Jars
Kyrielle sonnet54 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
The repetition of the last line, with the stalking wolf, gives a premonition of danger, and one cannot relax or lessen one's guard. Tears filling jars - they are counted as precious by God. He sees each one. Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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The repetition of the last line, with the stalking wolf, gives a premonition of danger, and one cannot relax or lessen one's guard. Tears filling jars - they are counted as precious by God. He sees each one. Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thanks Wendy, for these super comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from lyenochka
Loved your kyrielle sonnet, Roy! You do this form so well. I feel a strong spiritual warning in this poem. It's no wonder that Jesus asks us to pray for protection against temptation. Great Scripture verses, too!
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Loved your kyrielle sonnet, Roy! You do this form so well. I feel a strong spiritual warning in this poem. It's no wonder that Jesus asks us to pray for protection against temptation. Great Scripture verses, too!
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thanks for these wise comments and an empathetic review, blessings Roy
Comment from Raul1
I think that you have written well this poem. It is clear and concise. It is interesting and entertaining. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like it. Nice job. Thank you for sharing!
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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I think that you have written well this poem. It is clear and concise. It is interesting and entertaining. Excellent work! No grammatical errors. I like it. Nice job. Thank you for sharing!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
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Thanks Raul, for these super comments and review, blessings Roy
Comment from Elizabeth Emerald
Powerful imagery, well-phrased.
How many tears a jar will fill==sounds backwards--suggest replace with your penultimate line: How many jars could tear-drops fill,
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Powerful imagery, well-phrased.
How many tears a jar will fill==sounds backwards--suggest replace with your penultimate line: How many jars could tear-drops fill,
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thanks Liz, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
Comment from aryr
This was well done, Roy. I loved how you started the poem with a question and ended or rather the second last line with a question. You went full circle. The last line of each stanza was repeated. Your words investigated the span of life. Very much enjoyed. Blessings.
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This was well done, Roy. I loved how you started the poem with a question and ended or rather the second last line with a question. You went full circle. The last line of each stanza was repeated. Your words investigated the span of life. Very much enjoyed. Blessings.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thanks Alie, for these marvellous comments and a great review, blessings Roy
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You are most welcome, Roy. Blessings.
Comment from kiwigirl2821
Now Roy, this is down right frightening! It's a dooms day prediction as opposed to anything relaxing or soft to read. You come in with your words flaming around you like a sword and go all wolfy which is perhaps never a good thing. This one affected me on a few levels.
xoxo Kiwi
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Now Roy, this is down right frightening! It's a dooms day prediction as opposed to anything relaxing or soft to read. You come in with your words flaming around you like a sword and go all wolfy which is perhaps never a good thing. This one affected me on a few levels.
xoxo Kiwi
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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You have to know it?s background to know the source. I don?t think the world situation is exactly upbeat and optimistic, but believe or not the poem is upbeat, heh heh, thanks Deb, blessings Roy
Comment from Yardier
So true my friend.
The warlock call is out and about
The evil last days have begun
The wolves blatantly call the sheep
And bleatingly they come
There is a side to nightfall
Eternity has held
For hapless prey and those who say
"Long last the dog's kingdom"
Through liquid light they delight
To sneer leer, and mock you
They dart back into shadows
They stay just out of view
So gather all your kinsmen
Protect them with your love
Teach them about His wisdom
Share the peace from above
His mantel will drape around you
It will cover all your fears
He will carry all your burdens
He always will be near
So as the days go marching by
And we grow ever stronger
Prowling wolves seem less a threat
As we approach "Up Yonder"
From up there upon that knoll
And if we could look back
We'd see a group of struggling dogs;
A devilish mongrel pack
They'd be howling lost in time
Chasing their own tails
To the center of all evilness
Where sin and hate prevail
We will not be bothered
By the absent unctuous dark
We shall sing great praises
Of God's great work of art
Our voices bright with glory
Rising sweetly from our lips
Will fill all of heaven
With gracious thankfulness
Until that time abide in Him
Heed not the warlock call
Their darkest hour's coming
The wicked will surely fall
James A. Anderberg
© 1980
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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So true my friend.
The warlock call is out and about
The evil last days have begun
The wolves blatantly call the sheep
And bleatingly they come
There is a side to nightfall
Eternity has held
For hapless prey and those who say
"Long last the dog's kingdom"
Through liquid light they delight
To sneer leer, and mock you
They dart back into shadows
They stay just out of view
So gather all your kinsmen
Protect them with your love
Teach them about His wisdom
Share the peace from above
His mantel will drape around you
It will cover all your fears
He will carry all your burdens
He always will be near
So as the days go marching by
And we grow ever stronger
Prowling wolves seem less a threat
As we approach "Up Yonder"
From up there upon that knoll
And if we could look back
We'd see a group of struggling dogs;
A devilish mongrel pack
They'd be howling lost in time
Chasing their own tails
To the center of all evilness
Where sin and hate prevail
We will not be bothered
By the absent unctuous dark
We shall sing great praises
Of God's great work of art
Our voices bright with glory
Rising sweetly from our lips
Will fill all of heaven
With gracious thankfulness
Until that time abide in Him
Heed not the warlock call
Their darkest hour's coming
The wicked will surely fall
James A. Anderberg
© 1980
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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A superb poem James, are you going to post, I wrote my first song in 1990, you beat me by a fair margin. Thanks dear friend for your continued faithful support, and outstanding comments, reviews and stars, blessings Roy
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Yes, Roy, I will post in the near future. First, I have prose to polish and finish.
All the best, James.
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WEll done James
Comment from LateBloomer
Hello Roy, a thought-provoking Kyrielle sonnet. The wolf gives us lots to think about. Your poem reads and flows well and has silky rhyming within. I especially liked:
The hunter hovers like a hawk*,
yet in the night the wolf doth stalk
(Good alliteration with hunter/hovers/hawk
and vivid imagery of the wolf in the night.)
Thank you for your informative author's notes. They are very helpful.
Well chosen artwork. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Hello Roy, a thought-provoking Kyrielle sonnet. The wolf gives us lots to think about. Your poem reads and flows well and has silky rhyming within. I especially liked:
The hunter hovers like a hawk*,
yet in the night the wolf doth stalk
(Good alliteration with hunter/hovers/hawk
and vivid imagery of the wolf in the night.)
Thank you for your informative author's notes. They are very helpful.
Well chosen artwork. A pleasure to read. Keep the blue waters flowing. LateBloomer
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Thanks Margaret, for these splendid comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
Comment from GeraldShuler
This is superb writing. I only wish my words could flow so smoothly across the page. Your refrain worked perfectly. I write more prose than poetry but the quality of your is obvious.
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This is superb writing. I only wish my words could flow so smoothly across the page. Your refrain worked perfectly. I write more prose than poetry but the quality of your is obvious.
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
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Thanks Gerald for these splendid comments and a lovely review, don?t worry, your gift too is obvious, blessings Roy
Comment from Cristine22
Beautiful. The flow here is excellent, easy to read while still holding a clear sophistication. I love the image that comes from the line, "How many jars could tear-drops fill." Great job!
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Beautiful. The flow here is excellent, easy to read while still holding a clear sophistication. I love the image that comes from the line, "How many jars could tear-drops fill." Great job!
Comment Written 11-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 11-Jan-2022
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Thanks Cristine, for these splendid comments and a lovely review, blessings Roy
