Wild Whirlwind
Minute poetry45 total reviews
Comment from Raffaelina Lowcock
Your imagery is very intriguing in this poem. The sentiment of an unconventional type of storm is well portrayed.
This wrenching, drenching twisting storm
is not the norm;
black roiling skies
wild whirlwind cries.
Words well chosen with some of inner rhyming
Ralf
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Your imagery is very intriguing in this poem. The sentiment of an unconventional type of storm is well portrayed.
This wrenching, drenching twisting storm
is not the norm;
black roiling skies
wild whirlwind cries.
Words well chosen with some of inner rhyming
Ralf
Comment Written 10-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hi Ralf. Thanks so much for your great comments. :)
Melissa
Comment from duchessofdrumborg
'Wild Whirlwind", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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'Wild Whirlwind", is an extremely well-written and deftly descriptive piece. Penned with craft and skill. This talented poet's work was a pleasure to both read and review. Good luck with the contest. Please let me know how you get on?
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hello Duchess. Thanks so very much for your lovely review. I am doing well and trying to write more often and focus on the layers we can use to write poetry. Thanks again!!
Melissa
Melisa, you certainly deserved the lovely
review.
God bless you and take care,
the Duchess
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello Melissa!
What a dynamic and intense minute poem describing Mother Nature's penchant for summer storms! We have certainly had our share, and your description is "spot on" to what we, here in northern Michigan, have experienced this week!
Now... about "strewn:" never have heard it pronounced to rhyme with "unknown." I would consider choosing a different pair of words since you are submitting this marvelous offering for a contest. Hoping I have not offended!
Take Care!
And Stay Safe!
diane
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hello Melissa!
What a dynamic and intense minute poem describing Mother Nature's penchant for summer storms! We have certainly had our share, and your description is "spot on" to what we, here in northern Michigan, have experienced this week!
Now... about "strewn:" never have heard it pronounced to rhyme with "unknown." I would consider choosing a different pair of words since you are submitting this marvelous offering for a contest. Hoping I have not offended!
Take Care!
And Stay Safe!
diane
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hi Diane? no offense taken!!! I have been toying with the idea of changing the ending since it is in for a contest. Glad you liked it!! so hope your weather is improving and returning to normal. :)
Melissa
Comment from judiverse
The is a beautiful minute poem, and best of luck in the contest. It will surely be among the winners. Great wording to describe the storm. You show its force with "jagged," "assail," "stinging blows" and many others. I especially like the imagery of hurling lances to the ground. Your minute form is all in order, too. Good touch with the rhymes "wrenching" and "drenching."
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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The is a beautiful minute poem, and best of luck in the contest. It will surely be among the winners. Great wording to describe the storm. You show its force with "jagged," "assail," "stinging blows" and many others. I especially like the imagery of hurling lances to the ground. Your minute form is all in order, too. Good touch with the rhymes "wrenching" and "drenching."
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hi Judi. So glad you liked this Minute poem. Thanks so much.
Melissa
Comment from estory
You captured the look and feel of the thunderstorm, the tornado here. The images really made it come alive, you had great colorful images of the tumultuous clouds and the lightning like lances thrown into the ground, the wind whirling things around you. It felt like being in the middle of it all, and the uncertainty and the mystery of what is at its heart stays intact as well. estory
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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You captured the look and feel of the thunderstorm, the tornado here. The images really made it come alive, you had great colorful images of the tumultuous clouds and the lightning like lances thrown into the ground, the wind whirling things around you. It felt like being in the middle of it all, and the uncertainty and the mystery of what is at its heart stays intact as well. estory
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 10-Jul-2021
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Hi there! Thanks so very much for your meaningful review!!
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your minute poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed and vividly descriptive of the power of nature to perpetate damage and to engender our fear.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Your minute poem is excellent in every respect--skillfully composed and vividly descriptive of the power of nature to perpetate damage and to engender our fear.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hello Janice. Thanks so much for your lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
Your minute poem reads well, Melissa. I like the image your paired with it. Your words are well chosen, there's good smooth flow, and you create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. I'm not sure of the rhyme strewn/unknown. I'm in the South and have never heard strewn spoken that way. I would change it if it were mine--I don't believe it is a near/slant rhyme. I know your work, your choice. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Your minute poem reads well, Melissa. I like the image your paired with it. Your words are well chosen, there's good smooth flow, and you create great imagery. I could see everything as I read. I'm not sure of the rhyme strewn/unknown. I'm in the South and have never heard strewn spoken that way. I would change it if it were mine--I don't believe it is a near/slant rhyme. I know your work, your choice. Best wishes.
Thanks for sharing.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi Jan. Thanks for your perceptive and intelligent thoughts and comments. I really understand about the pesky word.. strewn.. May have to change it. :).
Appreciate your review!!
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
This is fabulous, dear Melissa. I felt this one verse by verse. I see a winner for the minute poetry contest. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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This is fabulous, dear Melissa. I felt this one verse by verse. I see a winner for the minute poetry contest. Sending you my best today as always, and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hey sweet Sal.. thanks so much!! I really appreciate your enthusiastic comments. You have made my day with your review. Hugs!
Melissa
Comment from Eternal Muse
I liked the imagery and visuals in this Minute poem. I can just picture myself in the middle of that storm. Liked the metaphor of "black roiling skies."
A wonderful presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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I liked the imagery and visuals in this Minute poem. I can just picture myself in the middle of that storm. Liked the metaphor of "black roiling skies."
A wonderful presentation.
Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi. Thank you so much. I was driving on the edge of TS Elsa yesterday and the rain pelted my windshield and I thought it looked jagged? hence the inspiration. :). Thanks again.
Melissa
Comment from nancy_e_davis
Wow! That is some storm. I am glad it isn't happening here. LOL
You did very well on your Minute poem, Melissa. Good description. Yes, I pronounce strewn the same. Good luck in the contest. Nancy:)
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Wow! That is some storm. I am glad it isn't happening here. LOL
You did very well on your Minute poem, Melissa. Good description. Yes, I pronounce strewn the same. Good luck in the contest. Nancy:)
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi Nancy. Thank you so much. I was driving on the edge of TS Elsa yesterday and the rain pelted my windshield and I thought it looked jagged? hence the inspiration. :). Thanks again.
Melissa
