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An eternal contract.

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Comment from SoulRiver
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I really enjoyed this story and the intimacy of talking directly to the reader. The condescending tone from the 'superior being' was totally on the mark and the revelation of not comprehending Jesus' sacrifice made for an entertaining end.

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 Comment Written 01-Nov-2021


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2021
    So true, SoulRiver. My hope is the crux of the story will cause the reader to consider the cross. Thank you, your insight and review are very much appreciated.
Comment from Doug Quinn
Good
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I am sorry, I just didn't get the point of the story; it's not scary. The narration rambles without a direction. Five hundred words is a tough nut to crack.

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 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
    Surrendering ones soul to La Chien is not scary? OK, I'll try harder next time. Suggestions?
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Exceptional
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SSSSSStunning. This may well be a winner--it's right up there with the best of them. Chilling to contemplate--brilliant narration. SSSSSStupendous. Cheerssssss. LIZ

typo: those [retched=>wretched] boundaries

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
    Thanks for the six! Correction noted.
Comment from Iza Deleanu
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

Ha, ha, ha this is too funny not to appreaciate the sarcasm :"Get over it, you pathetic trembling mouse of a creature. Why He sacrificed Himself for you is beyond us. He could have had this whole world and the riches in it, but no, He wanted your whimpering ass and look what it got Him, dead on a cross. " Thank you for sharing and good luck with your writings.

 Comment Written 31-Oct-2021


reply by the author on 31-Oct-2021
    Thanks for the 6! Glad you caught the 'tongue in cheek' invitation by La Chein.