Sick to death ...
Too late ...15 total reviews
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Outstanding entry for the Supernatural Fiction - Not Horror writing prompt contest. I thought of Jesus and Lazarus. You followed the rules well. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Outstanding entry for the Supernatural Fiction - Not Horror writing prompt contest. I thought of Jesus and Lazarus. You followed the rules well. Good luck in the contest.
Gypsy
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Thanks so much Gypsy. I appreciate your positive words and good wishes.
Wendy
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I voted for you.
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Thank you so much! Honoured.
Wendy
Comment from Rosemary Everson1
oh goodness; the power of incarnation...the earth shook, and the tomb must have opened. Being alive and not dead can-do justice to many who believe in spirits. But was he a spirit or truly alive?
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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oh goodness; the power of incarnation...the earth shook, and the tomb must have opened. Being alive and not dead can-do justice to many who believe in spirits. But was he a spirit or truly alive?
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Apparently in the Biblical account he really came back to physical life. Imagine the media coverage if it happened today! Many thanks for a super review.
Wendy
Comment from cupa tea
Nevertheless(,) they took him to the graveyard. He looked at the plot, and wept. So he did care!
I'm not sure about this story. I think it's a wonderful beginning for a story; however, not the whole story.
I only saw the one error. Your sentences are strong and contain lots of action, and it was well told.
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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Nevertheless(,) they took him to the graveyard. He looked at the plot, and wept. So he did care!
I'm not sure about this story. I think it's a wonderful beginning for a story; however, not the whole story.
I only saw the one error. Your sentences are strong and contain lots of action, and it was well told.
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 18-Jan-2022
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It is a story from the Bible, (John 11), put into a modern setting - and it did really happen. Many eye witnesses. Of course that was because the friend was Jesus, and He is all powerful, and claimed to be the source of Life. Totally supernatural. Thanks for your thoughtful comments. I appreciate them!
Wendy
Comment from lyenochka
I recognized the story of Lazarus and Mary and Martha right away. That would be an astounding thing to have that happen in our day. And during their day, it wasn't clear to Mary and Martha that Jesus was not just a special friend but the God of all, the Way and the Life.
You might want to say this is a re-telling. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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I recognized the story of Lazarus and Mary and Martha right away. That would be an astounding thing to have that happen in our day. And during their day, it wasn't clear to Mary and Martha that Jesus was not just a special friend but the God of all, the Way and the Life.
You might want to say this is a re-telling. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 17-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 17-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much Helen, a super review. Good idea.
Wendy
Comment from Judy Lawless
Well done, Wendy. You've created an interesting piece of supernatural fiction, based on a story from the Bible, but in modern day context. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Well done, Wendy. You've created an interesting piece of supernatural fiction, based on a story from the Bible, but in modern day context. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much Judy, both for your review and for your good wishes. Both are much appreciated.
Wendy
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You?re most welcome, Wendy.
Comment from lancellot
Very interesting. I quick short story, in the style of the Goosebumps pocket novels. They were as this seems to be, meant for younger readers who want something of a quick jump scare, and not ask too many questions.
Good work.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Very interesting. I quick short story, in the style of the Goosebumps pocket novels. They were as this seems to be, meant for younger readers who want something of a quick jump scare, and not ask too many questions.
Good work.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you so much for your review. I am not aware of those pocket novels (I am Australian).
Wendy
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Fantastic! You totally got me, the ending being such a surprise.
I loved the story all the more getting to its end.
Good luck with your writing. I hope to find more.
Please forgive the disjointed nature of this review. Sometimes getting the required 150 characters is a chore.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Fantastic! You totally got me, the ending being such a surprise.
I loved the story all the more getting to its end.
Good luck with your writing. I hope to find more.
Please forgive the disjointed nature of this review. Sometimes getting the required 150 characters is a chore.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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That's fine - I appreciate your review, and it is sometimes very hard to write 150 characters! I am very glad you enjoyed it.
Wendy
Comment from Annmuma
This work meets every contest requirement and is well written. The imagery great and the basis for the story comes through loud and clear. Good luck in the contest. ann
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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This work meets every contest requirement and is well written. The imagery great and the basis for the story comes through loud and clear. Good luck in the contest. ann
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you very much Ann! What a great review. Greatly appreciated, as always. (My first supernatural story, but I'm not into ghosts.)
Wendy
Comment from BethShelby
I wonder if what happened in that day with Mary and Martha was as earth-shaking as it would be today if something like that happened. We've heard the story so many times we aren't really shocked by it but if it happened today, I can imagine all the media coverage it would get. Nicely done.
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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I wonder if what happened in that day with Mary and Martha was as earth-shaking as it would be today if something like that happened. We've heard the story so many times we aren't really shocked by it but if it happened today, I can imagine all the media coverage it would get. Nicely done.
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 15-Jan-2022
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Thank you Beth. Great review. Yes, it was an unbelievable situation. In those days it would have been just word of mouth!
Wendy
Comment from Pantygynt
These 'resurrection stories' are a well established part of English (and other countries' folk lore.
Hear Steeleye Span sing one of them here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R9u4odGBfFg
or read the ballad here:
The Wife of Ushers Well
There lived a wife in Ushers Well
A wealthy wife was she
She had three stout and stalwart sons
And sent them o'er the sea
They had not been from Ushers Well
A week but barely one
When word came to this carlin wife
That her three sons were gone
I wish the wind may never cease
Nor flashes in the flood
Till my three sons return to me
In earthly flesh and blood
It fell about the Martinmas
The nights were long and dark
Three sons came home to Ushers Well
Their hats were made of bark
That neither grew in forest green
Nor on any wooded rise
But from the north side of the tree
That grows in Paradise
Blow up the fire my merry merry maidens
Bring water from the well
For all my house shall feed this night
Since my three sons are well
Then up and crowed the blood red cock
And up and crowed the grey
The oldest to the youngest said
It's time we were away
For the cock does crow and the day doth show
And the channerin worm doth chide
And we must go from Ushers Well
To the gates of Paradise
I wish the wind may never cease
Nor flashes in the flood
Till my three sons return to me
In earthly flesh and blood
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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These 'resurrection stories' are a well established part of English (and other countries' folk lore.
Hear Steeleye Span sing one of them here:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=R9u4odGBfFg
or read the ballad here:
The Wife of Ushers Well
There lived a wife in Ushers Well
A wealthy wife was she
She had three stout and stalwart sons
And sent them o'er the sea
They had not been from Ushers Well
A week but barely one
When word came to this carlin wife
That her three sons were gone
I wish the wind may never cease
Nor flashes in the flood
Till my three sons return to me
In earthly flesh and blood
It fell about the Martinmas
The nights were long and dark
Three sons came home to Ushers Well
Their hats were made of bark
That neither grew in forest green
Nor on any wooded rise
But from the north side of the tree
That grows in Paradise
Blow up the fire my merry merry maidens
Bring water from the well
For all my house shall feed this night
Since my three sons are well
Then up and crowed the blood red cock
And up and crowed the grey
The oldest to the youngest said
It's time we were away
For the cock does crow and the day doth show
And the channerin worm doth chide
And we must go from Ushers Well
To the gates of Paradise
I wish the wind may never cease
Nor flashes in the flood
Till my three sons return to me
In earthly flesh and blood
Comment Written 15-Jan-2022
reply by the author on 16-Jan-2022
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Thank you for the song - I listened and enjoyed it. I wonder if the resurrection stories all started after the Biblical account of Lazarus, and the hope became very rel that it would happen again for them.
Wendy
