One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Frances Jean
Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting take on the Haiku format. Your poem is well written and successfully conveys the then and now. It's so sad. The picture supports your poem perfectly. Cheers Franky
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you for sharing. This is an interesting take on the Haiku format. Your poem is well written and successfully conveys the then and now. It's so sad. The picture supports your poem perfectly. Cheers Franky
Comment Written 23-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Paul McFarland
A very nice and unique form. Short stuff usually doesn't grab me, but this one reached right out and took me by the throat. I identify exactly with the story line.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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A very nice and unique form. Short stuff usually doesn't grab me, but this one reached right out and took me by the throat. I identify exactly with the story line.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from duchessofdrumborg
"Skipping Stones With Dad", is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. Life as I knew it has changed far too much and certainly too quickly. God bless you my never met friend.
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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"Skipping Stones With Dad", is an extremely well-written and heart-wrenching piece. Life as I knew it has changed far too much and certainly too quickly. God bless you my never met friend.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Duchess, Thank you very much for your exceptional review and six stars! You are very kind.
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Comment from Gert sherwood
your 12/5 Poem for Haiku Club
Skipping Stones With Dad
I will say is definitely an excellent new format for your haiku.
Do you mind if I give your new format for a haiku?
Gert
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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your 12/5 Poem for Haiku Club
Skipping Stones With Dad
I will say is definitely an excellent new format for your haiku.
Do you mind if I give your new format for a haiku?
Gert
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Hello, Gert, I don't mind if you use my new format, I'm honored.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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You are welcome Gypsy Blue
Gert
Comment from Jesse James Doty
I really love your new form of poetry. This format works well with a number of different topics. This one, about your father in ICU having difficulty breathing, is poignant and sad. You remember skipping stones on a lake with him in your youth and, now, his heart is skipping beats, as he struggles to hold onto life. I feel for both of you, my friend. It is hard to watch a parent struggle in anything they do. This is excellently written and there is nothing I would change about this piece. Have a healthy and happy day,
Jesse
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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I really love your new form of poetry. This format works well with a number of different topics. This one, about your father in ICU having difficulty breathing, is poignant and sad. You remember skipping stones on a lake with him in your youth and, now, his heart is skipping beats, as he struggles to hold onto life. I feel for both of you, my friend. It is hard to watch a parent struggle in anything they do. This is excellently written and there is nothing I would change about this piece. Have a healthy and happy day,
Jesse
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Hello, Jesse, this is fiction but my dad did die in 2006.
Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Good to know it is fiction. I am happy you liked my review.
Thank you for the extra hugs.
Jesse
Comment from Mark D. R.
Very emotional post Gypsy! Skipping stones I did, but my father never was in ICU; he died at home.
Like your last line as it ably complements your photo.
Mark
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Very emotional post Gypsy! Skipping stones I did, but my father never was in ICU; he died at home.
Like your last line as it ably complements your photo.
Mark
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Ohhhh this is so wonderfully heartfelt and well written. I love the first one. Its absolutely perfect. The shimmering stones sets up the reader for skipping stone.- brilliant.
The second one is also lively although sad. Nice tie in with heart skips a beat. Definitely deserving of a six.
Take care
Katiemae Dead
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Ohhhh this is so wonderfully heartfelt and well written. I love the first one. Its absolutely perfect. The shimmering stones sets up the reader for skipping stone.- brilliant.
The second one is also lively although sad. Nice tie in with heart skips a beat. Definitely deserving of a six.
Take care
Katiemae Dead
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Katie Mae. It's always good to read your well-thought-out review. I really appreciate your six stars and exceptional feedback.
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Comment from Benjamin Clayton
I like the 12/5 style and your poem just took me on a life's journey from childhood until the present.
My dad isn't in the ICU, but he's at the age where anything could happen.
When the man in the poem felt his heart skip a beat, it immediately took him back to skipping those rocks, obviously a cherished memory for him.
Very powerful illustration of life between a father and son.
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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I like the 12/5 style and your poem just took me on a life's journey from childhood until the present.
My dad isn't in the ICU, but he's at the age where anything could happen.
When the man in the poem felt his heart skip a beat, it immediately took him back to skipping those rocks, obviously a cherished memory for him.
Very powerful illustration of life between a father and son.
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Benjamin. I appreciate your well-thought-out exceptional review and six stars.
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So deserving, keep up the brilliant work.
Comment from Juliette Chamberlain
What a juxtaposition made perfect by the word 'skipping and skip.
Beautiful memories of pastimes spent with your father, and now the sadness of an ICU room where it is your heart that skips a beat.
Very few words tell a lifetime of stories when well chosen.
Warmly,
Juliette
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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What a juxtaposition made perfect by the word 'skipping and skip.
Beautiful memories of pastimes spent with your father, and now the sadness of an ICU room where it is your heart that skips a beat.
Very few words tell a lifetime of stories when well chosen.
Warmly,
Juliette
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Juliette. It's good to read your well-thought-out review. It's very helpful.
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Comment from Kerry L Batchelder
I have been in both situations you have described in your heartfelt poem. Very well described. The illustration is priceless. It struck a nerve with me. Great job!
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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I have been in both situations you have described in your heartfelt poem. Very well described. The illustration is priceless. It struck a nerve with me. Great job!
Comment Written 22-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 22-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Kerry. I appreciate your well-thought-out exceptional review and six stars.
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