Escape in Korea
Escape from the Chinese attack at the Chosin Reservoir4 total reviews
Comment from writer723
I really enjoyed reading your intriguing story. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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I really enjoyed reading your intriguing story. It drew me in and held my attention throughout. Your description of this scenario was quite thought-provoking and emotional. Your writing skills are excellent and you have a wonderful gift of expression.
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, review and comment. Greatly appreciated.
Comment from lyenochka
You did a great job with this historical fiction. You covered real events and details like the weather that brought this to life. I don't think it's helpful to describe the Chinese soldier as "yellow-faced" as Korean soldiers might be viewed that way - although technically they are all different shades of skin color. And this could be offensive.
Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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You did a great job with this historical fiction. You covered real events and details like the weather that brought this to life. I don't think it's helpful to describe the Chinese soldier as "yellow-faced" as Korean soldiers might be viewed that way - although technically they are all different shades of skin color. And this could be offensive.
Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 13-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read, review and comment. Greatly appreciated. I thought yellow faced was preferable to chink.
I have changed yellow-faced to hate-faced.
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I wonder if there is a distinctive uniform feature that would identify the Chinese soldier?
Comment from pookietoo
What a great war story. It sounded like you know exactly what happens in a war. Good luck to you in the contest. I hope you are doing well. Smile. :)
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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What a great war story. It sounded like you know exactly what happens in a war. Good luck to you in the contest. I hope you are doing well. Smile. :)
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Thank you for taking the time to read my story and for the encouraging comment.
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Welcome.
Comment from lancellot
This is good. I reads like a real soldier telling of that one time...
I would advise working on a clear ending as this seems more like the author just stopped.
notes:
We hurried from our sleeping bags and began returning {firing.}
- fire.
{Check }Jim, he was dead.
-Checked
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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This is good. I reads like a real soldier telling of that one time...
I would advise working on a clear ending as this seems more like the author just stopped.
notes:
We hurried from our sleeping bags and began returning {firing.}
- fire.
{Check }Jim, he was dead.
-Checked
Comment Written 12-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 12-Oct-2021
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Thank you for the read and pointing out the mistakes. I have edited the piece and changed the ending.
