Never a dull moment
A nonsense poem6 total reviews
Comment from samantha0930
I like the poem, although the title and the picture make it seem like the content is going to be more exciting than it actually is, since it's more mundane things that happen. The line "Had lots of bills I had to pay" sounds repetitive since you said "had" twice in the same line, so if you could change one of them it would sound better. Maybe it could say, "Got lots of bills I had to pay" instead. You also forgot to capitalize your last 2 lines, and the title should be too. Overall the poem's fine, just a couple things that could be changed. :)
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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I like the poem, although the title and the picture make it seem like the content is going to be more exciting than it actually is, since it's more mundane things that happen. The line "Had lots of bills I had to pay" sounds repetitive since you said "had" twice in the same line, so if you could change one of them it would sound better. Maybe it could say, "Got lots of bills I had to pay" instead. You also forgot to capitalize your last 2 lines, and the title should be too. Overall the poem's fine, just a couple things that could be changed. :)
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thanks. Never a dull moment is tongue in cheek (sarcastic). I wont be going back to it. I just wrote it for a bit of fun for the competition. It came third.
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Yeah I suppose it should be sarcastic now that you say it; I didn't pick up on it while I was reading it though.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
Well, you did a minimum of three stanzas and for that, I commend you most gallantly! The picture is delightful and the title says just what you will about the nonsense poem as much as I can contemplate it is hard to follow but I enjoyed it just the same! Good luck with the contest I am sure you are a winner! Thank you for posting this I really enjoyed reading it after all!
Take good care of yourself, my friend!
Jesse
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Well, you did a minimum of three stanzas and for that, I commend you most gallantly! The picture is delightful and the title says just what you will about the nonsense poem as much as I can contemplate it is hard to follow but I enjoyed it just the same! Good luck with the contest I am sure you are a winner! Thank you for posting this I really enjoyed reading it after all!
Take good care of yourself, my friend!
Jesse
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 05-Dec-2021
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Thanks. So glad you like it.
Comment from Pantygynt
To make plans to go to LA and then not to go sounds more like common sense than nonsense to me. Have you experienced the traffic in that city? I haven't but I know people who live there and whenever they write they tell me they're stuck in traffic. They haven't moved for years!
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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To make plans to go to LA and then not to go sounds more like common sense than nonsense to me. Have you experienced the traffic in that city? I haven't but I know people who live there and whenever they write they tell me they're stuck in traffic. They haven't moved for years!
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Many thanks
Comment from Susan Newell
You have written a good poem that takes the ordinary and elevates it to the extraordinary, which I guess is what poetry is all about. I enjoyed reading about your day.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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You have written a good poem that takes the ordinary and elevates it to the extraordinary, which I guess is what poetry is all about. I enjoyed reading about your day.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Many thanks
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Most welcome.
Comment from Lloyd T. Okoko
Congratulations for a great effort made in writing a Kyrielle. Stanzas one and two are perfect in this respect.
I however, regret to inform you that instead of the traditional eight syllables count often evinced in each line of the stanzas; last two lines in stanza two are each one syllable short.
Nevertheless, l still have to commend you for coming up with a befitting rhyme scheme in tandem with the specifications of the writing prompt.
Excellent work. Stop tagging it as nonsense.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Congratulations for a great effort made in writing a Kyrielle. Stanzas one and two are perfect in this respect.
I however, regret to inform you that instead of the traditional eight syllables count often evinced in each line of the stanzas; last two lines in stanza two are each one syllable short.
Nevertheless, l still have to commend you for coming up with a befitting rhyme scheme in tandem with the specifications of the writing prompt.
Excellent work. Stop tagging it as nonsense.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much for spotting my stupid mistakes, I should have checked it. I am so glad you like it, I have corrected it. Take care. X
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Remain Blessed.
Comment from C. Gale Burnett
I really enjoyed your Kyrielle. I was surprised that you chose the monorhyme for your rhyme scheme, but it worked. I thought your repeating line, 'I had an interesting day' worked perfect in the placement as the first line of each stanza for it made me curious, wanting to know what made your day so entertaining. The overall presentation, including chosen artwork, made me chuckle.
Great entry for the contest!
Gale
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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I really enjoyed your Kyrielle. I was surprised that you chose the monorhyme for your rhyme scheme, but it worked. I thought your repeating line, 'I had an interesting day' worked perfect in the placement as the first line of each stanza for it made me curious, wanting to know what made your day so entertaining. The overall presentation, including chosen artwork, made me chuckle.
Great entry for the contest!
Gale
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thanks for the great review. So glad you like it.
