Awaiting Dusk
CinQuain35 total reviews
Comment from Pantygynt
This is a fine cinquain. The inclusion of internal rhyme in the longest (8 syllable) line is an excellent device creating a symmetry of rhythm around the third line. An intelligent use of the poetic device of rhyme in an otherwise unrhymed piece.
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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This is a fine cinquain. The inclusion of internal rhyme in the longest (8 syllable) line is an excellent device creating a symmetry of rhythm around the third line. An intelligent use of the poetic device of rhyme in an otherwise unrhymed piece.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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Hello my friend. I am thrilled that you liked this verse. A CinQuain can be challenging... and this one certainly was... I revised 4 times ~ after I posted it... LOL. Thanks so much, Jim.
Melissa
Comment from rjuselius
Wow. This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear sugarray! I love the imagery and think this should do very well!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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Wow. This is an exceptional piece of poetry dear sugarray! I love the imagery and think this should do very well!
Thank you for sharing!
Good luck!
Blessings and a larger than life hug!
Rebekka x
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 15-Sep-2021
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Hi Rebekka, thanks so much for your lovely and exquisite review. I am delighted that you liked!!
Melissa
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My pleasure entirely dear friend <3
Comment from Begin Again
What an absolutely stunning moment you have painted with your words and the awesome picture. I love the sunsets and the sunrises as we are blessed with such a palette of colors and it's so peaceful. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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What an absolutely stunning moment you have painted with your words and the awesome picture. I love the sunsets and the sunrises as we are blessed with such a palette of colors and it's so peaceful. Very well done!
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi Carol. Thank you for your lovely review, it is an encouragement to me :)
Melissa
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
What a beautifully written cinquain poem. It has a Lovely overall presentation. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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What a beautifully written cinquain poem. It has a Lovely overall presentation. Beautiful photo choice to compliment your words. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thank you Joanne so much! So glad you liked it.
Melissa
Comment from Janice Canerdy
Your cinquain is excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively written and vividly descriptive of a lovely scene, an appealing time of day. The artwork is the perfect enhancement.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Your cinquain is excellent in every respect--skillfully and creatively written and vividly descriptive of a lovely scene, an appealing time of day. The artwork is the perfect enhancement.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Janice!!
Melissa
Comment from Janetsue
This is a perfect example of message and picture matching up. There is great beauty in both the message in the words and the colors of the twilight sky. I truly enjoyed encountering your lovely cinquain. :-)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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This is a perfect example of message and picture matching up. There is great beauty in both the message in the words and the colors of the twilight sky. I truly enjoyed encountering your lovely cinquain. :-)
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi Janet. Thank you so much for the lovely comments.
Melissa
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice image, Melissa.
-You find such good ones.
-You wrote a good cinquain
with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery
describing the twilight and
the many nuances as the
"light wanes" and
"starlight awaits."
-A good entry; good luck.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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-Very nice image, Melissa.
-You find such good ones.
-You wrote a good cinquain
with a good topic.
-Effective nature imagery
describing the twilight and
the many nuances as the
"light wanes" and
"starlight awaits."
-A good entry; good luck.
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi Pam... happy Monday. I appreciate your lovely review.
Melissa
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You are welcome, Melissa, and Happy Monday to you, too!
Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan
Beautifully worded poem. Romantic indeed. Is there anything more peaceful than taking in the quiet beauty of the twilight? The accompanying picture is awesome! One can see the sun descending below the horizon, creating romantic shades of red and orange and purple across the sky. Good luck!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Beautifully worded poem. Romantic indeed. Is there anything more peaceful than taking in the quiet beauty of the twilight? The accompanying picture is awesome! One can see the sun descending below the horizon, creating romantic shades of red and orange and purple across the sky. Good luck!
Comment Written 13-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hello Seshadri. Thanks so much for your lovely review. I always love to gaze at a beautiful sunset.
Melissa
Comment from lyenochka
I like the feeling of the gloaming and the gentle consonance in your poem. It is covers the subtle change of different "tints" of the "waning light." I wondered if you intended to use words with "light" in the middle three lines: twilight, light, starlight. It certainly shows progression of different lights but it could feel redundant. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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I like the feeling of the gloaming and the gentle consonance in your poem. It is covers the subtle change of different "tints" of the "waning light." I wondered if you intended to use words with "light" in the middle three lines: twilight, light, starlight. It certainly shows progression of different lights but it could feel redundant. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Hi Helen. I edited it and rearranged a few things. Thanks so much!
Melissa
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Oh I love your edits! You brought out your poetic paintbrush with "Soft, lilac hues" - Great job!
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Thank you for helping me to see the repetitiousness in the word "light". I had not noticed it. Hugs, my friend.
M
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I can relate because when we write, we focus on getting the message/meaning out. It takes other people's eyes to see the details. 💖
Comment from Teri7
Awaiting Dusk is a very beautiful and very well written Cinquain poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery from the art work. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Awaiting Dusk is a very beautiful and very well written Cinquain poem you have penned for the contest. You used very good descriptive words and very beautiful imagery from the art work. Best wishes in the contest. love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2021
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Thanks so much Teri!!
Melissa
