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impending environmental collapse

Haiku (water rivulets)

13 total reviews 
Comment from karenina
Exceptional
This work has reached the exceptional level

I only wish I had a plethora of sixes...for each time I come to read you I am tempted to leave that rating! I see so much in this haiku... the woeful weeping of an iceberg who is witness to its own demise--pieces of itself slipping away from their white-knuckled hold and swallowed by an unforgiving sea. The negligence of mankind -- to turn toward the sun and shrug our collective shoulders in the classic "It's not my fault" stance...
When shores are swallowed whole, who will we blame then? This is fine work. Ah, never mind! I'm giving it a six! (smile)

Karenina

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
    Karenina,

    Wow, what a great response to my post. Surely your words/review could be turned into your own poem. I see so many good phrases sprinkled about.

    The negligence of man is too often the case. Honestly, I feel the same way about persons not getting a Covid vaccination. The excuse "not me" does not register in my mind.

    Your sixer is just a bonus for my ego. I do cherish your fanship. THANKS!

    Mark

    P.S. Today on public radio, I listened to part of the TED talk. Presenters talked about the overfishing in the oceans. One fish was down to 10% of its previous population in 10+ years. Aggressive action must be taken to revive our stock. When man cuts down the last tree, there will be none and the species may never be regenerated.

    Mark
reply by karenina on 04-Jan-2022
    Thanks Mark! Glad to see my review resonated with you. Hope you "own" that my response can only be elicited by intelligent, well-informed, work.

    I watched a Nat/Geo documentary not too long ago on the overfishing of oceans. We commit the crimes and we call ourselves the victims.

    The ultimate Homelessness will be when we wear out our resources here.

    Karenina
reply by karenina on 04-Jan-2022
    Thanks Mark! Glad to see my review resonated with you. Hope you "own" that my response can only be elicited by intelligent, well-informed, work.

    I watched a Nat/Geo documentary not too long ago on the overfishing of oceans. We commit the crimes and we call ourselves the victims.

    The ultimate Homelessness will be when we wear out our resources here.

    Karenina
Comment from LisaMay
Excellent
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The calving icebergs serve as a graphic image of impending environmental collapse, successfully depicted in image and words in your haiku. I like that you have used this form as a strong message on behalf of our threatened planet.

 Comment Written 04-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
    Thanks Lisa.

    I am with you on this environmental crisis. Pleased my post was in sunny with you.

    Mark
Comment from Earl Corp
Excellent
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I think is the best haiku I have read in a long time. You followed the syllable count and it was completely about nature. Did you mean "carves" instead of "calves"? Good luck in the contest.

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 Comment Written 04-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 04-Jan-2022
    Earl,

    When the berg/glacier carves off, the expression is calves. Thanks for your good wishes.

    Best wishes to you and yours too for the New Year.

    Mark