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Eavesdroppers Are We All

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A Reader Caught in the Middle of an Intrigue

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Comment from sandramitchell
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I'm all over the place this week, Jay, Sorry it's so long coming. Now I'm getting into it, and so is Gregory but he still needs convincing that what he's doing is important. Another excellent part, my friend. :)) Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    Thanks, Sandra. Things will start popping in scenes 4 and 5. I have a feeling some of the audience is going out for popcorn and not coming back. LOL, thanks for your loyalty.
Comment from BLACKTITANIUM86
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I'm not going to lie, I hate when people eavesdrop on
other people. Especially when they eavesdrop on me!
So, I can relate. Nevertheless, this is turning out to be
quite a novel. Keep Writing

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    I'm glad you're enjoying this, my friend. It's good to see your return. With some people here, plays are not their thing, so when I have someone return I tend to latch on with both clawed hands. LOL, thanks for your kind words and the stars.
Comment from estory
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There's plenty of emotion in the dialogue here, and I liked this 'thinking out loud' construction in which the characters share their private thoughts and create these sharp confrontations and awkward social settings. The characters names of Martha and George remind me of Albee's Whose Afraid of Virginia Woolf. estory

 Comment Written 19-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 19-Jan-2022
    I think you mean Martha and Jackson. I believe you have him confused with George Jefferson. But his wife's name was Weejee (at least that's how he pronounced it). Anyway, I'm just thrilled you stopped by to read. The confrontations build in scenes four and five. May I plan on your being there to root their unfolding? You are appreciated. Oh, I remember the movie, "Whose Afraid of Virginia Wolfe". My wife and I were on a light and carefree date and we came out of the movie totally depressed.
reply by estory on 21-Jan-2022
    George and Martha were the couple in Whose Afraid of Virginia Woolf. WeeGee was a famous photographer of crime scenes in New York. estory
reply by the author on 21-Jan-2022
    Gotcha. WeeGee was also George Jefferson's wife (which was never spelled out, only pronounced) on the 70s or 80s TV show, "The Jeffersons", a spinoff from "All in the Family." Virginia Wolfe is one of my favorite authors, but she was a real shrew in Albee's play (or the screen adaptation, anyway).
Comment from lauralumummu
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This is certainly an interesting script with its colorful characters and their quirky way of speaking. This reads like a play to me, not sure about a screenplay. Your writing is professional and unique. Of course, your grammar is great and your imagination is genius. All the best, Laura.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thank you, Laura. This isn't a screenplay. It's a stage play. I do appreciate your reading it and hope to see you as a regular. I don't find that many people who take to playwrighting and when I do, I want to dig in my claws and hold tight. LOL, thanks, Laura.
reply by lauralumummu on 18-Jan-2022
    You are welcome!
Comment from Barry Penfold
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Love the setting and the concept behind this Scene and can see the potential for some riotous conversations. Of course Rudy the dog will become a favorite and revelations will be coming from everywhere. Well done.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    I do appreciate you, Barry. I always love to have new readers. It's not easy getting anyone to read plays nowadays. And I don't want to let go when someone drops by. So do you want the toaster? Or the mini-microwave? LOL, seriously, do come back!
reply by Barry Penfold on 19-Jan-2022
    Oh it is the toaster for me. Keep well.
Comment from Melodie Michelle
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Excellent script my friend! The characters are exemplary and the storyline is terrific;-) It help my attention throughout the piece!
Thanks for sharing this well written piece with us and many blessings to you;-)

 Comment Written 18-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
    Thank you, Melodie! I hope you stick around. The storyline picks up next scene and really intensifies in the 5th. Would love to have you aboard. -Jay
reply by Melodie Michelle on 19-Jan-2022
    Oh I'm not going anywhere Jay, I totally love FanStory and you guys! Thank you for your support!
Comment from tfawcus
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Interesting character interplay between the philistine and the philosopher. You've set yourself quite a challenge having two invisible characters on stage and a dog to upstage them all. Jackson is going to have his hands full as compere of the show. This is unfolding nicely.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    Thank you, Tony. This play has a little different drive than my other plays. Things just seem to be going in circles, while character is being revealed. I hope the forward thrust will begin next scene ... or the one after.
Comment from lancellot
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I commend your writing ability. This is well made and well edited. I must confess though, that although many words flowed, I am unsure about what of importance happened and what I am reading at this point in the play. But, I am hopeful the purpose of the story will become clear soon.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    God, I hope so, Lance. I keep waiting for one of the characters to give me that line that will give unity and centrality to the play. So far, everyone wants to get into the act. Thank you for reading, Lance.
Comment from Liz O'Neill
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Gregory is trying to accept that he is just an eavesdropper. The operative word here is 'just'. However, if he looked at the importance of his role, he might be surprised. I like how you worked the regional dialect into the characterization. Well done.

 Comment Written 17-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    Thank you, Liz, for your perceptive review. Not everyone likes the characters. Some seem polarizing ... but that's okay, isn't it?
reply by Liz O'Neill on 17-Jan-2022
    As long as we get a rise out of our readers, we have done our job.
Comment from lyenochka
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I do like your philosophical Harry character, and it seems he has the support of the scribe Gregory and Cillila, too! I think Mr. Piebald needs to be shown the door if he keeps up with his rudeness. The Bett character is very unusual for women judges were rare in those days. I do remember the script with her a while back.
I hope we will get more of the back story of the Jackson and Martha's diner.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022


reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
    Jackson and Martha's backstory begins in earnest in Scene 5. I'm working on it now. Scene four is ready and on the shelf. Thank you, Helen.
reply by lyenochka on 17-Jan-2022
    On the shelf? Wow, you work ahead! Good for you!