One Thousand Cranes
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Comment from Wendy G
The meaning of your poem, expressed in the third line, comes as a shock. The drier's actions reinforce the circular painful and recurring thoughts. A terrible truth.
Well expressed.
Wendy
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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The meaning of your poem, expressed in the third line, comes as a shock. The drier's actions reinforce the circular painful and recurring thoughts. A terrible truth.
Well expressed.
Wendy
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Wendy. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. :)
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Comment from Dolly'sPoems
This is a sad write and I don't have any of my husband's clothes now although I hung onto them for a few years, it is a small comfort to keep someone's clothes after they have died, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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This is a sad write and I don't have any of my husband's clothes now although I hung onto them for a few years, it is a small comfort to keep someone's clothes after they have died, much enjoyed, love Dolly x
Comment Written 31-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Dolly. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. :)
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Comment from l.raven
Hi Gypsy, when my husband passed...I went around
putting his stuff in order...like he was even going to
care anymore...hanging his shirts up...sigh...you do
things just to maintain your sanity...
love your poem sweet girl...and the picture speaks for itself...very well written my sweet friend...love you...Linda xxoo
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Hi Gypsy, when my husband passed...I went around
putting his stuff in order...like he was even going to
care anymore...hanging his shirts up...sigh...you do
things just to maintain your sanity...
love your poem sweet girl...and the picture speaks for itself...very well written my sweet friend...love you...Linda xxoo
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 31-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Linda. I appreciate that you took the time to read and review my poem. :)
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your so welcome my sweet friend...love xxoo
Comment from Katie Mae Dead
Very good one Gypsy! This was pretty funny. You made great use of the form here. I like the last line that puts together the figurative with the literal. It gave me a chuckle. Good luck in the contest!
Katiemae
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Very good one Gypsy! This was pretty funny. You made great use of the form here. I like the last line that puts together the figurative with the literal. It gave me a chuckle. Good luck in the contest!
Katiemae
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Katiemae
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is an excellent but heartbreaking poem. I have never had children so I can't imagine what this might be like, but I think your powerful must be close. Very well done.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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This is an excellent but heartbreaking poem. I have never had children so I can't imagine what this might be like, but I think your powerful must be close. Very well done.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from LisaMay
Use of the word 'cruel' made me think at first this was about a failed relationship and that some revenge was planned, but then on reading your note I see that the thoughts themselves are a cruel torment of loss. That is very creative to use the motif of a tumble dryer and the recurring thoughts spinning.
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Use of the word 'cruel' made me think at first this was about a failed relationship and that some revenge was planned, but then on reading your note I see that the thoughts themselves are a cruel torment of loss. That is very creative to use the motif of a tumble dryer and the recurring thoughts spinning.
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Comment from royowen
I would imagine that his absence but yet residual clothes in the drier would certainly cause thoughts to run wild. A fabulous entry in this 3 line entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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I would imagine that his absence but yet residual clothes in the drier would certainly cause thoughts to run wild. A fabulous entry in this 3 line entry in this contest, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words.
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Most welcome
Comment from Mike Stevens
Another fine poem, Gypsy, and substitute a wife for a he, and the fact I never do laundry now, this poem could be written by me. Thoughts set on fumble-dry race around my head!
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Another fine poem, Gypsy, and substitute a wife for a he, and the fact I never do laundry now, this poem could be written by me. Thoughts set on fumble-dry race around my head!
Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much for your review and kind words, Mike.
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Comment from Ulla
This is a great three line poem. I loved how you compared his turmoil of thoughts with a tumble dryer's relentless spin. This is a great entry for the contest and I wish you the best of luck. Ulla:)))
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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This is a great three line poem. I loved how you compared his turmoil of thoughts with a tumble dryer's relentless spin. This is a great entry for the contest and I wish you the best of luck. Ulla:)))
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Thank you very much, Ulla. It's always good to hear from you.
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Comment from Valerie Fish
Very clever, describing your thoughts like clothes in a tumble drier!, the picture makes it all that much clearer.
I'd like to know what those thoughts were, is some sort of revenge planned?
Well Done
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reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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Very clever, describing your thoughts like clothes in a tumble drier!, the picture makes it all that much clearer.
I'd like to know what those thoughts were, is some sort of revenge planned?
Well Done
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Comment Written 30-Aug-2021
reply by the author on 30-Aug-2021
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In my mind it's a mother washing her son's clothes who just died, but it can be anything you think about.
Thank you very much, Valarie.
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Interesting how people see different things!
