The unmentionable word
Grief and pain6 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Cancer is a horrible disease that doesn't key on sex or age or even lifestyle, totally. Mutated cells, for whatever reason, start bumping off other cells, taking away those we love before their time. I'm sorry for yours and everyone's losses. I wish I had a six.
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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Cancer is a horrible disease that doesn't key on sex or age or even lifestyle, totally. Mutated cells, for whatever reason, start bumping off other cells, taking away those we love before their time. I'm sorry for yours and everyone's losses. I wish I had a six.
Comment Written 17-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 17-Dec-2021
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I have a good friend that is dying of cancer and that is what inspired me to write this. Life's a bitch.
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I'm sorry about your friend. I have two, first cousins, a brother and a sister dying with cancer. They well be the third and four of my uncle's children who have died with the dreaded disease. I don't think anyone can avoid the pain it spreads across our world. And we are still using the same treatments, although a few newer ones recently, that have been used since the 1940s. It makes me wonder . . .
Comment from John Cranford
Beautiful poem! It reminds me of when my mother died when I was just a boy. Although it was over 60 years ago, it left a hole in my life that exists to this day. But God has a way of softening your heart over time. My memories are no longer of the grief we experienced when she was taken, but of the joys she brought us during her shortened stay on this earth -- sweet memories.
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Beautiful poem! It reminds me of when my mother died when I was just a boy. Although it was over 60 years ago, it left a hole in my life that exists to this day. But God has a way of softening your heart over time. My memories are no longer of the grief we experienced when she was taken, but of the joys she brought us during her shortened stay on this earth -- sweet memories.
Comment Written 16-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 16-Dec-2021
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Thank you so much John for your wonderful review and the shiny stars.
I am also very honoured that you are going to be my fan. Take care. Jen.
Comment from Wendy G
I understand your feelings of loss and grief and pain. Some things we do not understand, and life does seem unfair. You expressed it simply and clearly. Sending good wishes for your thoughtful entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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I understand your feelings of loss and grief and pain. Some things we do not understand, and life does seem unfair. You expressed it simply and clearly. Sending good wishes for your thoughtful entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 15-Dec-2021
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Many thanks
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the Emotions writing prompt contest. I love the presentation and imagery. The poem flows well. I like the theme too.Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Excellent entry for the Emotions writing prompt contest. I love the presentation and imagery. The poem flows well. I like the theme too.Good luck in the contest!
Gypsy
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thanks Gypsy
Comment from Alcreator Litt Dear
You have worded your experience, perhaps everyone has the same word to express, why your good friends do leave you, why you get suffer and pain, you do not commit sins, but curse is always there; how and why; and for curse so many lives ruin every day, everywhere; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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You have worded your experience, perhaps everyone has the same word to express, why your good friends do leave you, why you get suffer and pain, you do not commit sins, but curse is always there; how and why; and for curse so many lives ruin every day, everywhere; well said, well done; keep writing. ALCREATOR LITT DEAR
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thanks
Comment from Frank Malley
This poem about the losses caused by "...the big C" ( cancer, maybe covid) wishes to create an empathy for the pain of loss. The two-beat lines would be better doubled up into four beats; I can't justify this other than by saying it slows the poem down a little and makes it more somber. "The Unmentionable Word" makes direct statements about cancer and the pain of loss it causes. Poetry becomes more individual and distinct when it substitutes concrete examples for abstract statements. For example, in Stanza 1, try "I lost brown-eyed Sara/Eloquent and dear/ Like a warm plum/ when I held her near. Try to replace bare and abstract statements with examples that can be felt by the senses we all possess.
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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This poem about the losses caused by "...the big C" ( cancer, maybe covid) wishes to create an empathy for the pain of loss. The two-beat lines would be better doubled up into four beats; I can't justify this other than by saying it slows the poem down a little and makes it more somber. "The Unmentionable Word" makes direct statements about cancer and the pain of loss it causes. Poetry becomes more individual and distinct when it substitutes concrete examples for abstract statements. For example, in Stanza 1, try "I lost brown-eyed Sara/Eloquent and dear/ Like a warm plum/ when I held her near. Try to replace bare and abstract statements with examples that can be felt by the senses we all possess.
Comment Written 14-Dec-2021
reply by the author on 14-Dec-2021
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Thanks for your opinion
