Tucker - (Part -1)
An offer, too good to refuse . . . ?64 total reviews
Comment from Jamison Brown
Tuck is my kind of guy. Farnsworth is easy to dislike. This is the perfect setting for a conflict.
There are many questions waiting to be answered: 1) Where did the Farnsworth fortune come from? 2) What is Tuck's real backstory? 3) What is Tuck's relationship with Megan?
The setup is well-implemented and full of intrigue; it is not an easy thing to do.
This story is off to a great start! It deserves the recognition it has received. I am looking forward to reading Chapter 2 and catching up.
Great storytelling, Ric! - Jamison
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Tuck is my kind of guy. Farnsworth is easy to dislike. This is the perfect setting for a conflict.
There are many questions waiting to be answered: 1) Where did the Farnsworth fortune come from? 2) What is Tuck's real backstory? 3) What is Tuck's relationship with Megan?
The setup is well-implemented and full of intrigue; it is not an easy thing to do.
This story is off to a great start! It deserves the recognition it has received. I am looking forward to reading Chapter 2 and catching up.
Great storytelling, Ric! - Jamison
Comment Written 18-Nov-2023
reply by the author on 18-Nov-2023
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Thank you so much, Jamison, for your special six-star review, comments and kind words. All of your questions have been answered previously. This is chapter-9 of the story. I plan to end it in the next chapter of 10. It?s time to move on. Much appreciated!
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No worries. I will likely finish reading until the end. It's a good story. - Jamison
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
I humbly beg your pardon. I have used up my sixes already, and,(gulp) I am in absolute awe at how immensely good you are. I was gob-smacked, overwhelmed. Your writing grabbed me by the collar, and put me on the booth with them. I rather think Daniel overdoes the "Polo"" don't you think?
And, not to be rude, but "Tuck" could use some. I was there. I was disgusted by the way he ate. He needs to chew his food more.
I can't wait any longer to read more. You are simply sublime. Got reading to do.
Karen
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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I humbly beg your pardon. I have used up my sixes already, and,(gulp) I am in absolute awe at how immensely good you are. I was gob-smacked, overwhelmed. Your writing grabbed me by the collar, and put me on the booth with them. I rather think Daniel overdoes the "Polo"" don't you think?
And, not to be rude, but "Tuck" could use some. I was there. I was disgusted by the way he ate. He needs to chew his food more.
I can't wait any longer to read more. You are simply sublime. Got reading to do.
Karen
Comment Written 16-Aug-2023
reply by the author on 16-Aug-2023
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Thank you so much, Karen, for all your kind words and the generous review. I'm so happy that you like traveling along in my make-believe world with me. And yes, I'm a nut case. An old dude whose only adventure is sitting in my La-Z-Boy dreaming up what I wish I was doing. Thank you again for taking time out to read my foolishness. Much appreciated!
Comment from irishauthorme
Yeah, I should have read this first chapter first, but I still have a pretty good idea of what's going on. Tucker played it Correcto Mundo, stiffing Farnsworth, thus convincing Mr. F that Tuck is the real deal, just the tough guy type Mrf. F needs.
Tuck starting out as a debt collector could have been an initial test to see if Tuck could handle all Mr. F had in mind for him.
Also, perhaps Tuck is needed to ferret out someone looking to take over Farnsworth's empire?
Goos work,
irish
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Yeah, I should have read this first chapter first, but I still have a pretty good idea of what's going on. Tucker played it Correcto Mundo, stiffing Farnsworth, thus convincing Mr. F that Tuck is the real deal, just the tough guy type Mrf. F needs.
Tuck starting out as a debt collector could have been an initial test to see if Tuck could handle all Mr. F had in mind for him.
Also, perhaps Tuck is needed to ferret out someone looking to take over Farnsworth's empire?
Goos work,
irish
Comment Written 09-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Irish, for going back to read part-1. I do wish you'd read it first, which might have explained part-2 a little better for you. But I appreciate that you read it at all. I'll be looking to see something you post in the near future. Much appreciated!
