya
Such a fitting title for this Minute poem as it relates a tangible experience for the reader and wonderful choice of words that so aptly describe the event
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Such a fitting title for this Minute poem as it relates a tangible experience for the reader and wonderful choice of words that so aptly describe the event
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Hello Zanya. Thanks so very much!
Melissa
Comment from Senyai
Hi Sugarray,
I found your aminute poem an excellent one. I love storms that only sound loud with rumbles and a good light show, not floods or tornadoes or hurricanes. Your lines of 8-4-4-4 line counts are spot on, too.
Think I'll try a Minute poem soon. Looks like fun :-)
I loved your stormy poem, well written and polished!
All the best,
Senyai
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Hi Sugarray,
I found your aminute poem an excellent one. I love storms that only sound loud with rumbles and a good light show, not floods or tornadoes or hurricanes. Your lines of 8-4-4-4 line counts are spot on, too.
Think I'll try a Minute poem soon. Looks like fun :-)
I loved your stormy poem, well written and polished!
All the best,
Senyai
Comment Written 11-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2021
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Hell Senyai. Thanks so very much!
Melissa
Comment from natalie johnson
This is a very interesting poem!!
Id love to know your true meaning in it.
I feel like the storm is a metaphor.
Something is stirring in your world and the storm is not yet over for you.
Is this correct?
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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This is a very interesting poem!!
Id love to know your true meaning in it.
I feel like the storm is a metaphor.
Something is stirring in your world and the storm is not yet over for you.
Is this correct?
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hello Natalie. Thank you for your in depth review. I must say that the storm is more of a reflection of the time I was on the edge of a tornado than anything personal going on at this time. Thanks for checking on me!!
Melissa
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I am pleased the storm is time and not any problems for you.
It was very interesting. Thank you again for sharing.
Comment from Justin Yhoung
Beautiful descriptions of imagery used at the first output! Accurate too.
"Disheveled" to mean chaotic disarray as raindrops are indeed formulated, followed by classifying these ones as "jagged," or sharp and rough around the edges as some storms can menacingly be. Already we know this isn't a pleasant state of affairs if one chose to ignore the title. These raindrops are waging war on the earth! the author claims, and gaining the upper-hand at that!
It is a very thorough stormy state of affairs Sugarray77 notes, and its abnormality makes it an interesting one to record with word...
A good use of classical personification gives animated life to a natural occurrence, making it all the more powerful in stature.
By the end the once physical reaction now seems to have an arsenal of weapons via the life Sugarray77 breathed into its existence, and these weapons make a clashing sound worthy of remembrance.
A climatic ending as the situation is said to may not even have a conclusion of its own, leaving the reader to wonder what other kinds of havoc it may wrought.
A well structured build that amplifies the monstrosity of this scenario, perhaps using pathos to establish fear into the audiences mind of just what this earth is capable of construing.
Intense and definitely something you might not want to come across, yet wonder if the author herself did and the effect it had on her writing capabilities.
Beautifully done, Bravo!
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Beautiful descriptions of imagery used at the first output! Accurate too.
"Disheveled" to mean chaotic disarray as raindrops are indeed formulated, followed by classifying these ones as "jagged," or sharp and rough around the edges as some storms can menacingly be. Already we know this isn't a pleasant state of affairs if one chose to ignore the title. These raindrops are waging war on the earth! the author claims, and gaining the upper-hand at that!
It is a very thorough stormy state of affairs Sugarray77 notes, and its abnormality makes it an interesting one to record with word...
A good use of classical personification gives animated life to a natural occurrence, making it all the more powerful in stature.
By the end the once physical reaction now seems to have an arsenal of weapons via the life Sugarray77 breathed into its existence, and these weapons make a clashing sound worthy of remembrance.
A climatic ending as the situation is said to may not even have a conclusion of its own, leaving the reader to wonder what other kinds of havoc it may wrought.
A well structured build that amplifies the monstrosity of this scenario, perhaps using pathos to establish fear into the audiences mind of just what this earth is capable of construing.
Intense and definitely something you might not want to come across, yet wonder if the author herself did and the effect it had on her writing capabilities.
Beautifully done, Bravo!
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Thank you so very much for this stellar review and thoughtful comments. I am blown away by your perspective view of this Minute poem. Much appreciated, Justin!!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This minute poem, Wild Whirlwind, has the proper formatting and brings the view and feel of the tornado to the readers as the mighty storm spins through people's lives.
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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This minute poem, Wild Whirlwind, has the proper formatting and brings the view and feel of the tornado to the readers as the mighty storm spins through people's lives.
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hello Bill. Thanks so much for your wonderful review!!
Melissa
