After the Storm
A quatrain about a big storm18 total reviews
Comment from Joanne Gill-Maddick
This is a nicely written quatrain haven't attempted this one. Nice overall presentation. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This is a nicely written quatrain haven't attempted this one. Nice overall presentation. Beautiful photo to compliment your words as well. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much, Joanne, for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from Paul McFarland
A very good description of the aftermath of a snowstorm. We are very familiar with those storms here in Maine. I have written a few poems about them also.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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A very good description of the aftermath of a snowstorm. We are very familiar with those storms here in Maine. I have written a few poems about them also.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I bet you have written memorable poems about Maine snowstorms, Paul. I don?t envy you this weekend. Many thanks for sharing and praising my poem.
Comment from Sally Law
This is beautiful quatrains of poetry. A stroll in the snow sounds lovely, once a person digs out. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
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This is beautiful quatrains of poetry. A stroll in the snow sounds lovely, once a person digs out. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Sally, for taking a stroll in the snow with me and your kind praise.
Comment from Gee
Nicely done quatrain.
I am so glad I live in the south and don't have to deal with the snow.
I hope you do well in the competition
And thanks for sharing it is appreciated.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Nicely done quatrain.
I am so glad I live in the south and don't have to deal with the snow.
I hope you do well in the competition
And thanks for sharing it is appreciated.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I wish I lived in the South. Today we got snow again. Many thanks for sharing my poem.
Comment from royowen
You're certainly getting a lot of snowy weather, which I must say, one would be have to pretty hardy to be outside in thst sort of weather, nicely written in abcb rhyming quatrains, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : It's hard to (trod) (wrong tense) through snow-clogged streets, tread?
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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You're certainly getting a lot of snowy weather, which I must say, one would be have to pretty hardy to be outside in thst sort of weather, nicely written in abcb rhyming quatrains, well done, good luck, blessings Roy
Typo : It's hard to (trod) (wrong tense) through snow-clogged streets, tread?
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Roy, for stopping by and sharing my poem. We are definitely getting our share of snow, but fortunately we haven?t been hit as hard as New England.
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It would be up ther
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A fine poem with some good descriptions, I enjoyed the scenes here. Just one suggestion for this line:
This line is out of meter:
"Victorian houses fringe the street,"
try
"Victorian (home) fringe the street,"
Love Dolly x
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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A fine poem with some good descriptions, I enjoyed the scenes here. Just one suggestion for this line:
This line is out of meter:
"Victorian houses fringe the street,"
try
"Victorian (home) fringe the street,"
Love Dolly x
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you, Dolly, for sharing my poem and your suggestion. I think we Americans mispronounce VICTORIAN. I slur the syllables so it sounds like Vic-TOR-yan.
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Okay Rod, I forgive you for your American accent! Ha ha ha, love Dolly x
Comment from DragonBlue1
What your poem made me think/feel:
This poem reminded me of a short story I wrote not too long ago about a town such as yours, that once one drove into it, they could never leave. I love winter time and the crisp air and snow. I like your pen, it is refreshing.
Structure Challenges:
I liked your rhyme and near rhyme stanzas but the second stanza threw me off a bit. Does "cliffs" and "roofs" rhyme? OMHO
Overall Impression(s):
Your pen was metered and had a flow to the stanzas, almost a cadence. Please do write on!
Peace Out~
)O(
DragonBlue
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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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What your poem made me think/feel:
This poem reminded me of a short story I wrote not too long ago about a town such as yours, that once one drove into it, they could never leave. I love winter time and the crisp air and snow. I like your pen, it is refreshing.
Structure Challenges:
I liked your rhyme and near rhyme stanzas but the second stanza threw me off a bit. Does "cliffs" and "roofs" rhyme? OMHO
Overall Impression(s):
Your pen was metered and had a flow to the stanzas, almost a cadence. Please do write on!
Peace Out~
)O(
DragonBlue
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you so. Much, DragonBlue, for taking the time to read and comment on my poem. You are correct about CLIFFS and ROOFS not being true rhymes. I did take poetic license here and won?t apologize.
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Nope, I would not either. Great pen anyway. Write On!
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Right after replying to your review, the CEC judges said I?d be disqualified if I did not change those ?rhymes? you pointed out. I relented. Please read my revision.
Comment from pome lover
That is really good, and I can almost feel it, having lived in Colorado for a few years. Here, in Texas, yesterday was 70 degrees and Sunday we're supposed to be 28 at night. All my flowers are blooming. sigh.
I enjoyed your poem. You painted a realistic scene and your meter and rhyme were lovely.
Katharine
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That is really good, and I can almost feel it, having lived in Colorado for a few years. Here, in Texas, yesterday was 70 degrees and Sunday we're supposed to be 28 at night. All my flowers are blooming. sigh.
I enjoyed your poem. You painted a realistic scene and your meter and rhyme were lovely.
Katharine
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Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much, Katharine, for your kind praise of my poem. You Texans are lucky to be getting 70s even if the temp drops at night.
