Comment from Karen Estep

Excellent

A fun tale with an unexpected ending!! You did a great job
describing a day at the beach. I enjoyed your graphic also!
Good luck in the contest and keep on writing!

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022

Comment from Paul McFarland

Excellent

Very well done. You drag the reader along for the ride. Then you pull the rug out from under him/her in the last line. That was a clever way of finishing things up.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022

Comment from sherrygreywolf

Excellent

Wonderful memories of the beach myself and this poem brought them back and made me smile. Your poem paints a vivid word picture of a day at the beach - you should do well in the contest.

 Comment Written 16-Jan-2022

Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose

Excellent

Excellent entry for the Summer Fun writing prompt contest.

Your poem reminded me of vacations at the beach that I loved so much.

Good luck in the contest.

Gypsy

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022

Thank you!

Comment from Rosemary Everson1

Excellent

What a fun poem. Summer is a time for some fun. You like to lie on the beach, read some magazines, collect shells, watch the birds, jet skiing? or take a dip in the pool. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

Comment from Anne Johnston

Excellent

Great rhyming poem for this summer fun contest. I can understand why people like spending time at the beach, lying in the sun, swimming, and just relaxing. I am not a swimmer, so it doesn't appeal to me.

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

Comment from Sally Law

Excellent

This is a fun one and aptly illustrated. Summer is far away, but it keeps us hopeful as we daydream about smooching in the sand and sun.

Sending you my best today as always, and my very best for the upcoming contest,
Sally :))

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Wonderful poem, I echo every thought you have expressed so well. It is smooth, lovely rhyme, includes a bit of humour - an excellent entry and I wish you success.
Wendy

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

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reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022

I lied in this poem - I don't actually like lying in the sun, getting fried. And the beaches I enjoy hardly ever have people, so there aren't any lifesavers. The rest of it is true though.

reply by Wendy G on 15-Jan-2022

Okay, so I lied too. It's what I used to do in my youth! Skin problems and cancers are the result ... paying the price now.

reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022

I know what you mean - that Aussie sun is vicious. I have some crusty blemishes too.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

I love this uplifting well rhymed and metered write filled with fun on the beach and I felt the heat oozing from this poem, a great entry of summer fun for the contest, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022

Comment from DragonBlue1

Excellent

What your poem made me think/feel:
Though I have not spent many summers near the ocean, (the last time I was there, I was 16, I'm now 57), I remember it very well. This poem reminded me of the Beach Boys - Good Vibrations.

Structure Challenge(s):
I saw none, and I did look.

Overall Impression(s):
Perfect rhythm and rhyme, from beginning to end. Good luck in your contest. Please do write on!

Peace Out~
)O(
DragonBlue

 Comment Written 15-Jan-2022