Wild Whirlwind
Minute poetry45 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Melisssa.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word picture of
"This wrenching, drenching twisting storm."
-I also like the personification in
the next line with "throwing its lances."
-As far as strewn is concerned,
phonetically, it would be like
stroon, and rhymes with soon.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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-Very nice artwork
and presentation, Melisssa.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery and rhyme.
-You paint a vivid word picture of
"This wrenching, drenching twisting storm."
-I also like the personification in
the next line with "throwing its lances."
-As far as strewn is concerned,
phonetically, it would be like
stroon, and rhymes with soon.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thank you Pam. Several different folks have chimed in on that pesky word.. strewn.. I am sure its a southern thing that some of us pronounce it differently. :). I appreciate your wonderful comments on this Minute form.
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You are welcome, Melissa.
Comment from amahra
Wonderful poem and contest entry. Plus I liked the image of the lightning in the sky. Great job.
This wrenching, drenching twisting storm
is not the norm;
black roiling skies
wild whirlwind cries. [I loved this stanza]
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Wonderful poem and contest entry. Plus I liked the image of the lightning in the sky. Great job.
This wrenching, drenching twisting storm
is not the norm;
black roiling skies
wild whirlwind cries. [I loved this stanza]
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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I really appreciate your wonderful review. Thanks so much, Amahra!
Melissa
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Dramatically written Minute poem with well used alliteration. I particularly like-wrenching drenching twisting storm - we really get a feel of a storm through your words, well done. Cheers
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Dramatically written Minute poem with well used alliteration. I particularly like-wrenching drenching twisting storm - we really get a feel of a storm through your words, well done. Cheers
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hello Pearl. Thanks so very much for your wonderful thoughts on this Minute poem. :)
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I love the alliteration and the rhymes, perfect meter too. The good use of words, Jagged, stinging, twisting and thund'rous to describe the wind and its torment, this is an excellent minute poem for the contest Melissa, your brought the whirlwind to my face here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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I love the alliteration and the rhymes, perfect meter too. The good use of words, Jagged, stinging, twisting and thund'rous to describe the wind and its torment, this is an excellent minute poem for the contest Melissa, your brought the whirlwind to my face here, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Good Morning Dolly! Thanks so very much for your lovely thoughts on this Minute poem. Appreciate you.
Melissa
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
A beautifully worded and wonderfully structured poem with rhyme. As it is said 'After every storm the sun will smile; for every problem there is a solution, and the soul's indefeasible duty is to be of good cheer.'. Good luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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A beautifully worded and wonderfully structured poem with rhyme. As it is said 'After every storm the sun will smile; for every problem there is a solution, and the soul's indefeasible duty is to be of good cheer.'. Good luck in the contest!
Comment Written 09-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hello Seshadri. Thank you for your wonderful review!!
Melissa
Comment from Wendy G
Wow, such a powerful, vivid poem! Your choice of strong words emphasizes the fear such a whirlwind storm can incite. (In Australia we pronounce "strewn" as "stroon", but it may well be different in US. To me it doesn't detract or distract, but not sure if it matters for the Minute requirements - and judges may well pronounce it as you do.) Sending very best wishes for this lovely entry.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Wow, such a powerful, vivid poem! Your choice of strong words emphasizes the fear such a whirlwind storm can incite. (In Australia we pronounce "strewn" as "stroon", but it may well be different in US. To me it doesn't detract or distract, but not sure if it matters for the Minute requirements - and judges may well pronounce it as you do.) Sending very best wishes for this lovely entry.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi Wendy. Thank you for your lovely comments on the Minute poem. So appreciate your thoughts on it and that pesky word? strewn.. LOL. :)
Melissa
Comment from Gloria ....
Yes, it is that time again, when the storms are playing around.
A fine minute poem, with superb iambic metre and rhyme in recognition of the traditional form.
Great job, Melissa, and I wish you much luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Yes, it is that time again, when the storms are playing around.
A fine minute poem, with superb iambic metre and rhyme in recognition of the traditional form.
Great job, Melissa, and I wish you much luck with the Committee. :))
Gloria
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Good Morning Gloria. Thanks so much, my friend.
Melissa
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Magnificent. Stunning and powerful imagery. I hope to be back with congrats!
Heads up--strewn is pronounced STROON
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EZqf2Te94ik
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Magnificent. Stunning and powerful imagery. I hope to be back with congrats!
Heads up--strewn is pronounced STROON
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EZqf2Te94ik
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Thanks Liz. I so appreciate your thoughts on this Minute poem. I am finding several folks who pronounce that pesky word? strewn.. in different ways. I may change it since it is in a contest, but I was told not to by a poet that I admire? so we will see. Thanks again!
Melissa
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Well, at least by stating your intent in the note you cover your bases with the judges. Good luck!
Comment from kahpot
Love your first stanza the way it sets the scene and the rest of this wonderful read, yes strewn (in my neck of the woods) does rhyme with unknown, this form (to me) is quite difficult to hold a story but you have done this excellently, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Love your first stanza the way it sets the scene and the rest of this wonderful read, yes strewn (in my neck of the woods) does rhyme with unknown, this form (to me) is quite difficult to hold a story but you have done this excellently, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi Kym? I am sooo glad to hear from someone who pronounces that pesky word.. strewn.. the way I do. Thanks for your lovely review!!
Melissa
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Wow this is so awesome.
Perfect form.
I love the word "disheveled" - very descriptive.
Nice internal rhyme with "wrentching" and "drenching"
Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Wow this is so awesome.
Perfect form.
I love the word "disheveled" - very descriptive.
Nice internal rhyme with "wrentching" and "drenching"
Best wishes in the contest!
Katiemae
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2021
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Hi KatieMae. Thanks so very much for your thoughts on this Minute poem!
Melissa
