The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Huh?"Adventures around & upon a hill
16 total reviews
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"coordinate" should be coordinates,
Sounds like this could be interesting.
In Notes:
-the htlm should be corrected.
-"play" should be plays.
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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"coordinate" should be coordinates,
Sounds like this could be interesting.
In Notes:
-the htlm should be corrected.
-"play" should be plays.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2022
reply by the author on 22-Dec-2022
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Thank you for your enthusiastic review. This begins with a factual account of our trip to England, but when we got to the Glastonbury, we had past life reactions. So I thought I'd deviate my account to throw in a time travel. If you want to skip to that part you could go to chapter 16.
Comment from tfawcus
A fascinating beginning. The fact that Madeline is almost as much in the dark as the reader is compelling. We set out on the journey together. Empathy is already established. You convey the effervescent personality of Cordelia well even though we are yet to meet her.
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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A fascinating beginning. The fact that Madeline is almost as much in the dark as the reader is compelling. We set out on the journey together. Empathy is already established. You convey the effervescent personality of Cordelia well even though we are yet to meet her.
Comment Written 28-May-2022
reply by the author on 28-May-2022
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Wonderful review. I'm excited you may be accepting the invitation to our journey.
Comment from Tanvi Pauddar
I loved this!!! Your writing was really descriptive and the story was well written... I am definitely interested in reading more!
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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I loved this!!! Your writing was really descriptive and the story was well written... I am definitely interested in reading more!
Comment Written 26-Apr-2022
reply by the author on 26-Apr-2022
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Thank you for your wonderful review. I'm excited you like it. You don't need to write a review for the chapters if you don't want to. Just enjoy them. I go one people's portfolios & just read a few a day, as if it is a book I'm reading. Enjoy.
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I know! :)
I just felt like I should because I really mean it when I say that your stories are so well written! The way you write your stories is so good that it kind of doesn?t feel like I?m reading it, if that makes sense. I guess what I?m trying to say is that the imagery is really good! :)
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Wow I'm honored. Thank you
Comment from Ethan Vandervelden
Hi there,
I just wanted to let you know that I really appreciate your writing and I am going to take some time today to start at the beginning of your book and read through to catch up. I missed a few chapters since last reviewing because I forgot to become a fan. That won't happen again!
I probably wont review very many because I'm betting they are worth six
stars and I am all out this week. But I just wanted you to know that I am finding a lot of value in your writing techniques and am really glad you are sharing!
{She tsked a few times, huffed and whined. "I don't think I can get as fired up as I was. That moment's gone. That ship has sailed."}-- I loved this line! It gave a visual of her facial expressions as well as a glimpse of her disappointment in having to repeat herself. So much information in just a couple lines!
Thank you again! I'm looking forward to reading!
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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Hi there,
I just wanted to let you know that I really appreciate your writing and I am going to take some time today to start at the beginning of your book and read through to catch up. I missed a few chapters since last reviewing because I forgot to become a fan. That won't happen again!
I probably wont review very many because I'm betting they are worth six
stars and I am all out this week. But I just wanted you to know that I am finding a lot of value in your writing techniques and am really glad you are sharing!
{She tsked a few times, huffed and whined. "I don't think I can get as fired up as I was. That moment's gone. That ship has sailed."}-- I loved this line! It gave a visual of her facial expressions as well as a glimpse of her disappointment in having to repeat herself. So much information in just a couple lines!
Thank you again! I'm looking forward to reading!
Comment Written 05-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 05-Feb-2022
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A wonderful review. Thank you. I am excited you are enjoying it. Remember, no need for individual reviews. It's just nice to know someone is savoring my writing. We appear to have a mutual admiration of each other's art.
Comment from John Ciarmello
I loved the phone conversation as the opening of this chapter. The fact that Madeline turned the volume down and missed the important parts of Cordelia's banter and then tried to cleverly piece it all together is real and somewhat relatable as I often wander off. Great Chapter, nice read.
