Autumn's Demise
8 Word poem40 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
This poem describes a sad occasions, when Autumn passes to Winter. It shows how gently it can leave us. It is good personification for the season.
Your choice of artwork is perfect.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
  |
This poem describes a sad occasions, when Autumn passes to Winter. It shows how gently it can leave us. It is good personification for the season.
Your choice of artwork is perfect.
Congrats on placing second in the contest.
Keep writing and stay heatlhy
Happy Holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 09-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 12-Dec-2021
-
Thank you very much, Joan! Have a lovely day!
Melissa
-
You are most kindly welcome, Melissa.
Joan
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Congratulations on your prize for this gorgeous poem--so glad I caught up to this gem. Golden whispered breaths--such fresh and lovely imagery! Cheers. LIZ
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
|
Congratulations on your prize for this gorgeous poem--so glad I caught up to this gem. Golden whispered breaths--such fresh and lovely imagery! Cheers. LIZ
Comment Written 07-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 07-Dec-2021
-
Hello Liz. Thank you for your wonderful comments on this verse!!
Melissa
Comment from Shirley E Kennedy
A truly lovely poetry presentation.
You have matched the words, sentiment, imagery and overall presentation to perfection.
A well deserved All Time Best status.
Blessings
Shirley
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
 |
A truly lovely poetry presentation.
You have matched the words, sentiment, imagery and overall presentation to perfection.
A well deserved All Time Best status.
Blessings
Shirley
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
-
Hello Shirley. Thanks so much for your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Melissa,
I don't think there are many people who are sad to see winter or spring fade. Summer, perhaps, gets a few frowns. It's the end of swimming, BBQs, and backyard campfires. Kids have to go back to school... vacations are over. But the most beautiful season is Autumn. It's genuinely sad to see color blown from the trees. Maples and birches are stripped. And when November branches slap each other, when leaves brown below, we know winter has opened his door.
Your poem tells the sad tale. I see "Old" Autumn as late November/early December. We're there right now. I actually asked my granddaughter the other day, as the sun was going down... "what color do you see in that sunset, Alyssa?" I told her not to look directly at the sun, but to the right or left. She replied: "Gold".
Nicely penned for the contest! Good Luck!
It sure is nice to see you back with us in Fanstory.
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
|
Hi Melissa,
I don't think there are many people who are sad to see winter or spring fade. Summer, perhaps, gets a few frowns. It's the end of swimming, BBQs, and backyard campfires. Kids have to go back to school... vacations are over. But the most beautiful season is Autumn. It's genuinely sad to see color blown from the trees. Maples and birches are stripped. And when November branches slap each other, when leaves brown below, we know winter has opened his door.
Your poem tells the sad tale. I see "Old" Autumn as late November/early December. We're there right now. I actually asked my granddaughter the other day, as the sun was going down... "what color do you see in that sunset, Alyssa?" I told her not to look directly at the sun, but to the right or left. She replied: "Gold".
Nicely penned for the contest! Good Luck!
It sure is nice to see you back with us in Fanstory.
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
-
Thank you KB! As I was reading your words, I could see the wind blow the leaves around and those brisk November winds. I am still waiting to see that type of weather here in central Virginia. Perhaps, we will skip straight into winter and have those flakes of snow come... we seldom see them, but are always wishful for those blessed days of snow... Thank you for your wonderful review!
Melissa
Comment from Malerie
"Old Autumn gently passes..." You selected the perfect artwork for your poem. It reads well and has a nice flow. The image gives life to your well written words.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
|
"Old Autumn gently passes..." You selected the perfect artwork for your poem. It reads well and has a nice flow. The image gives life to your well written words.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
-
Thank you very much, Malerie!
Melissa
Comment from nomi338
When Autumn give way to Winter, sometimes it is barely noticed. One day you are admiring the changing colors of the leaves that fall gently from the trees. Next day you wake up to a foot of snow. You ask yourself, What the heck happened to Autumn, it was just here. Winter has snuck in overnight.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
|
When Autumn give way to Winter, sometimes it is barely noticed. One day you are admiring the changing colors of the leaves that fall gently from the trees. Next day you wake up to a foot of snow. You ask yourself, What the heck happened to Autumn, it was just here. Winter has snuck in overnight.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
-
Hi Nomi... thank you for your lovely review!
Melissa
Comment from Carol Clark2
I love your choice of eight words for this contest. This is a great metaphor for the passing of autumn. Nicely done! Best wishes in the contest. Carol
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
|
I love your choice of eight words for this contest. This is a great metaphor for the passing of autumn. Nicely done! Best wishes in the contest. Carol
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
-
Hello Carol. Thank you so very much for your lovely review. I apologize for being tardy in my thanks... life happened :)
Melissa
-
I started a new part-time job this week, so I'm behind also. No apology needed.
Comment from mermaids
You have a vivid use of words that captures the feel of Autumn passing on. Excellent two line poem that gives the reader strong feelings as one season changes into another. Excellent use of words.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
|
You have a vivid use of words that captures the feel of Autumn passing on. Excellent two line poem that gives the reader strong feelings as one season changes into another. Excellent use of words.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
-
Hi Mermaids. Thank you for your lovely review.
Melissa
Comment from Anne Johnston
Old Autumn gently passes
on golden, whispered breaths...
I like this picture of Autumn gently slipping away as the seasons change. Winter will follow.
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
|
Old Autumn gently passes
on golden, whispered breaths...
I like this picture of Autumn gently slipping away as the seasons change. Winter will follow.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 04-Dec-2021
-
Hello Anne. Thanks for your wonderful review. Yes, this autumn seems to be gently slipping by... I am wondering where Winter is... not here in central Virginia :).
Melissa
-
You are welcome. It is cold here and we are getting some flurries today
Comment from Frances Jean
Your poem speaks beautifully of Autumn's colours in just a few words. A lovely photo to accompany your work. I love the second line with it's personification. Thanks for sharing Franky
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
|
Your poem speaks beautifully of Autumn's colours in just a few words. A lovely photo to accompany your work. I love the second line with it's personification. Thanks for sharing Franky
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 02-Dec-2021
-
Hi Franky. I really appreciate your thoughts on this piece. I know our season is changing, but the golden tones still speak to me. :). Thank you.
Melissa
