The Walkers
Viewing comments for Chapter 5 "The Dangerous Journey Begins"The Final Gabriel Hope Journey
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Comment from estory
What's interesting about this is that you are depicting a spiritual battle in very human, physical terms. Using the vaporrub to cancel the smell of brimstone, guns and bullets to ward off demons, army platoons of legions of angels and demons battling in a war ravaged landscape make this for some I think, something easily related to. The personality of the characters also comes through in the very realistic dialogue. estory
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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What's interesting about this is that you are depicting a spiritual battle in very human, physical terms. Using the vaporrub to cancel the smell of brimstone, guns and bullets to ward off demons, army platoons of legions of angels and demons battling in a war ravaged landscape make this for some I think, something easily related to. The personality of the characters also comes through in the very realistic dialogue. estory
Comment Written 31-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hello, my friend. I got the vapor rub idea from Silence of the Lambs. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I don't remember reading your story about these characters in the past. It is an interesting story about the war between good and evil. You might want to read your work aloud and listen to yourself. At one point the gravel is taking an arrow from its quiver. Soon after you tell us about two men having coffee and then repeat it in the came paragraph. Best of luck with this.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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I don't remember reading your story about these characters in the past. It is an interesting story about the war between good and evil. You might want to read your work aloud and listen to yourself. At one point the gravel is taking an arrow from its quiver. Soon after you tell us about two men having coffee and then repeat it in the came paragraph. Best of luck with this.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi, Carol. Thank you for your kind words, and I'll check that point out!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Ric Myworld
The landscape gives a vision of what I'm guessing us readers will understand better in the near future, a ferocious battle zone. And of course, your touch of humor at the end causes me to see Nicholson's grin. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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The landscape gives a vision of what I'm guessing us readers will understand better in the near future, a ferocious battle zone. And of course, your touch of humor at the end causes me to see Nicholson's grin. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 30-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks again, Ric!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from damommy
Oh, my. He trusted her a lot to let her shoot a nickel from his fingers like that. Interesting that Satan had bulletproof armor. A well written story and keeps the reading wanting more.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Oh, my. He trusted her a lot to let her shoot a nickel from his fingers like that. Interesting that Satan had bulletproof armor. A well written story and keeps the reading wanting more.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thanks again!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
Comment from royowen
Another amazing adventure of these folk abroad in the community, diminishing the power of evil and promoting the kingdom of God as His warriors on earth fighting for and establishing the righteousness of God on Earth. Beautifully written Mike, Blessings Roy
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Another amazing adventure of these folk abroad in the community, diminishing the power of evil and promoting the kingdom of God as His warriors on earth fighting for and establishing the righteousness of God on Earth. Beautifully written Mike, Blessings Roy
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Thank again, Roy!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You too
Comment from Brenda Henderson
Well written captivating and engaging narrative. I was on the edge of my seat. This has excellent pace and comedic timing. I really enjoyed reading this. The characters are well developed and the story development is exemplary. Good job!
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Well written captivating and engaging narrative. I was on the edge of my seat. This has excellent pace and comedic timing. I really enjoyed reading this. The characters are well developed and the story development is exemplary. Good job!
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi, Brenda. Thank you for your kind words and shiny six stars. They are deeply appreciated!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
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You're Welcome
Comment from BethShelby
I'm enjoying this story. The character are interesting. Cal is an amazing and very large girl It would take a lot of faith to let her shoot a nickle from one fingers at that distance.
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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I'm enjoying this story. The character are interesting. Cal is an amazing and very large girl It would take a lot of faith to let her shoot a nickle from one fingers at that distance.
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi, Beth. Thank you for your kind words!
Have a great day and God bless.
mike
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Gripping--rich narrative with vivid imagery and stunning cast of characters.
They stop [insert: COMMA] holding four cups of coffee. (otherwise, when they stop holding the cups, the cups would hit the pavement and splash coffee on everyone!)
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Gripping--rich narrative with vivid imagery and stunning cast of characters.
They stop [insert: COMMA] holding four cups of coffee. (otherwise, when they stop holding the cups, the cups would hit the pavement and splash coffee on everyone!)
Comment Written 29-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 02-Aug-2021
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Hi, Elizabeth. Thank you for your kind words and help with this story!
Have a great day, and God bless.
mike
