Passage
A spiritual sonnet31 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Indeed a very beautiful poem.You have crafted it with care, and I congratulate you on a well-deserved win in the contest. Very lyrical imagery, very smooth rhyme, excellent metre. Impressive.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Indeed a very beautiful poem.You have crafted it with care, and I congratulate you on a well-deserved win in the contest. Very lyrical imagery, very smooth rhyme, excellent metre. Impressive.
Wendy
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Wendy, I truly appreciate your praise for my sonnet and the congrats. Many thanks for sharing your thoughts. Rod
Comment from nomi338
Everything that God controls takes place in an orderly manner. By arrangement, in a decent fashion. Just because Winter in California does not look like Winter in New York does not mean that anything is wrong. That is the way things have pretty much always been. Hurricanes attack Florida, Tornados attack the Midwest, and firestorms and earthquakes attack California. It has pretty much always been that way.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Everything that God controls takes place in an orderly manner. By arrangement, in a decent fashion. Just because Winter in California does not look like Winter in New York does not mean that anything is wrong. That is the way things have pretty much always been. Hurricanes attack Florida, Tornados attack the Midwest, and firestorms and earthquakes attack California. It has pretty much always been that way.
Comment Written 04-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you, nomi338, for sharing my poem and your thoughts. Rod
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You are welcome
Comment from Theodore McDowell
A great spiritual poem. Very well-written with some nice imagery and spiritual ideas. Congratulations on the contest win. Much deserved. Have a great Christmas.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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A great spiritual poem. Very well-written with some nice imagery and spiritual ideas. Congratulations on the contest win. Much deserved. Have a great Christmas.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much, Theodore, for sharing and praising my poem and the congrats. Rod
Comment from Alma Barkman
Beautiful! Living here in Canada autumn has a bittersweet feel to it that you have captured.
The Rhyme scheme is nice although "artistry" tends to break up the rhythm in the last line. Could it be substituted for a two-syllable word?
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Beautiful! Living here in Canada autumn has a bittersweet feel to it that you have captured.
The Rhyme scheme is nice although "artistry" tends to break up the rhythm in the last line. Could it be substituted for a two-syllable word?
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for sharing my poem, Alma. I am not sure why you think artistry breaks up the rhythm. The line is iambic: EnJOY his ARtisTRY while YOU still CAN.
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I see your point. When the emphasis is put on "you" it works!
Comment from Tina Crute
You detailed so much change in your poem and not just the leaves changing. You brought to light that nature had many changes. The next to last stanza mentions death and kind of brings the poem down, in my humble opinion. Maybe you could indicate it's a temporary life and life will come again?
Otherwise, this is beautiful and well-articulated!
Tina
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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You detailed so much change in your poem and not just the leaves changing. You brought to light that nature had many changes. The next to last stanza mentions death and kind of brings the poem down, in my humble opinion. Maybe you could indicate it's a temporary life and life will come again?
Otherwise, this is beautiful and well-articulated!
Tina
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Hi, Tina. Many thanks for sharing my poem. I am sorry my reference to death was a downer for you, but my closing couplet ends on an up beat.
Comment from Bill Schott
This spiritual sonnet, Passage, has the proper formatting and rightly merges the transitioning seasons with the human movement through life and eventually the new dawning of the better spring. Nice.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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This spiritual sonnet, Passage, has the proper formatting and rightly merges the transitioning seasons with the human movement through life and eventually the new dawning of the better spring. Nice.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you, Bill, for sharing and praising my sonnet. Rod
Comment from jake cosmos aller
I liked this traditional sonnet about the changes of the seasons and what it means as the autumn turns into the winter and the cold of winter reminds us all that death will come to us all some day.
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I liked this traditional sonnet about the changes of the seasons and what it means as the autumn turns into the winter and the cold of winter reminds us all that death will come to us all some day.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I am delighted you enjoyed my traditional sonnet, Jake. Many. Thanks for sharing. Rod
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Passage
Excellent entry for the Spiritual Poem writing prompt contest. I love the nature essence and I can relate. Great job! I hope you win.
Gypsy
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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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spiritual sonnet
Passage
Excellent entry for the Spiritual Poem writing prompt contest. I love the nature essence and I can relate. Great job! I hope you win.
Gypsy
Gypsy hugs
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thank you very much for your kind praise of my sonnet, Gypsy, and your best wishes. Rod
Comment from zanya
It's an inspiring Sonnet with a title that draws the reader's attention reflecting upon seasonal change and how it impacts our lives and the couplet reminds us of the inevitability of change - a delightful read
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It's an inspiring Sonnet with a title that draws the reader's attention reflecting upon seasonal change and how it impacts our lives and the couplet reminds us of the inevitability of change - a delightful read
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Zanya, I truly appreciate your high praise of my sonnet and your support. And many thanks also for the six bright stars. Rod
Comment from jaded831
Your poem reminds the reader to live in the moment, because God has a plan for everyone. Even the winter which reminds us things must die, so we can experience the beauty of spring. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Your poem reminds the reader to live in the moment, because God has a plan for everyone. Even the winter which reminds us things must die, so we can experience the beauty of spring. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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I really like how you summarized the theme of my sonnet. Many thanks for sharing it and your best wishes. Rod
