Down the Slippery Slope
A new friend tempts me to join her in mischief.21 total reviews
Comment from Mary Shifman
I enjoyed reading your story. It brought back memories of the year I turned ten. I was spending a couple of weeks with my aunt and uncle. There was a neighboring farm with a large family, one of which was a girl a couple of years older than me. She told me in some detail about how women got pregnant and a lot of other things that my mom would have been horrified that I was hearing. It never occurred to my aunt that Missy was so well educated in the ways of the world. She swore me to secrecy and I don't think I ever told a soul what she'd told me. I'm sure I thought it was all too gross.
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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I enjoyed reading your story. It brought back memories of the year I turned ten. I was spending a couple of weeks with my aunt and uncle. There was a neighboring farm with a large family, one of which was a girl a couple of years older than me. She told me in some detail about how women got pregnant and a lot of other things that my mom would have been horrified that I was hearing. It never occurred to my aunt that Missy was so well educated in the ways of the world. She swore me to secrecy and I don't think I ever told a soul what she'd told me. I'm sure I thought it was all too gross.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the review of this story. There is always some kid around who knows more facts of life than your mom has been willing to share. I was shocked when I learned about that as well. I was convinced my mother and dad would never go along with anything so bizarre.
Comment from Brett Matthew West
"bag a wormy" should be bag of wormy.
Like "Turnip Joe's" vernacular. Adds more "color" to the story.
"asking question" should be asking questions.
Seems "Jo Ann" was a bad influence. No wonder she had brothers in the pen. Big crimes usually result out of a childhood of petty ones.
Interesting story that held interest throughout.
Getting away from Jo Ann's bad influences for the best.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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"bag a wormy" should be bag of wormy.
Like "Turnip Joe's" vernacular. Adds more "color" to the story.
"asking question" should be asking questions.
Seems "Jo Ann" was a bad influence. No wonder she had brothers in the pen. Big crimes usually result out of a childhood of petty ones.
Interesting story that held interest throughout.
Getting away from Jo Ann's bad influences for the best.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Brett. I really appreciate your reading my story. I enjoyed your comments. I'm glad it was able to hold your interest.
Beth
Comment from sherrygreywolf
We have several family "legends" as well and who knows how much of any of them are true. Love reading about others family tales, true or not - haha.
Loved your use of local dialects. Good luck on the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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We have several family "legends" as well and who knows how much of any of them are true. Love reading about others family tales, true or not - haha.
Loved your use of local dialects. Good luck on the contest.
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much Sherry, I really appreciate the review and comments. Enough of the legend of Sullivan's Hollow is true that you can read about it on the net. Most of the story was true.
Beth
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
Oh goodness, did that new girl get her friend into trouble. I cannot imagine someone killing seventy people. Her little white lies were probably not true, not impressive; why would someone tell stories like she did?
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Oh goodness, did that new girl get her friend into trouble. I cannot imagine someone killing seventy people. Her little white lies were probably not true, not impressive; why would someone tell stories like she did?
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Rosemary, The Legend of Sullivan's Hollow was true. Whether he killed as many as seventy couldn't be proved. Yes, the girl was real and she did get in trouble. It was fault of wanting a friend so badly that I listened to her.
Comment from zanya
A thoroughly enjoyable read, told with a dash of humor, giving a glimpse of school life and new neighbours leading to new and maybe 'questionable' experiences!!
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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A thoroughly enjoyable read, told with a dash of humor, giving a glimpse of school life and new neighbours leading to new and maybe 'questionable' experiences!!
Comment Written 14-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 14-Jan-2022
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Thank you Zanya, I'm glad you like my story. It was a good thing I decided not to hang out with her after she tried to say it was my idea. I decided I didn't need the kind of trouble she was going to get me into.
Beth
Comment from Ulla
Hi Beth, I think you've written a very good story considering all the constrictions what you could be actually write about. That it's lovely based on a true story makes it even better. I hope it will do very well in the contest. Ulla:)))
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Hi Beth, I think you've written a very good story considering all the constrictions what you could be actually write about. That it's lovely based on a true story makes it even better. I hope it will do very well in the contest. Ulla:)))
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank you Ulla. I appreciate you comments and good wishes.
Beth
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Good writing. Thank you.
You're not going to disclose the girl's punishment? I'm guessing that family's idea of punishment was a stern look and fifteen seconds of exile/separation.
"Her daddy" shouldn't be capitalized.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Good writing. Thank you.
You're not going to disclose the girl's punishment? I'm guessing that family's idea of punishment was a stern look and fifteen seconds of exile/separation.
"Her daddy" shouldn't be capitalized.
Comment Written 13-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the review. I'm ashamed to say I lied about being involved. My parents were not totally convinced I was, so the punishment was that they didn't trust anything I said or did for quite a while.
Beth
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Punishment in my house involved a leather belt.
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I've been punished with a leather belt and might have been that time if they were sure I was involved.
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I've been punished with a leather belt and might have been that time if they were sure I was involved.
Comment from Ben Colder
I doubt this is fiction. LOL. Poor Turnip Joe, the victim of two girls out to do him in. I've done worse in real and lived to regret it--a good one, Beth. I hope you win the contest.
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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I doubt this is fiction. LOL. Poor Turnip Joe, the victim of two girls out to do him in. I've done worse in real and lived to regret it--a good one, Beth. I hope you win the contest.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 13-Jan-2022
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You are correct. Most of it is true. Sullivan's Hollow is real and I even used the real names or those two kids. I was kind of mean to Joe. My grandmother had a radio that got more stations because they had an antennae. I went there to hear Sky King and other kid shows and he came to hear the news. I'd try to force him to leave. I was bad.
Beth
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Just being a spoiled brat.
Comment from Spitfire
Great entry. You capture the vernacular speech in this writing. A man as a gossip--there's a twist. Your interest at making a new friend in that wasteland! Fine details of the stories she told and how she sucked you into a questionable life style.
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Great entry. You capture the vernacular speech in this writing. A man as a gossip--there's a twist. Your interest at making a new friend in that wasteland! Fine details of the stories she told and how she sucked you into a questionable life style.
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the excellent review and comments. I'm glad you liked my story.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
A great story, about friendships and influences of friends, resulting from two very different styles of parenting! Your story was well written and maintained the interest, both in style of writing and in content. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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A great story, about friendships and influences of friends, resulting from two very different styles of parenting! Your story was well written and maintained the interest, both in style of writing and in content. Best wishes for your entry.
Wendy
Comment Written 12-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 12-Jan-2022
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Thank you Wendy. I really appreciate the review on this story and you comments.
Beth
