Awaiting Dusk
CinQuain35 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Awaiting Dusk
by Sugarray77
I love the imagery and presentation. Great entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest. The syllables count is supposed to be 2/4/6/8/2 but you have 2/3/6/8/2. Good luck in the contest :)
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Awaiting Dusk
by Sugarray77
I love the imagery and presentation. Great entry for the Cinquain Poetry contest. The syllables count is supposed to be 2/4/6/8/2 but you have 2/3/6/8/2. Good luck in the contest :)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you Gypsy for the help... I have edited it! So appreciate your comments.
Melissa
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Looks good :)
Comment from royowen
Dusk, like dawn is a wonderful time of day, God painting His sky in a new Unique way that has never been drawn before, I love this poem and artwork Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Dusk, like dawn is a wonderful time of day, God painting His sky in a new Unique way that has never been drawn before, I love this poem and artwork Melissa, good luck, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you very much Roy... I love the twilight and all of its beautiful colors!
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Mary Shifman
This is a splendid poem and the picture is an excellent choice to enhance it. The imagery is so evocative and the words have a lyrical feel. I love the line, 'twilight mutes the day...' Very well done. I think you've got a good shot at the prize.
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This is a splendid poem and the picture is an excellent choice to enhance it. The imagery is so evocative and the words have a lyrical feel. I love the line, 'twilight mutes the day...' Very well done. I think you've got a good shot at the prize.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hello Mary. Thank you for your wonderful words and comments. I am delighted you liked it and could enjoy the twilight with me. :)
Melissa
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You are so welcome.
Comment from Bill Schott
This cinquain, Awaiting Dusk, has the proper formatting and creates a scene of dimming day becoming the night and the sky turning the diamond studded veil.
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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This cinquain, Awaiting Dusk, has the proper formatting and creates a scene of dimming day becoming the night and the sky turning the diamond studded veil.
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Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Thank you Bill!
Melissa
Comment from Mrs. KT
Hello again, Melissa!
Such beautiful imagery in your cinquain!
I can never determine if sunrise or twilight is my favorite time of the day!
Adelaide Crapsey would be pleased!
One thought to consider: evening = 2 syllables (eve-ning); thus line two only contains three syllables rather than the required four.
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
(Purchased a huge bag of daffodil bulbs this week!) :)
diane
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reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Hello again, Melissa!
Such beautiful imagery in your cinquain!
I can never determine if sunrise or twilight is my favorite time of the day!
Adelaide Crapsey would be pleased!
One thought to consider: evening = 2 syllables (eve-ning); thus line two only contains three syllables rather than the required four.
Thank you for sharing!
Best Wishes!
(Purchased a huge bag of daffodil bulbs this week!) :)
diane
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The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2021
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2021
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Oh my, I had not even thought about looking for bulbs. We are still very warm here in VA. Thanks for the thought on the word "evening"... I pronounce it with three syllables and it seems odd, but I will relook at it. You are the one that inspired me to think of one... yours is so very good!!
Melissa
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I love to attempt cinquains... almost as much as I love planting fall bulbs! :)
Here's to a beautiful week ahead, Melissa!
diane
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Hello Melissa!
I just now had the opportunity to revisit you cinquain = so beautiful.
Love the edits = an exceptional offering!
diane
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Big hugs Diane. I am really glad you looked again.. the revision was done in three parts. LOL... Helen noticed that I had a variation of the word "light" in three prominent places... ugh... I think I'll stick with this one and let the chips fall.... Thank you, sweet Diane!!