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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I loved the phone conversation as the opening of this chapter. The fact that Madeline turned the volume down and missed the important parts of Cordelia's banter and then tried to cleverly piece it all together is real and somewhat relatable as I often wander off. Great Chapter, nice read.
Comment Written 01-Feb-2022
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2022
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Thank you for your fun review. I hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters as well.
Comment from Mary Shifman
Well, since I missed the first part of the book I decided to backtrack and catch up before I read your new post. So far, I find it intriguing enough to continue reading. Very interesting.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Well, since I missed the first part of the book I decided to backtrack and catch up before I read your new post. So far, I find it intriguing enough to continue reading. Very interesting.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank you for your dedicated review. You will not be disappointed.
Comment from Mabaker12
This six is in appreciation of a well-described forward chapter. Now the reader knows who our two heroines are and we get a glimpse at what they are about to embark upon. We who know very little about harpists now have background information. Dousing could be a problem. So keep referring back information to help us the ignorant, on this mysterious talent. Great first chapter, Liz. Inserting chapter number will be a real godsend for the aged and infirm. Sincerely Anne
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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This six is in appreciation of a well-described forward chapter. Now the reader knows who our two heroines are and we get a glimpse at what they are about to embark upon. We who know very little about harpists now have background information. Dousing could be a problem. So keep referring back information to help us the ignorant, on this mysterious talent. Great first chapter, Liz. Inserting chapter number will be a real godsend for the aged and infirm. Sincerely Anne
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your lovely review. For some reason, Ihave believed we can't put the chapter number in the story. I think it says that somewhere. They do write it by the title. I think the same, it'd be simpler to have it written by the story. Maybe I'm wrong. Maybe I've been able to do it all along. Tell if I have, if you know.
Comment from Katherine M. (k-11)
I like the idea of the narrator being as much in the dark s the reader is, and enjoyed your repeated terms of the type "I had no idea what she was talking about" One incongruity struck me 'I nodded, conveying interest', seemed strange for a phone call. But I suppose that's just me being old-fashioned and they were on the Whatsapp or some such.Nic start to the book, otherwise.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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I like the idea of the narrator being as much in the dark s the reader is, and enjoyed your repeated terms of the type "I had no idea what she was talking about" One incongruity struck me 'I nodded, conveying interest', seemed strange for a phone call. But I suppose that's just me being old-fashioned and they were on the Whatsapp or some such.Nic start to the book, otherwise.
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your sharp review. I already caught myself how I described her going to the bookcase. I need to fix this up. Thank you for the heads up.
Comment from Tina Crute
I have so many questions, but it's a good thing! I can't wait to see how ley lines play into the girls' trip. I've seen dowsing in movies but didn't know what it was or that it may be real and useful. I will stay tuned! Interesting read. My curiosity is peaked!
Tina
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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I have so many questions, but it's a good thing! I can't wait to see how ley lines play into the girls' trip. I've seen dowsing in movies but didn't know what it was or that it may be real and useful. I will stay tuned! Interesting read. My curiosity is peaked!
Tina
Comment Written 23-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you are intrigued. I have found if I want to follow someone's chapters in their book. I become a fan.
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You're welcome! Aha! I will do that!
Tina
Comment from aryr
Wow, this is truly a wonderful introduction chapter, Liz. You covered nicely the hyper Cordelia and showed Madeline as the cool, calm individual. It was great that you presented the ley lines, what they were for and how to find them. Great job, very well done and greatly enjoyed. I will definitely look forward to future chapters.
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Wow, this is truly a wonderful introduction chapter, Liz. You covered nicely the hyper Cordelia and showed Madeline as the cool, calm individual. It was great that you presented the ley lines, what they were for and how to find them. Great job, very well done and greatly enjoyed. I will definitely look forward to future chapters.
Comment Written 22-Nov-2021
reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021
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Thank you for your ever enthusiastic review. I'm glad you appreciated it so much.
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You are so welcome Liz, I eagerly await the next chapter.
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***smile***
