Penny Gets a Puppy
Sixteenth in the Penny by the Sea Series11 total reviews
Comment from LJbutterfly
This poem is truly cute and delightful. It would work well as a children's book with pictures of Emily doing cute things, or Penny training her. The story was clever, and the rhyming flowed smoothly. Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This poem is truly cute and delightful. It would work well as a children's book with pictures of Emily doing cute things, or Penny training her. The story was clever, and the rhyming flowed smoothly. Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for this wonderful review. I actually did win! Thanks again. :)
Comment from robyn corum
Dear Mystery Writer,
What an adorable poem about an adorable puppy who finds the perfect family. *smile* Every time a puppy joins a family there are a few tiny growing pains - but it's always worth it. Dogs add so much to a family - so much love and fun and surprise and silliness. (I understand cats may do this, too? I have no idea - I am strictly a dog-kind-of-human. Though my family has had cats outside)
This is so cute and I have no doubt it will be really popular in the voting. And I have to think it has been a popular series, too - you say it's the ... sixteenth?? in the series? Way to go!!!
I have some notes for you. Just a few things to smooth out some rough spots. But remember that only you know what you want to do here. Use what you like (if anything) and toss the rest (or toss them all, if you like!) hahahaha
Notes:
1.) Penny Get's a Puppy (Your title)
--> (Gets) -->no apostrophe
2.) she must walk, feed, and bathe her pup(,) too(.)
3.) Emily whimpered that very first night(;)
it broke Penny's heart but it turned out (all right).
4.) Soon, Emily settled down on Penny's bed( . . .)
(f)ast asleep on her pillow, right next to her head.
5.) but (D)ad wasn't really angry at all.
--> when it's a direct reference, you cap it.
6.) Penny was happy to have Emily,
that she('d become) part of their family.
7.) Mom and (D)ad said, they both loved her(,) too,
--> but delete the comma after 'said'
I also love, love, LOVE (!!) the gif. Thanks a bunch and good luck!
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Dear Mystery Writer,
What an adorable poem about an adorable puppy who finds the perfect family. *smile* Every time a puppy joins a family there are a few tiny growing pains - but it's always worth it. Dogs add so much to a family - so much love and fun and surprise and silliness. (I understand cats may do this, too? I have no idea - I am strictly a dog-kind-of-human. Though my family has had cats outside)
This is so cute and I have no doubt it will be really popular in the voting. And I have to think it has been a popular series, too - you say it's the ... sixteenth?? in the series? Way to go!!!
I have some notes for you. Just a few things to smooth out some rough spots. But remember that only you know what you want to do here. Use what you like (if anything) and toss the rest (or toss them all, if you like!) hahahaha
Notes:
1.) Penny Get's a Puppy (Your title)
--> (Gets) -->no apostrophe
2.) she must walk, feed, and bathe her pup(,) too(.)
3.) Emily whimpered that very first night(;)
it broke Penny's heart but it turned out (all right).
4.) Soon, Emily settled down on Penny's bed( . . .)
(f)ast asleep on her pillow, right next to her head.
5.) but (D)ad wasn't really angry at all.
--> when it's a direct reference, you cap it.
6.) Penny was happy to have Emily,
that she('d become) part of their family.
7.) Mom and (D)ad said, they both loved her(,) too,
--> but delete the comma after 'said'
I also love, love, LOVE (!!) the gif. Thanks a bunch and good luck!
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you a million times for pointing out the needed corrections...you really helped me out. Thank you also for this terrific review, it's very appreciated. :)
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sure!
Comment from Wendy G
Sounds delightful. Children will enjoy this one and will also learn to be sensitive to a pet's needs and caring. Lovely image. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Sounds delightful. Children will enjoy this one and will also learn to be sensitive to a pet's needs and caring. Lovely image. Best wishes for your entry in the contest.
Wendy
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you so much for this nice review. :)
Comment from Teri7
This is a great children's' rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about Penny getting a puppy. I wish I had six stars to give you, but I am all out. I love the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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This is a great children's' rhyming poem you have penned for the contest about Penny getting a puppy. I wish I had six stars to give you, but I am all out. I love the art work you chose. Best wishes in the contest. Teri
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you this wonderful review and your kind words. :)
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a nice story-poem for a child. You have rhyme and imagery and it tells a sweet story that children will like. I like the picture, too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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This is a nice story-poem for a child. You have rhyme and imagery and it tells a sweet story that children will like. I like the picture, too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you for this nice review, I really appreciate it. :)
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fun and well rhymed poem for the contest here as Penelope receives a new puppy to play with called Emily. A fun and uplifting children's poem, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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A fun and well rhymed poem for the contest here as Penelope receives a new puppy to play with called Emily. A fun and uplifting children's poem, love Dolly x
Comment Written 11-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Thank you for this terrific review, it's very appreciated. :)
Comment from WriterHeather
This is such an incredibly adorable children's poem you have penned for the contest! Love, love, love the gif! Sweet Penny. She will make a good dog momð???
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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This is such an incredibly adorable children's poem you have penned for the contest! Love, love, love the gif! Sweet Penny. She will make a good dog momð???
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 11-Sep-2021
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Wow! Thank you so much for the six stars...awesome. :)
Comment from dellsworthpoet
The poem is consistent in rhyme. The theme is followed throughout. The language fits with the story. The presentation picture adds to the poem. It flows well and has a good pace.
Thanks for sharing. Good luck.
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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The poem is consistent in rhyme. The theme is followed throughout. The language fits with the story. The presentation picture adds to the poem. It flows well and has a good pace.
Thanks for sharing. Good luck.
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you taking the time to read and review my poem. :)
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You are quite welcome.
Comment from SHABAMO
This is a perfect happy child's poem about getting a doggo. You did an excellent job with the rhyme scheme and I see no recommended changes. Great job!
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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This is a perfect happy child's poem about getting a doggo. You did an excellent job with the rhyme scheme and I see no recommended changes. Great job!
Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you, I appreciate this positive review. :)
Comment from R56Ma3
That is a very cute children's poem, cute words, nice rhyming scheme and goes very well with the cute picture. Very well done and thank you for sharing. R56ma3 Susan C.
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reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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That is a very cute children's poem, cute words, nice rhyming scheme and goes very well with the cute picture. Very well done and thank you for sharing. R56ma3 Susan C.
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Comment Written 10-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 10-Sep-2021
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Thank you this very nice review, it's very appreciated. :)
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You're welcome
