Comment from MissMerri

Excellent

This seems like a great entry in this difficult contest (difficult because of the restricted words) and I thoroughly enjoyed the humor displayed in the unexpected ending. I hope this will do well in the contest. It is very clever, has good rhymes and consistent meter, and tells a cute story. MM

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review, Adonna. I'll probably do all right in the contest unless you have an entry.

Comment from prettybluebirds

Excellent

Excellent. Great job while leaving out a lot of words that are often used in a love poem. I commend you for a superlative effort in your writing. The artwork is perfect and compliments your poem. I wish you the very best of luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review and the good luck wish.

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

A life time of commitment
Well a year or two
Was a bit cynical,but I liked it.
With the promotion and raise the commitment is worth. In the last line condo is introduced to give a funny twist..well done

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, Sanku. She's probably looking at the raise more than anything.

Comment from Seshadri_Sreenivasan

Excellent

Love is a many-splendoured thing or it's all you need. And yes. A condo too.:) Whether that love is new or decades-old, a passionate romance or a true friendship. I enjoyed your love poem. Good luck in the contest!

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, Seshadri. The mortgage payments will be decades old.

Comment from Boogienights

Excellent

This is quite funny, looking at the practical side of love. There are many reasons to move forward and this is one of them...lol. You very effectively wrote a love poem, avoiding the chosen words. Best of luck in the contest. :)

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review. Avoiding the chosen words was a tough one.

reply by Boogienights on 23-Nov-2021

Comment from Kooky Clown

Excellent

A well written poem with a nice message which I enjoyed never realizing till the end that it was a condo that he was talking about so this came as nice surprise ending. Well done Kooky.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, Kooky. The ending surprised me, too.

Comment from Jesse James Doty

Excellent

This is funny and I love the way it rhymes, the picture is so clever it depicts a warm embrace of a couple seeming in love. But are they in love is the question you pose here? The condo will be bought by someone else if we don't close the deal! The humor in this love poem tells a deeper story when you think about it.
There are many couples facing this real problem in the barrios and ghettos.
And they haven't a clue what to do, with no money and none coming in real soon.
I think one has to think about the issues you have brought about with this love poem entry. And many readers only laugh about it and go about their merry way!
So, thank you for letting me blow off steam and tell you what I think.
Have a happy day in spite of this sad issue
Best wishes for your own life!
Take good care of yourself,
Jesse

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, Jesse. You have made a great observation.

Comment from Senyai

Excellent

Hi Mystery Writer,

Well done! You didn't use any of the forbidden words in your catchy poem of love to your significant other :))

That condo won't wait forever, as he/she should commit or not but you'll wait patiently but the condo won't. Cute poem in the playful mood of a joyous lover.

Great entry and best to you in the contest!

Senyai

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, Senyai. I never had the condo problem.

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Maybe she can rent with option to buy? For a year or two? lol Very clever twist at the end. Did not see that one coming. Should do well in the contest. I enjoyed the read.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks, June. Rent with an option to buy. Never thought of that.

Comment from RPSaxena

Exceptional

Hello Friend,
Love Poem, but the poet has been barred from using all those words which are the symbol of love. A great challenge, indeed!
In spite of all such restrictions, you have beautifully written a poem drenched in LOVE with humorous flavor.
Lucid as well as perfectly matching the theme phraseology; Smooth flow throughout from the beginning to the end with nice rhyming scheme.
The last stanza is particularly noteworthy.
Picture enhances depth and beauty of the poem.
BEST OF LUCK in the contest.

 Comment Written 23-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 23-Nov-2021

Thanks for the review and your kind words. "drenched in love". That's a good one. I'll have to use that someday.

reply by RPSaxena on 23-Nov-2021

Dear Friend, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP