Brian's book of poem's
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Comment from dellsworthpoet
The sentiment is good.
I would rethink the word choice. Sparkling for stars is somewhat trite-think things like rippling or vibrant. Instead of blue think words like azure or cobalt. Instead of night think things like midnight or nite. And perhaps on view for all.
The poet is asked to describe things in powerful words. Gilt the rose a bit, but not too much.
A nice poem. Thanks for sharing.
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The sentiment is good.
I would rethink the word choice. Sparkling for stars is somewhat trite-think things like rippling or vibrant. Instead of blue think words like azure or cobalt. Instead of night think things like midnight or nite. And perhaps on view for all.
The poet is asked to describe things in powerful words. Gilt the rose a bit, but not too much.
A nice poem. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 04-Sep-2021
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
My skies are covered in cloud just lately so you brought a few sparkling stars to my eyes here Brian, a magical romantic night under the stars for all to see, love Dolly x
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My skies are covered in cloud just lately so you brought a few sparkling stars to my eyes here Brian, a magical romantic night under the stars for all to see, love Dolly x
Comment Written 03-Sep-2021