Night of Monsters
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Comment from dragonpoet
This free verse poem is full of the Halloween spirit. I could be about the child dressed as a monster. It can also be about a literal monstor of a felon out to hurt someone.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2021
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This free verse poem is full of the Halloween spirit. I could be about the child dressed as a monster. It can also be about a literal monstor of a felon out to hurt someone.
Congrats on the honorable mention in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Joan
Comment Written 05-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 05-Nov-2021
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Thank you.
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You're welcome, Mia.
Joan
Comment from Gert sherwood
Mia Twysted
take a look at this part of your scary poem
See me coming
By the moon
Of Halloween Night
It looks like I will not let the moon shine on me
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Mia Twysted
take a look at this part of your scary poem
See me coming
By the moon
Of Halloween Night
It looks like I will not let the moon shine on me
Comment Written 27-Oct-2021
Comment from Liz O'Neill
Your use of alliteration makes this more fun to read aloud. The w's give a haunting sound. The s's join in that tone. The hard harsh consonant sounds effect a thumping sound to exaggerate the threat. Well done.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Your use of alliteration makes this more fun to read aloud. The w's give a haunting sound. The s's join in that tone. The hard harsh consonant sounds effect a thumping sound to exaggerate the threat. Well done.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you. I am so glad you liked it. I worked on it for almost 24 hours. Nothing I did was right and I just about gave it when I suddenly felt it come together.
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great work
Comment from judelesemann
Very intriguing poem. You certainly captured the spirit of Halloween. You have a clever use of words and ideas that make for a compelling poem. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Very intriguing poem. You certainly captured the spirit of Halloween. You have a clever use of words and ideas that make for a compelling poem. Well done. Be blessed, Jude
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you.
Comment from Mary Shifman
This monster does sound malevolent, hungry and soulless. As you say, "a monster of the worse kind." You have written a fast paced, poem with sharp images that create a lingering sense of dread. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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This monster does sound malevolent, hungry and soulless. As you say, "a monster of the worse kind." You have written a fast paced, poem with sharp images that create a lingering sense of dread. Well done. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Thank you.
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You are welcome.
Comment from Debra White
Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your descriptive halloween poem.
I like how the shortness of the lines build tension.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra.
For consideration: 'In the depts (depths)'
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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Hello :)
I enjoyed reading your descriptive halloween poem.
I like how the shortness of the lines build tension.
Good luck in the contest.
Best wishes, Debra.
For consideration: 'In the depts (depths)'
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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I felt the short lines gave a fast paced feel. I am glad it worked so well.
Comment from Raven Tale
The brevity of each line here increases the poignancy of every word. I really like that.
I think on the second line you may have meant depths rather than depts, but I'll note that depts to my brain translated to departments, which made me think 'corporate-work-environments' which so often have a heartless-money-sucking-monstrosity at the top, making it an all too appropriate element of this poem. It also create a pun-like split because depths and depts work in different ways, the former characterizes internal monsters while the latter characterizes external monsters and it therefore provides two entirely different contexts for the rest of the poem.
I found this really moving, the last stanza is particularly chilling.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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The brevity of each line here increases the poignancy of every word. I really like that.
I think on the second line you may have meant depths rather than depts, but I'll note that depts to my brain translated to departments, which made me think 'corporate-work-environments' which so often have a heartless-money-sucking-monstrosity at the top, making it an all too appropriate element of this poem. It also create a pun-like split because depths and depts work in different ways, the former characterizes internal monsters while the latter characterizes external monsters and it therefore provides two entirely different contexts for the rest of the poem.
I found this really moving, the last stanza is particularly chilling.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2021
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2021
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The two words do give very different pictures. However, did mean depths. I hope that doesn't make you like the piece less. I love the way you worked through the piece. You gave me a whole new perspective on it. Thank you so much for the stars. I am so honored.
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It really was like reading two separate pieces and I enjoyed them both equally. Thank you and keep up the good work!
