A Slow Demise
a 5-7-5 poetic form31 total reviews
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
The trouble is the birds just get used to these scarecrows because they don't move! In France they have some that move now! Ha ha ha, a fun rite Melissa, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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The trouble is the birds just get used to these scarecrows because they don't move! In France they have some that move now! Ha ha ha, a fun rite Melissa, love Dolly x
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello dear Dolly. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very clever with the double meaning of thieves and a murder of crows. I have known of that grouping of crows for a long time but, it always makes me smile when I see it being used creatively. I like the picture of the scarecrow with the crows sitting on it...they are not scared at all! This is an excellent piece to demonstrate that a 5-7-5 poem can still say a lot. Thank you for posting today.
Have a great afternoon,
Jesse
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This is very clever with the double meaning of thieves and a murder of crows. I have known of that grouping of crows for a long time but, it always makes me smile when I see it being used creatively. I like the picture of the scarecrow with the crows sitting on it...they are not scared at all! This is an excellent piece to demonstrate that a 5-7-5 poem can still say a lot. Thank you for posting today.
Have a great afternoon,
Jesse
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello Jesse, my friend. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
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Good evening, Melissa.
You are very welcome, my friend.
Have a good evening,
Jesse
Comment from l.raven
Hi Melissa, I don't I have ever seen a scarecrow that scared the crows away...very clever poem my sweet friend...crow-murder...
I love your poem...and love the picture...very nicely written sweet girl...always love seeing you...God Bless...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hi Melissa, I don't I have ever seen a scarecrow that scared the crows away...very clever poem my sweet friend...crow-murder...
I love your poem...and love the picture...very nicely written sweet girl...always love seeing you...God Bless...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello sweet Linda. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
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Hi Melissa, your so welcome sweet girl...love xxoo
Comment from Jasmine Girl
This is a beautiful poem. Yo used the double meaning of murder here, a group of crows and the murder of the scare crow. You did a good job.
Exceptionally done.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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This is a beautiful poem. Yo used the double meaning of murder here, a group of crows and the murder of the scare crow. You did a good job.
Exceptionally done.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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Thank you so very much for the wonderful review, Lisa!! Glad you enjoyed it!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Slow Demise, has the right set up and find the stoic protector of the fieldsbeing slowly syphoned of its vey essense which makes one think, "Hay!"
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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This 5-7-5, Slow Demise, has the right set up and find the stoic protector of the fieldsbeing slowly syphoned of its vey essense which makes one think, "Hay!"
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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Thanks so much, Bill.
Melissa
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a fine double meaning joke in 5-7-5 form. How about sponsoring a 5-7-5 contest in which the last line had to be the collective?
A pride of lions
Covey of partridge
School of porpoises
A gaggle of geese
etc.
The indefinite article is optional.
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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This is a fine double meaning joke in 5-7-5 form. How about sponsoring a 5-7-5 contest in which the last line had to be the collective?
A pride of lions
Covey of partridge
School of porpoises
A gaggle of geese
etc.
The indefinite article is optional.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 17-Aug-2021
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I love your idea about the contest and will definitely put one out there whenever I can think up how to title it. Thank you, Jim.
Melissa
Comment from Mary Shifman
Your poem made me smile. I've always liked crows because they're so clever and vocal and quick to comment when they see me in the garden.
The delightful picture soften the words. You've told a whole story in few words. Nice job.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Your poem made me smile. I've always liked crows because they're so clever and vocal and quick to comment when they see me in the garden.
The delightful picture soften the words. You've told a whole story in few words. Nice job.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello Mary. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Mark D. R.
OK Melissa, the scarecrow is smiling, but I don't think he is a very happy watchman as he is getting seriously picked on. LOL
An excellent entry for this contest!
Mark
P.S. Consider adding some punctuation doohickey after your second line.
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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OK Melissa, the scarecrow is smiling, but I don't think he is a very happy watchman as he is getting seriously picked on. LOL
An excellent entry for this contest!
Mark
P.S. Consider adding some punctuation doohickey after your second line.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello dear Mark. So sorry for the late reply. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Sally Law
This poem paints the stark reality of farm life, as well as life in general. A wonderful allegory of our nation at present. Methinks our national watchmen are being dismantled. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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This poem paints the stark reality of farm life, as well as life in general. A wonderful allegory of our nation at present. Methinks our national watchmen are being dismantled. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sal XOs...
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello sweet Sal. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like your amiable watchman. There is a nice contrast between the scarecrow and the murderous crows. Seems like the scarecrow is a little too amiable though. He's not doing his job.
This is a delightful post. Puts me in the mood for the fall.
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reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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I like your amiable watchman. There is a nice contrast between the scarecrow and the murderous crows. Seems like the scarecrow is a little too amiable though. He's not doing his job.
This is a delightful post. Puts me in the mood for the fall.
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 16-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 19-Aug-2021
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Hello dearest Debbie. I am very much in the mood for fall decor. I have been collecting scarecrow images from Google... who knows what I will do with them. LOL. Thank you very much for your wonderful comments!! Much appreciated.
Melissa
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I look forward to your fall poems. I'll bet they will be spectacular.
