Wild Whirlwind
Minute poetry45 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Melissa,
This minute poem gives a clear image of a strong storm and its effect on crops and whatever it touchs. Your use of metaphor strengthens the feeling of danger in the storm.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
Hi Melissa,
This minute poem gives a clear image of a strong storm and its effect on crops and whatever it touchs. Your use of metaphor strengthens the feeling of danger in the storm.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Hi Joan. Thank you for your perceptive comments. So glad you liked it.
Melissa
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Any time, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from royowen
What a fine wordsmith you are Melissa, I'm not fond of the minute format, but the format doesn't matter if one has the word power to carry it, and the sense of fine rhythm and rhyme that you possess, beautifully written Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
What a fine wordsmith you are Melissa, I'm not fond of the minute format, but the format doesn't matter if one has the word power to carry it, and the sense of fine rhythm and rhyme that you possess, beautifully written Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Hello Roy. Thanks so much for your lovely review and I KNOW you could write a splendid one too if you wanted. You have such brilliant talent. :)
Melissa
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Thank you dear girl
Comment from RGstar
A very well done. You have come far since your first poem....and how you have improved. Bravo.
I don't think I will read another poem today that imposes and demands such imagery. It forces you to see, listen, and digest.
A very well done.
Good poetic aura, and a find array of a distinct adjectives, and verbs with solid nouns for its base.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RG
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
A very well done. You have come far since your first poem....and how you have improved. Bravo.
I don't think I will read another poem today that imposes and demands such imagery. It forces you to see, listen, and digest.
A very well done.
Good poetic aura, and a find array of a distinct adjectives, and verbs with solid nouns for its base.
Good luck with this.
My best wishes.
RG
Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Hello RG. Thank you for your review and the intelligent, perceptive comments. I know I will recall your encouraging words as I continue to write? they will propel me to stretch and dare to try new concepts. I really appreciate your thoughts on this Minute form.
Melissa
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Have a good day. My best
Comment from Pantygynt
It is most appropriate that you chose to end this in formal sympathy with the content, with a slant rhyme, consonantal rhyme in fact, rather than the full rhyme used up to that point.. Since the end has a question mfark hanging ovver it, then it is right and proprr that the rhyme should be a tad uncertain.
You word choice creates excellent imagery. Ibwishbi had a six for you but...
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
It is most appropriate that you chose to end this in formal sympathy with the content, with a slant rhyme, consonantal rhyme in fact, rather than the full rhyme used up to that point.. Since the end has a question mfark hanging ovver it, then it is right and proprr that the rhyme should be a tad uncertain.
You word choice creates excellent imagery. Ibwishbi had a six for you but...
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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Hello Jim. Thank you for your perspective review. I have grown up pronouncing the word ..strewn.. as it would rhyme with uknown. I am considering finding a new word since it is for a contest. I am so uncertain. Thanks again!!
Melissa
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I think you should leave it as it is. It is perfect.
Comment from lyenochka
Loved this, Melissa! I think this one will do will in the contest! I love the meter you put in and the powerful nature images and internal rhymes. The metaphor of hurling lances is so cool!
My one comment is a difference in pronunciation probably between yours and mine is the rhyme of "strewn" and "known."
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
Loved this, Melissa! I think this one will do will in the contest! I love the meter you put in and the powerful nature images and internal rhymes. The metaphor of hurling lances is so cool!
My one comment is a difference in pronunciation probably between yours and mine is the rhyme of "strewn" and "known."
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2021
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In the south, I have always heard it with the rhyme sound of known. I will double check with Merriam.
Thanks so much for everything, Helen.
Melissa
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Well, I pronounce "strewn" as "stroon."
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/strewn
https://www.dictionary.com/browse/unknown
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Perhaps I should look for a different word? thanks so much.
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It's completely up to you. I don't think it's a showstopper. I'd wait to see if anyone else comments about it.
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Thank you, good idea.
M