Always Prepared
It was a good thing her audiobook wasn't working...12 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Well, at least she knows what to do. Her dad should of known to say something before he scared her. Maybe she shouldn't be walking alone at night.
Congrats on your second place finish in the contest.
Keep writng and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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Well, at least she knows what to do. Her dad should of known to say something before he scared her. Maybe she shouldn't be walking alone at night.
Congrats on your second place finish in the contest.
Keep writng and stay healthy.
dragonpoet
Comment Written 19-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 21-Oct-2021
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You are totally right on both counts. :) We live in a small town - know all the neighbors, etc - so I never think about walking at night, but in the city... Yep.
Thanks for your congrats!
Blessings,
Deb
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Your welcome, Deb.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congrats on your prize Deb--this cute story has a clever twist--so glad its fictional--vivid description of the punch/kick. Ouch! Fine work in a flash. Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Congrats on your prize Deb--this cute story has a clever twist--so glad its fictional--vivid description of the punch/kick. Ouch! Fine work in a flash. Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much. It was fun to write, so I"m glad people enjoyed it.
Blessings, my friend.
Deb
Comment from Pearl Edwards
Loved this flash fiction Deb, thank you for the morning chuckles. You set it up well, the dark street, the tension then wham, the twist. Great write and good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Loved this flash fiction Deb, thank you for the morning chuckles. You set it up well, the dark street, the tension then wham, the twist. Great write and good luck in the contest. Cheers
Valda
Comment Written 11-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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I'm honored! Thank you so much. I started to go for the 'dark' but decided a laugh was better. Glad you agree. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from AJ McCall
LOL. This is one of the reasons why my dad tells me not to sneak up on him, the opposite might happen, lol. I was expecting a different ending but when I saw 'Daddy!' I knew I should've guessed the twist from the start. :) I would say 'hope you win!' but I entered the contest too, so... LOOKOUT! (lol, just kidding.;)
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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LOL. This is one of the reasons why my dad tells me not to sneak up on him, the opposite might happen, lol. I was expecting a different ending but when I saw 'Daddy!' I knew I should've guessed the twist from the start. :) I would say 'hope you win!' but I entered the contest too, so... LOOKOUT! (lol, just kidding.;)
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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I'I' honored! Thank you so much. I started to go for the 'dark' but decided a laugh was better. Glad you agree. :)
Blessings,
Deb
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LOL. You're welcome!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Well, I'm glad that didn't happen to your dad! LOL, if it did, he learned a good lesson!!! LOL. So funny, Debs. I'm glad to see it's in a contest, it's really good. Well done, my friend, and good luck!!:)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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Well, I'm glad that didn't happen to your dad! LOL, if it did, he learned a good lesson!!! LOL. So funny, Debs. I'm glad to see it's in a contest, it's really good. Well done, my friend, and good luck!!:)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 09-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 11-Oct-2021
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I'm honored! Thank you so much. I started to go for the 'dark' but decided a laugh was better. Glad you agree. :)
Blessings,
Deb
Comment from VJWild
Yesssss to this! I LOVE the tension at the beginning and the surprise ending. I love these types of short stories, build tension, break tension (maybe because I'm not patient?) Thanks for this fun/suspenseful piece! Perfect art work selection, too...
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Yesssss to this! I LOVE the tension at the beginning and the surprise ending. I love these types of short stories, build tension, break tension (maybe because I'm not patient?) Thanks for this fun/suspenseful piece! Perfect art work selection, too...
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much! They are fun both to read and to write. :)
Blessings!
Deb
Comment from Dr. Nad
What a fine HOOK, "It was a good thing". Your words flow with seeming effortlessness as they cascade down the page. Your short story builds with an intensity and angst for the anticipated recipient concerning the "noise of someone sneaking up behind you." Then, the twist, "Daddy! I'm so sorry!" Great job.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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What a fine HOOK, "It was a good thing". Your words flow with seeming effortlessness as they cascade down the page. Your short story builds with an intensity and angst for the anticipated recipient concerning the "noise of someone sneaking up behind you." Then, the twist, "Daddy! I'm so sorry!" Great job.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much! They are fun both to read and to write. :)
Blessings!
Deb
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You are most welcome, I enjoy reading your work
Comment from Jannypan (Jan)
You did a great job with your contest entry, Deb. The picture is perfect for your well chosen few words. I like the twist at the end though dad sure didn't.
Karate and Taekwondo-->I would not capitalize these 2 words.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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You did a great job with your contest entry, Deb. The picture is perfect for your well chosen few words. I like the twist at the end though dad sure didn't.
Karate and Taekwondo-->I would not capitalize these 2 words.
Best wishes in the contest.
Respectfully, Jan
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the correction. I was exhausted just trying to figure out how to spell the second one. lol
Many thanks,
Deb
Comment from Wendy G
Clever one for the Flash Fiction. You built up the story really well, and your last few words provide an excellent and unexpected twist at the end. Humorous to read - although not for either of them at the time, I am sure! But it's fiction, so all good. Best wishes for your entry - it is super!
Wendy
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Clever one for the Flash Fiction. You built up the story really well, and your last few words provide an excellent and unexpected twist at the end. Humorous to read - although not for either of them at the time, I am sure! But it's fiction, so all good. Best wishes for your entry - it is super!
Wendy
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much! These types of short stories are so much fun both to read and to write. :)
Blessings!
Deb
Comment from Michele Harber
Ooh, ouch! This is a well-done story, suspenseful at the beginning, with the perfect twist at the end, to add a bit of levity (although I doubt your characters would find it humorous). To your credit, your ending was totally unexpected. You set the scene so well with your mention of her family of cops, and her having been taught martial arts. You insure the reader will expect someone up to no good coming up behind her. I certainly did. Good luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Ooh, ouch! This is a well-done story, suspenseful at the beginning, with the perfect twist at the end, to add a bit of levity (although I doubt your characters would find it humorous). To your credit, your ending was totally unexpected. You set the scene so well with your mention of her family of cops, and her having been taught martial arts. You insure the reader will expect someone up to no good coming up behind her. I certainly did. Good luck with the contest.
Comment Written 08-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 08-Oct-2021
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Thanks so much! These short stories are so fun both to read and to write. :)
Blessings!
Deb
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You're very welcome. I enjoy writing these as well, and the twist at the end is the most fun. Sometimes, I wind up thinking of a plot twist first, and then have to build a story around it.
