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Comment from David Louis Bragen
Awesome story! I was enthralled enough that I will admit you really deserve to win. Thank you for the thrill and the education. I am watching for whatever else comes from your corner of the world, wherever that is.
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Awesome story! I was enthralled enough that I will admit you really deserve to win. Thank you for the thrill and the education. I am watching for whatever else comes from your corner of the world, wherever that is.
Comment Written 09-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 09-Mar-2022
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Thank you very much. And welcome.
Comment from Contests
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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 A contest winning entry! A seven star rating from the Contest Committee for posting the winning contest entry. |
Comment Written 08-Mar-2022
reply by the author on 08-Mar-2022
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Thank you!
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
Yeah...You are a writer of a higher caliber. For, I could tell, as
soon as I start reading the chapter, that you were seasoned.
Nevertheless, since it's all about networking in unity, I will be
looking forward to reading more. Stay Connected
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Yeah...You are a writer of a higher caliber. For, I could tell, as
soon as I start reading the chapter, that you were seasoned.
Nevertheless, since it's all about networking in unity, I will be
looking forward to reading more. Stay Connected
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much.
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Comment from LJbutterfly
This is a short, fast moving and humorous story, that is also very creative fiction. I can't imagine a father talking to his twelve year old son the way the father did in this story, but the boy enjoyed it and asked questions.
This is laugh out loud material: "You married her, moved to the states, and had me, right?"
"Heck no. I met your mama in a bar." Best wishes in the contest.
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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This is a short, fast moving and humorous story, that is also very creative fiction. I can't imagine a father talking to his twelve year old son the way the father did in this story, but the boy enjoyed it and asked questions.
This is laugh out loud material: "You married her, moved to the states, and had me, right?"
"Heck no. I met your mama in a bar." Best wishes in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 20-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much
Comment from GeraldShuler
I listened to every word as though I was that 12 year old. This was very well written and presented. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece. I look forward to reading more of your work.
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I listened to every word as though I was that 12 year old. This was very well written and presented. Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from jenintorre
Wow wow wow. What a fantastuc story. I think you must have a winner here. I loved the humour and was totally engrossed from start to finish. Loved it!!!
Good luck in the competition. Jen.
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Wow wow wow. What a fantastuc story. I think you must have a winner here. I loved the humour and was totally engrossed from start to finish. Loved it!!!
Good luck in the competition. Jen.
Comment Written 19-Jan-2022
Comment from NANCY V. FORREST
My,my my, that was fine twist on a shaggy dog-type story. I loved it. It carried the same tone throughout with out a missed beat. Even the illustration was a misdirection. Nice.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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My,my my, that was fine twist on a shaggy dog-type story. I loved it. It carried the same tone throughout with out a missed beat. Even the illustration was a misdirection. Nice.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much.
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:-)
Comment from nomi338
Listen, I spent 18 months in Okinawa during the early 60s and I can tell you that sex often took place between American GIs and native women just that easy. Of course most of the sex was purchased from prostitutes, but not all. I had many pleasing encounters by being in the right place at the right time, and also being in the right frame of mind.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Listen, I spent 18 months in Okinawa during the early 60s and I can tell you that sex often took place between American GIs and native women just that easy. Of course most of the sex was purchased from prostitutes, but not all. I had many pleasing encounters by being in the right place at the right time, and also being in the right frame of mind.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much. I bet you have lots of stories to write.
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Yes, I immersed myself so much into the culture that I was on more than a few occasions, accused of going native.
Comment from dmt1967
I loved this story. The writing was very entertaining and I had a grin on my face from beginning to end. I thought it was very funny. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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I loved this story. The writing was very entertaining and I had a grin on my face from beginning to end. I thought it was very funny. Thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much.
Comment from SimianSavant
It's too bad this one didn't make it into one of the family contests, but I suppose it might DQd by the usual rules. Great story. I thought the funniest part was paragraph 4. "...but whatever..." Definitely sounds like my dad.
You have a couple fragmented sentences starting here just FYI: => make a long story short. <= Maybe you did it deliberately just to break up the quoted sentence.
The punchline at the end works pretty well too. Thanks for the read.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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It's too bad this one didn't make it into one of the family contests, but I suppose it might DQd by the usual rules. Great story. I thought the funniest part was paragraph 4. "...but whatever..." Definitely sounds like my dad.
You have a couple fragmented sentences starting here just FYI: => make a long story short. <= Maybe you did it deliberately just to break up the quoted sentence.
The punchline at the end works pretty well too. Thanks for the read.
Comment Written 18-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much.
