Tepid Shadows
a Naani poetic form30 total reviews
Comment from jake cosmos aller
hmm nice poem about life, and one's place it in using a haiku-like format and vibe. I liked the format and should try my hand at writing a Nani poem one day. Like the philosophical meaning behind the poem.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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hmm nice poem about life, and one's place it in using a haiku-like format and vibe. I liked the format and should try my hand at writing a Nani poem one day. Like the philosophical meaning behind the poem.
Comment Written 25-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Excellent! Stunning imagery--startling juxtapositions--not a trite word or phrase to be found. This is a fine entry for the contest--I expect to be back with congrats!
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Excellent! Stunning imagery--startling juxtapositions--not a trite word or phrase to be found. This is a fine entry for the contest--I expect to be back with congrats!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Pearl Edwards
A very descriptive Naani poem where your words, and chosen artowork set a sad scene of loneliness and being alone. Lovely, expressive poem, good luck in the contest.
cheers.
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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A very descriptive Naani poem where your words, and chosen artowork set a sad scene of loneliness and being alone. Lovely, expressive poem, good luck in the contest.
cheers.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 25-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your skillfully-composed naani is expressive and vividly descriptive of, I think, a depressed person's mindset, as being like a shadowy, murky place. Powerful adjectives
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Your skillfully-composed naani is expressive and vividly descriptive of, I think, a depressed person's mindset, as being like a shadowy, murky place. Powerful adjectives
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much, Janice!
Comment from royowen
I think this is one of the best Naani I've ever read Melissa, the language is very profound and expressive, and touches on the "nitty gritty" (for want of a better expression) but a superb post, and me with no sixes. Well done, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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I think this is one of the best Naani I've ever read Melissa, the language is very profound and expressive, and touches on the "nitty gritty" (for want of a better expression) but a superb post, and me with no sixes. Well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you so much, Roy!!! What a lovely thing to say!!
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Bless you
Comment from Raul1
It's beautifully written. I like your poem. There is no grammatical errors. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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It's beautifully written. I like your poem. There is no grammatical errors. I have enjoyed reading your piece of poetry. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much, Raul!
Comment from L. Kalere
It almost feels like I'm in that room. Your imagery is wonderful and the way you reinforce it with words such as : tepid, linger, drugged, stale, malaise, is very effective. Great job...best of luck in the contest.
Linda
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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It almost feels like I'm in that room. Your imagery is wonderful and the way you reinforce it with words such as : tepid, linger, drugged, stale, malaise, is very effective. Great job...best of luck in the contest.
Linda
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you. :)
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery that creates
a vivid word picture of this scene.
-The tone is melancholy reflected
by the imagery.
-You do a good job linking
the two together.
-That is also a very interesting
room with what look like
stairs that don't seem to go anywhere.
-Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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-Good artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-Effective imagery that creates
a vivid word picture of this scene.
-The tone is melancholy reflected
by the imagery.
-You do a good job linking
the two together.
-That is also a very interesting
room with what look like
stairs that don't seem to go anywhere.
-Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you, Pam.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Versch
This is a beautifully crafted short poem that describes well the lingering shadows and the accompanying feeling of unease they bring. This could also apply to the shadows in our mind which demoralize us.
I have never heard of this kind of poetry before. I must do some research about it. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes,
versch
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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This is a beautifully crafted short poem that describes well the lingering shadows and the accompanying feeling of unease they bring. This could also apply to the shadows in our mind which demoralize us.
I have never heard of this kind of poetry before. I must do some research about it. Thanks for sharing.
Best wishes,
versch
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thanks so much.
Comment from LisaMay
Your naani captures the look, the feel, the odour, of a downtrodden, miserable life ( with possible addiction issues). The words tepid, flaking, and stale in particular set the scene... and malaise captures the general air of discomfort and unease most appropriately. Terrific photo choice too.
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reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Your naani captures the look, the feel, the odour, of a downtrodden, miserable life ( with possible addiction issues). The words tepid, flaking, and stale in particular set the scene... and malaise captures the general air of discomfort and unease most appropriately. Terrific photo choice too.
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Comment Written 24-Jul-2021
reply by the author on 24-Jul-2021
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Thank you.
