The Tor
Viewing comments for Chapter 3 "Ground Hog Day Reinvented"Adventures around & upon a hill
8 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
I'm glad they made it safely to their cottages. They sure caught on to driving in an unfamiliar position on a different side of the road pretty fast. Can't wait to see what happens next.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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I'm glad they made it safely to their cottages. They sure caught on to driving in an unfamiliar position on a different side of the road pretty fast. Can't wait to see what happens next.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2022
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Thank You for your involved review. On round abouts which I hate even in my next town over, we spotted a car so when we came out of it, we could follow that car & come out on the correct lane
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
This General Fiction, a chapter in the book The Tor, speaks about Ground Hog Day reinvented, as if it takes forever to get to their destination; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, keep posting, I, DR, love reviews; ALCREATOR
I do forgive: You may check inexpressiveness: 1. breath,(??? Space)"Okay, 2. Around and around, until I finally nabbed it. (??? inexpressive) 3. Torquay, (???)our 4. currently introducing itself (??? It) to us 5. we noticed, (??? delete comma)was not 6. we are empaths (??? empathy), like lightning ALCREATOR
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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This General Fiction, a chapter in the book The Tor, speaks about Ground Hog Day reinvented, as if it takes forever to get to their destination; well said, well done, thanks 4 sharing this, keep posting, I, DR, love reviews; ALCREATOR
I do forgive: You may check inexpressiveness: 1. breath,(??? Space)"Okay, 2. Around and around, until I finally nabbed it. (??? inexpressive) 3. Torquay, (???)our 4. currently introducing itself (??? It) to us 5. we noticed, (??? delete comma)was not 6. we are empaths (??? empathy), like lightning ALCREATOR
Comment Written 06-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your expressive review. I hope you return for more of the story. I want the reader to be as confused as the characters are.
Comment from Ramona Scarborough
Liz,
Though I'm arriving in the middle of your story, I still liked the opening about being confused about where they are going, since this happens often in real life. Also, the thought of "harp therapy" caught my interest since I've never heard of it. Just a couple of picky things: there is one space at the beginning and end of ... , an apostrophe after on the walls, Mom and Pop store I believe should be capitalized, you used the word foreign twice in the same sentence, maybe substitute strange for the second one. Liked the excitement likened to a hot ball of wax. Good Job!
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Liz,
Though I'm arriving in the middle of your story, I still liked the opening about being confused about where they are going, since this happens often in real life. Also, the thought of "harp therapy" caught my interest since I've never heard of it. Just a couple of picky things: there is one space at the beginning and end of ... , an apostrophe after on the walls, Mom and Pop store I believe should be capitalized, you used the word foreign twice in the same sentence, maybe substitute strange for the second one. Liked the excitement likened to a hot ball of wax. Good Job!
Comment Written 05-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 06-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Comment from aryr
This was inspirational and a great continuation chapter, Liz. I do feel bad for Madeline having to put up with Cordelia as navigator. Once they had everything figured out then came the rain, yukky. At least with their fresh start and no rain they made good time to the cottages. Life goes on, as they say and the pair will survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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This was inspirational and a great continuation chapter, Liz. I do feel bad for Madeline having to put up with Cordelia as navigator. Once they had everything figured out then came the rain, yukky. At least with their fresh start and no rain they made good time to the cottages. Life goes on, as they say and the pair will survive. Very well done and greatly enjoyed.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your appreciative review. I'm glad you are enjoying the story
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It was great, you are so welcome Liz.
Comment from country ranch writer
Never heard of such a thing here that I know of and I don't know much these days lol.music is good therapy and here they use dogs for therapy.They bring a different dog each week to visit folks so they don't get lonely it give up trying to get better.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Never heard of such a thing here that I know of and I don't know much these days lol.music is good therapy and here they use dogs for therapy.They bring a different dog each week to visit folks so they don't get lonely it give up trying to get better.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I'm glad it has you curious.
Comment from Judy Lawless
This chapter started out really well, with the frustrating situation of getting off course because of poor road signs. It came across to the uninvolved reader as rather humorous. Well done, Liz.
I suggest, though, that addressing the situation again in more detail after the fact is redundant. I would remove two paragraphs, beginning with the one that starts, "That was some difference from the previous strangling trip out of London." and the next one.
One little punctuation and wording error: "I took part in (participated in) part one(,) of my harp therapy course." This avoids using the word "part" twice so close together, and the comma isn't necessary.
I hope you find this helpful, Liz. I look forward to the next chapter.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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This chapter started out really well, with the frustrating situation of getting off course because of poor road signs. It came across to the uninvolved reader as rather humorous. Well done, Liz.
I suggest, though, that addressing the situation again in more detail after the fact is redundant. I would remove two paragraphs, beginning with the one that starts, "That was some difference from the previous strangling trip out of London." and the next one.
One little punctuation and wording error: "I took part in (participated in) part one(,) of my harp therapy course." This avoids using the word "part" twice so close together, and the comma isn't necessary.
I hope you find this helpful, Liz. I look forward to the next chapter.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your supportive review. I'm glad you are enjoying it.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
This is a very interesting story, especially told from the POV of Americans. We were in England many years ago, and the driving was terrifying. Unless the roads have changed a lot, don't you always turn left on roundabouts to get off one highway and on to another? I look forward to reading more of their adventures.
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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This is a very interesting story, especially told from the POV of Americans. We were in England many years ago, and the driving was terrifying. Unless the roads have changed a lot, don't you always turn left on roundabouts to get off one highway and on to another? I look forward to reading more of their adventures.
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. We picked a car going where we wanted to & followed them so we'd end up on the correct lane. I hate them in US. I have to go through 2 on my way to a friend's. I find them a brain challenge. The problem is I knew several of the ones when they were just 2 roads intersecting.
Comment from lyenochka
Whew! I can imagine how terrifying it must be to be driving a foreign car with the steering wheel in the wrong place and on the wrong side of the road, in the dark and with highways marked differently! So glad our gals got their safely.
With two empaths who are dowsers, this story promises to be good. I wonder if you really do play the harp.
We wanted to avoidant repeat (avoid a ?)
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Whew! I can imagine how terrifying it must be to be driving a foreign car with the steering wheel in the wrong place and on the wrong side of the road, in the dark and with highways marked differently! So glad our gals got their safely.
With two empaths who are dowsers, this story promises to be good. I wonder if you really do play the harp.
We wanted to avoidant repeat (avoid a ?)
Comment Written 03-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 03-Dec-2021
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Thank you for your involved review. I played guitar & my friend really did play the harp for therapy.
