Football - A Novel
Viewing comments for Chapter 65 "Football Chapter 35 part 1"A mother faces life's struggles.
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Comment from Rosemary Everson1
I like your story, but then you know that. Good thing Katherine boys know and have seen some of her past experiences. Gabe is very protected of her and that's wonderful.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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I like your story, but then you know that. Good thing Katherine boys know and have seen some of her past experiences. Gabe is very protected of her and that's wonderful.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review. Yes, Gabriel wants to protect her.
Comment from Sanku
This is a very good chapter. It was surprising that the other coach refused to accept the misbehaviour of one of his team.
Katherine's past has tragic elements..But she is a gutsy woman.
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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This is a very good chapter. It was surprising that the other coach refused to accept the misbehaviour of one of his team.
Katherine's past has tragic elements..But she is a gutsy woman.
Comment Written 21-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 21-Dec-2021
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I've ran it across it before. They want to win at all costs. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Ritsal
Even though reading a chapter in the middle of a novel I was engrossed in the story. Characters are believeable and I could emphasize with Kate and felt angry when Judy was accosted. As a football fan (Alabama Crimson Tide) the title drew me in and then you also have dogs in the story. That made it great. When I have more time I will check out the other chapters. I'm just getting back to Fanstory after being gone for several years. Thanks for the interesting read.
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Even though reading a chapter in the middle of a novel I was engrossed in the story. Characters are believeable and I could emphasize with Kate and felt angry when Judy was accosted. As a football fan (Alabama Crimson Tide) the title drew me in and then you also have dogs in the story. That made it great. When I have more time I will check out the other chapters. I'm just getting back to Fanstory after being gone for several years. Thanks for the interesting read.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Please come back again. I enjoyed your review.
Comment from RPSaxena
Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow, and because of this quality the piece didn't seem lengthy.
The story is moving ahead smoothly without letting the reader feeling boredom in any way.
Interesting Indeed!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Hello Barbara.Wilkey,
Nice piece of Romance Fiction in continuation having captivating flow, and because of this quality the piece didn't seem lengthy.
The story is moving ahead smoothly without letting the reader feeling boredom in any way.
Interesting Indeed!
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
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Barbara.Wilkey, Most Welcome!
With best wishes,
~ RP
Comment from robyn corum
Barb,
Great chapter. You didn't follow up on what the video showed - will that come later? I like the pace of this story - true love worked quickly, but you've made it sound honest and real. Good work!
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Barb,
Great chapter. You didn't follow up on what the video showed - will that come later? I like the pace of this story - true love worked quickly, but you've made it sound honest and real. Good work!
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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I figured it was understood when Rhonda wasn't disciplined. Thank you for the kind review.
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maybe?
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I'll re-look it.
Comment from RShipp
The interactions/ conversations between the adults and the children and adults seem very realistic. Well done.
There is always a moving plot in your story as you begin to include your backstory... that is often hard to accomplish.
Nice job.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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The interactions/ conversations between the adults and the children and adults seem very realistic. Well done.
There is always a moving plot in your story as you begin to include your backstory... that is often hard to accomplish.
Nice job.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-This is a very good chapter, Barbara.
-It was fine to read it the way it was.
-It flowed well and the description was good.
-I am surprised that Katherine is allowed to
run by her girls. I imagine that is what
upset the other girl.
-Interesting how that coach
denies any wrong doing.
-I didn't get the line about
Katherine taking a punch until the end,
but I know that was intended. It was
interesting because at the time,
we would assume it was part of coaching.
-Later, Jordan clarifies things and has
the courage to speak to Coach. That
is admirable for a young man.
-One small thing:
"Come on, breath. [breathe]
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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-This is a very good chapter, Barbara.
-It was fine to read it the way it was.
-It flowed well and the description was good.
-I am surprised that Katherine is allowed to
run by her girls. I imagine that is what
upset the other girl.
-Interesting how that coach
denies any wrong doing.
-I didn't get the line about
Katherine taking a punch until the end,
but I know that was intended. It was
interesting because at the time,
we would assume it was part of coaching.
-Later, Jordan clarifies things and has
the courage to speak to Coach. That
is admirable for a young man.
-One small thing:
"Come on, breath. [breathe]
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I mess up breath and breathe each time. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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You are welcome for the review. Maybe think e is for breathe!
Comment from Ric Myworld
Yes, if the abuse happened once, it very likely happen more. And it sadly happens in more household than we can ever imagine. Now, maybe Gabe will punch him out. LOL. Just teasing. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Yes, if the abuse happened once, it very likely happen more. And it sadly happens in more household than we can ever imagine. Now, maybe Gabe will punch him out. LOL. Just teasing. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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George is dead or Gabriel probably would. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
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LOL. Yes, after I wrote that, I thought, I believe George is dead.
Comment from amahra
Now I see why Katherine is so cautious with men; her husband punched her. Good chapter that reveals more about the monster Kate married.
Gabriel massaged his temples. ["] I snapped an order.["] He motioned for both girls to follow as he headed toward the other coach.
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Now I see why Katherine is so cautious with men; her husband punched her. Good chapter that reveals more about the monster Kate married.
Gabriel massaged his temples. ["] I snapped an order.["] He motioned for both girls to follow as he headed toward the other coach.
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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I wanted that to be thought, so it should be in italics. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
It's just as well Kate's abusive husband has died, or Gabe might have put him in the ground anyway! I hate men who hit women. That's why Kate is always stiff when Gabe bosses her about. I smiled when Joshua said the boys all knew their mum and Gabe had a 'thing going' Lol. Another wonderful chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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It's just as well Kate's abusive husband has died, or Gabe might have put him in the ground anyway! I hate men who hit women. That's why Kate is always stiff when Gabe bosses her about. I smiled when Joshua said the boys all knew their mum and Gabe had a 'thing going' Lol. Another wonderful chapter, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 13-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 13-Dec-2021
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Thank you for the kind review.
