Comment from Annette R.

Exceptional

I loved the humor at the end. The picture set me up to believe there would be a different ending! All the words supported that picture to the end and all were still absolutely true. Great Job!

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks, Annette. Your reaction was just what I was looking for.

Comment from robyn corum

Excellent

Dear Mystery Writer,

Well, you had me going the whole time. And then the reveal. Cute, cute, cute! The only thing is I'm not entirely sure this meets the contest criteria for LOVE. I might suggest you consider adding another stanza somewhere about you loving this place and thinking it's perfect or something. Maybe like 'I think this choice is perfect - blah, blah love.' You know?

Thanks and good luck!

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks, Robyn. Always looking forward to your reviews. It seems like love right up until the last stanza.

Comment from Terry Broxson

Excellent

A well-done entry for this contest, good luck. I was not sure where this love poem was going until I got to the twist, and it was really good. You did create some sexual tension without using any prohibited words. Very Creative.

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 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks, Terry. It's hard to get away from that sexual tension.

reply by Terry Broxson on 22-Nov-2021

LOL, it certainly can be hard!

Comment from Raul1

Excellent

This poem meets the requirements for the contest. It's beautifully written. The sentences flow with clarity. I like it. Excellent work! Good luck in the contest!

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 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks, Raul. I'm trying for a fourth poem about Patrick.

reply by Raul1 on 22-Nov-2021

You're welcome!

Comment from Jim Lorson Sr

Exceptional

I really enjoyed your poem! The humor and the questioning indecisiveness with trying to resolve theirs feelings really has this poem working well!

Good luck in the contest and I hope those judges really read this and give it the just due that it rightly deserves!

Jim

 Comment Written 22-Nov-2021

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reply by the author on 22-Nov-2021

Thanks, Jim, for the review and your kind words. I was hoping that you might be one of the judges.