Comment from LJbutterfly
This is incredible! I don't know where I was in September that I missed this. I just saw part two, and had to double back before I read it. I always love your metaphors and the suspense built into your stories. This is definitely gripping. I'm moving on to part two.
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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This is incredible! I don't know where I was in September that I missed this. I just saw part two, and had to double back before I read it. I always love your metaphors and the suspense built into your stories. This is definitely gripping. I'm moving on to part two.
Comment Written 08-May-2022
reply by the author on 09-May-2022
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Thank you so much, Lorraine, for going back to read this first part. I hope it was worth your time and made chapter-2 a little more understandable. I can't thank you enough for your kind and generous review. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from John Ciarmello
This is an incredible write, Sir Ric. The character "Tuck" is quirky and original. I cheered him on every chance I got. I loved the two thug bodyguards. I could see them standing there, arms folded. I felt their intimidation. Farnworth on the other hand reminded me of a silver spooner. I thought he was a bit annoying, but essential. Great work my new friend.
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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This is an incredible write, Sir Ric. The character "Tuck" is quirky and original. I cheered him on every chance I got. I loved the two thug bodyguards. I could see them standing there, arms folded. I felt their intimidation. Farnworth on the other hand reminded me of a silver spooner. I thought he was a bit annoying, but essential. Great work my new friend.
Comment Written 15-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 16-Feb-2022
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Hey, John, thanks a million for going back and reading a nonpaying older post. And most of all, I'm glad you enjoyed it. You pegged Farnsworth, and he only gets worse as the story goes along. Right now I haven't decided whether to make the story into a book or just add a few short stories to move it along. Sorry it has taken me so long to reply. I've been in California and just got home. Gone for eight days, now I've got to dig in and try to catch up on reviewing. LOL. Thanks you so much for another encouraging review!
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You could have taken me to sunny Cal. I'm somewhat small and easy to pack, lol. Welcome back! Now get to work, sir.
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LOL. Glad to be back. Thank you, sir!
Comment from lauralumummu
Great story! Yes, you should write a book. The characters are unique and interesting. Thanks for the bigger font. Well written. All the best, Laura.-----
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Great story! Yes, you should write a book. The characters are unique and interesting. Thanks for the bigger font. Well written. All the best, Laura.-----
Comment Written 01-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 02-Nov-2021
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Thanks, Laura, for taking time to read my story. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated. And it's always nice when someone likes, and gets, the quirky characters that I tend to create. Thanks, again! Ric
Comment from dragonpoet
This is a well told story with good character development for both men. It seems Tuck doesn't want to be connected in any way to the Mob, of which Farnsworth seems to be a part. It seems it came very close to violence a couple of times by both men. It seems in the last part that Tuck may take the job.
Maybe it can be a book of short stories with Tuck solving mysteries of some kind.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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This is a well told story with good character development for both men. It seems Tuck doesn't want to be connected in any way to the Mob, of which Farnsworth seems to be a part. It seems it came very close to violence a couple of times by both men. It seems in the last part that Tuck may take the job.
Maybe it can be a book of short stories with Tuck solving mysteries of some kind.
Congrats on winning the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 31-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Joan, for taking time to read more of my overexaggerated foolishness. My way of entertaining myself, and hopefully a few readers. Your kind words and generous review are greatly appreciated! Ric
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Ric,
You are most kindly welcome on all accounts. It is a good way to entertain yourself and your readers.
Joan
Comment from Susan Newell
Ric,
I see why this made Story of the Month. It was delightfully told and one has to admire the depth of Tucker's integrity. Nice twist at the end.
I noticed a couple places where I thought a little editing would help.
Sue
On the verge of blowing his cork, but somehow, he managed to keep the raging blood from boiling -- Better as "cork, somehow he managed"
"What can I do to persuade you for one of those favors, I'll pay handsomely if you can help me?" -- Better as "favors? I'll . . . help me."
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Ric,
I see why this made Story of the Month. It was delightfully told and one has to admire the depth of Tucker's integrity. Nice twist at the end.
I noticed a couple places where I thought a little editing would help.
Sue
On the verge of blowing his cork, but somehow, he managed to keep the raging blood from boiling -- Better as "cork, somehow he managed"
"What can I do to persuade you for one of those favors, I'll pay handsomely if you can help me?" -- Better as "favors? I'll . . . help me."
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Sue, for your extra-special six-star review. I'm honored when you take time to read my over-the-top foolishness. And I'm happy to make those suggested changes to tighten up the sentences. I can't thank you enough for the stars, help, and encouragement. I appreciate YOU!
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It's my pleasure to read quality writing!
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An old hack who didn't know a noun from a verb when I came to Fanstory, your short sentence with "pleasure" and "quality" has put a lump in my throat and wet my eyes. But don't tell anyone, you'll blow my tough guy image. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Meia (MESAYERS)
I love, love LOVED your work on this! I am so pleased that it won story of the month it is hugely deserving! I loved it and your characters are so well written, so brilliantly fleshed out...I absorbed and delighted in every bit of this very descriptive and fascinating read and will certainly back for more! I LOVE anything about the Southern parts of the USA. If you look at my backlogged of work you may have noticed! Once again brave on this brilliant write kindest regards Meia :)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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I love, love LOVED your work on this! I am so pleased that it won story of the month it is hugely deserving! I loved it and your characters are so well written, so brilliantly fleshed out...I absorbed and delighted in every bit of this very descriptive and fascinating read and will certainly back for more! I LOVE anything about the Southern parts of the USA. If you look at my backlogged of work you may have noticed! Once again brave on this brilliant write kindest regards Meia :)
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Meia, for your extra-special six-star review. The idea of plot drilled into our brains, I'm the weirdo who thinks that without characters, plots are a waste of time. Outlining plots definitely makes writing easier, but it limits us to seven formulaic stiff-cardboard structures. Of course, many writers being naturally dry, overtaught, and programed by rules, they hate my over-exaggerated, comic book descriptions, meant to lighten the seriousness and add fun and entertainment. I'm so glad you get it! Thank you ma'am, as a true Southern boy would say. You've made my day, my week . . . oh, hell, and probably my month. Without encouraging reviews like yours, I would have given up writing a long time ago. I appreciate YOU!
Comment from Ronni
Hi Ric,
Quite a story here Ric. Sounds like a perfect intro for this character,
Sam Tucker. From start to finish, Tucker is let loose to define himself
as the raw edge no nonsense kind of commando/Rambo era breed.
Through your visceral imagery and both subtle and broadly revved
up descriptions, it is a story worthy of the character's personality
and peculiarities noting, and your brilliant writing enticing for
more, and hopefully will follow soon.
Sorry for missing the promotion time on this; and noting you
did win the Story Of Month on it, still very glad for you! Congrats!
Keep up the great writing!
Best wishes, Ronni
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Hi Ric,
Quite a story here Ric. Sounds like a perfect intro for this character,
Sam Tucker. From start to finish, Tucker is let loose to define himself
as the raw edge no nonsense kind of commando/Rambo era breed.
Through your visceral imagery and both subtle and broadly revved
up descriptions, it is a story worthy of the character's personality
and peculiarities noting, and your brilliant writing enticing for
more, and hopefully will follow soon.
Sorry for missing the promotion time on this; and noting you
did win the Story Of Month on it, still very glad for you! Congrats!
Keep up the great writing!
Best wishes, Ronni
Comment Written 10-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 10-Oct-2021
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Thank you so much, Ronni, for your kind words and generous review. I appreciate you taking time to read another of my over-the-top stories, with no reward. I don't care about contests, but it does make me happy to think a few might have enjoyed my foolishness. Thanks for the encouragement, and it's always nice to see your name pop up!
The best to YOU, Ric
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Next time I will try not to be the last one over the fence to review....psstt hope my slip wasn't showing as I belatedly
went over this one....LOL.
Still neat to see you a winner
on the winner announcement!
Ronni
