Unmendable
My broken heart is...14 total reviews
Comment from Babysha
Very nice.. it seemed so personal and Awfully romantic.. I liked it because even with a broken heart
it still waits for a new love, someone new to revive it
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Very nice.. it seemed so personal and Awfully romantic.. I liked it because even with a broken heart
it still waits for a new love, someone new to revive it
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Thank you for reviewing my poem, I'm glad you liked it. Do you have any suggestions for how I could improve it? I see you gave me a good rating, so if you can think of ways I can make it better please let me know....it's how I learn. :)
Comment from Terry Overton
You did well with that writing prompt. I definitely felt the sadness in your lines. The complete story was told in the poem. The art work of the broken heart adds to the poem. Nice job.
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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You did well with that writing prompt. I definitely felt the sadness in your lines. The complete story was told in the poem. The art work of the broken heart adds to the poem. Nice job.
Comment Written 08-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 08-Aug-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. :)
Comment from Karen Estep
You did a fine job writing this, my friend. It is a complete story with good rhyming tone. The use of red lettering along with the graphic is a good choice as it brings out the sentiment felt by the writer. Good luck in this contest, and keep writing!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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You did a fine job writing this, my friend. It is a complete story with good rhyming tone. The use of red lettering along with the graphic is a good choice as it brings out the sentiment felt by the writer. Good luck in this contest, and keep writing!
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
What a beautiful version of a broken hearted poem. Love the words that you wrote; it covers loneliness, sorrow, music or songs to brighten the day and so a love will never go wrong.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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What a beautiful version of a broken hearted poem. Love the words that you wrote; it covers loneliness, sorrow, music or songs to brighten the day and so a love will never go wrong.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much for this terrific review and your nice comments. :)
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent image to go with your well-written poem. Everybody can relate to what you have written, filled with sadness and despair, and the usual blows to self-esteem. Good wishes for your entry.
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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An excellent image to go with your well-written poem. Everybody can relate to what you have written, filled with sadness and despair, and the usual blows to self-esteem. Good wishes for your entry.
Comment Written 19-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2021
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Thank you, I really appreciate this great review. :)
Comment from Pantygynt
While this deals with the given subject of heartbreak it fails to follow the stipulated varying rhyme scheme and follows an alternate pattern throughout. It has also almost twice the number of characters allowed. Hence the low grading.
Raised from 3 stars to four on account of the setter's error.
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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While this deals with the given subject of heartbreak it fails to follow the stipulated varying rhyme scheme and follows an alternate pattern throughout. It has also almost twice the number of characters allowed. Hence the low grading.
Raised from 3 stars to four on account of the setter's error.
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Thank you but I found out that wasn't true. In the contest thread someone asks about it and he said he meant words, but he couldn't change it. So because I haven't reached 350 words it should be ok. I hope so at least. Thanks for reading. I hope that perhaps you would reconsider your rating. :)
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Ah mistake by the setter! But the rhyme scheme is your mistake. I will give this a four then rather than the original three.
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Thank you for changing the rating. I followed the Ababa rhyme scheme as it was one of the choices, even though the sllyable count is not consistent. I don't really pay attention to that sort of thing, preferring to write from the heart. Thanks again.
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The requirement was to write in a different rhyme scheme for each stanza.
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Actually thats not true. It says to write it in abab, aaaa, bbbb, OR aabb. It gives you a choice. It never states that each stanza be in a different rhyme scheme. Thank you.
Comment from rjuselius
Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear anonymous! I can definately relate as I have just broken up with my fiance. Bravo and a standing ovation!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
This should ne a sure winner.
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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Wow! This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear anonymous! I can definately relate as I have just broken up with my fiance. Bravo and a standing ovation!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
This should ne a sure winner.
Blessings and a humongous hug-it-out hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 18-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2021
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I'm sorry that this happened for you, but maybe he wasn't the one meant for you. I really appreciate you reading my poem and for this exceptional review. It means a lot to me. :)
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My pleasure entirely dear friend!
Comment from AprilViolet
As someone who has experienced much heartbreak in my life I can tell you've definitely nailed that emotion down. Written with so much feeling and emotion. Nothing short of exceptional. Six stars
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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As someone who has experienced much heartbreak in my life I can tell you've definitely nailed that emotion down. Written with so much feeling and emotion. Nothing short of exceptional. Six stars
Comment Written 17-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 17-Jul-2021
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Thank you for this great review and the six stars. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
This looks like a tough contest with a lot of rules. A specific word count and required words. You have done an excellent job! It's sad and emotional
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This looks like a tough contest with a lot of rules. A specific word count and required words. You have done an excellent job! It's sad and emotional
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate it. :)
Comment from LisaMay
This most definitely is a broken hearted poem. You've portrayed the feelings of distress at the relationship break-up well and your rhyming is spot on. The beat of the lines is a bit wonky in places so you might want to say it out loud a few times to see where that happens and amend accordingly.
HOWEVER, you will have to do some serious pruning to the poem's length, as I notice the requirement is a maximum of 350 characters and yours is over 900+.
(If you copy your poem and put it into wordcounter.net website it will tell you how many words and characters are in your poem.)
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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This most definitely is a broken hearted poem. You've portrayed the feelings of distress at the relationship break-up well and your rhyming is spot on. The beat of the lines is a bit wonky in places so you might want to say it out loud a few times to see where that happens and amend accordingly.
HOWEVER, you will have to do some serious pruning to the poem's length, as I notice the requirement is a maximum of 350 characters and yours is over 900+.
(If you copy your poem and put it into wordcounter.net website it will tell you how many words and characters are in your poem.)
Comment Written 15-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 15-Jul-2021
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Thank you for the heads up, I made a mistake. I appreciate it.
