An Unfinished Story
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Comment from MAMONIA
Congratulations on your win.
This was a terrific entry and I totally enjoyed this poem.
Light and sweet and memory worthy.
Love to scrapbook too.
Thanks for sharing.
Marie
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Congratulations on your win.
This was a terrific entry and I totally enjoyed this poem.
Light and sweet and memory worthy.
Love to scrapbook too.
Thanks for sharing.
Marie
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this great review and for your insightful comments. :)
Comment from JennStar
I really liked your contest entry. It was light and sweet. The poem pulled me into thinking about my scrapbook memories. I liked the third stanza for imagery but was wondering if leaving the two lines capitalized after commas was on purpose. I didn't see the reason behind it
Flowers pressed, some ticket stubs,
(A)re mementos to recall,
(A)ll the good times that we've had,
through years we shared it all.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I really liked your contest entry. It was light and sweet. The poem pulled me into thinking about my scrapbook memories. I liked the third stanza for imagery but was wondering if leaving the two lines capitalized after commas was on purpose. I didn't see the reason behind it
Flowers pressed, some ticket stubs,
(A)re mementos to recall,
(A)ll the good times that we've had,
through years we shared it all.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this terrific review and for the corrections. I fixed them thanks to you, I really appreciate your help. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
This is very sweet and romantic! Definitely light and sweet! I believe this will do very well in the contest! Thank you so much for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This is very sweet and romantic! Definitely light and sweet! I believe this will do very well in the contest! Thank you so much for sharing!!!!!!!!!!!
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for your review and your nice comments. :)
Comment from Sally Law
I love to scrapbook and keep my family's ancestry as well. It feeds my soul as you have implied here. How rich we are! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sal :))
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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I love to scrapbook and keep my family's ancestry as well. It feeds my soul as you have implied here. How rich we are! Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the contest,
Sal :))
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this wonderful review, it's really appreciated. :)
Comment from Lilley Holland
This is a lovely piece.
It's relatable and has a nice cadence. Perhaps consider punctuation that helps your phrasing make more sense.
Use fewer words that are more concise.
Show, don't tell.
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This is a lovely piece.
It's relatable and has a nice cadence. Perhaps consider punctuation that helps your phrasing make more sense.
Use fewer words that are more concise.
Show, don't tell.
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for reviewing.
Comment from kahpot
very well written and very romantic, it is sweet how sometimes the little things bring out the big feelings, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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very well written and very romantic, it is sweet how sometimes the little things bring out the big feelings, very well written and presented, best wishes for your contest****kahpot
Comment Written 14-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thankbyou for this nice review and for taking the time to read my poem. :)
